A Particular Friendship
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 " No Particular Friendships "We meet Lizzy who has just come out of the convent
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Comment from patcelaw
I could not have been a part of the group. I am a very people oriented person, and I make friends easily and I am easily hurt when others put me down or put me to shame for something that I did not do. I know that this must have been a painful chapter for you to write and I appreciate you writing and sharing it with us. Patricia.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2023
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I could not have been a part of the group. I am a very people oriented person, and I make friends easily and I am easily hurt when others put me down or put me to shame for something that I did not do. I know that this must have been a painful chapter for you to write and I appreciate you writing and sharing it with us. Patricia.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2023
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Thank you for your caring compassionate review. I appreciate it. This has been a healing experience.
Comment from Jasmine Girl
The author's exploration of how Lizzy copes with this emotional turmoil is both raw and deeply relatable. The use of "numbing herself" as a coping mechanism is a stark reminder of the universal human tendency to seek refuge from pain, even in ways that might not be conducive to healing. The symbolic significance of sugar as a means of escape adds a layer of poignancy, underscoring the lengths to which Lizzy goes to find solace.
Well done.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2023
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The author's exploration of how Lizzy copes with this emotional turmoil is both raw and deeply relatable. The use of "numbing herself" as a coping mechanism is a stark reminder of the universal human tendency to seek refuge from pain, even in ways that might not be conducive to healing. The symbolic significance of sugar as a means of escape adds a layer of poignancy, underscoring the lengths to which Lizzy goes to find solace.
Well done.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2023
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Thank you for your caring compassionate review. I appreciate it. This has been a healing experience.
Comment from Teri7
Liz, This is a very interesting and very well written chapter you have penned. I really don't know how you put up with it for as long as you did. You used great descriptive words. love and blessings, teri
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2023
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Liz, This is a very interesting and very well written chapter you have penned. I really don't know how you put up with it for as long as you did. You used great descriptive words. love and blessings, teri
Comment Written 18-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2023
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Thank you for your caring involved review. I appreciate it. I think this functional relationships are like if you and I were sitting and it began to become dark but we didn't really notice it it didn't click in our head. Then one of us says oh my gosh we need to turn the light on it's getting dark and then the other person said it. That's what progressively dysfunctional relationships are like it's not obvious at once it has to seep it and then what do you do?
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so very true!😊😊😊
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this heartbreaking chapter with us. I can't say I actually enjoyed reading because of the emotion it evoked, but it is very well written. I know it had be painful to write, I could feel it as I read, but I happy to hear that it helped in healing. I am sure it will help others, also.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2023
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Thank you for sharing this heartbreaking chapter with us. I can't say I actually enjoyed reading because of the emotion it evoked, but it is very well written. I know it had be painful to write, I could feel it as I read, but I happy to hear that it helped in healing. I am sure it will help others, also.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2023
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Thank you for your caring and involved review I appreciate it.
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
This is a very strong and well written story. There are extra letters and symbols that I also get when I edit so it would be a good idea for you to read through once more to find those
I wanted to tell you that quickly so you can fix those and your wonderful work will be able to shine through.
I'm sure this was very difficult to write and to experience at all. You must have winder how many of those elder nums were hypocrites im relationship themselves. Maybe your relationship was to close to them themselves being found out. Hmm?
For other reasons that I've shared here, my young life was a domino effect of hitting my head against walls then movie ever since one 6'3" all American type athletic guy decided to attack me right as I was explaining to him that I was waiting until I was married and I actually through in that I might have waited to become a nun. Naively I thought he would say I understand. Then he would learn my super safety plan next I had my under garments on. I was so innocent I thought that was game over for him.
I make the mistake of being dorm president and he was vice president I wouldn't have been there with him otherwise.
I know the few times I've mentioned that in writing here I felt vulnerable but it is ok. The sooner you make reality known the sooner you will feel more complete.
Anyone that knows you here should be nothing but proud of you. I'm proud of you. In a couple weeks I will sharing a bon fiction story and also book for young teens that I've been writing and illustrating.
I knew of high school boys who hung themselves because they couldn't share who they were. That is what is driving my stories. Smart people here will be glad for you. More Power to You!! You are an example to others who will not live in the dark shadows of convents just to be themselves.
Best wishes to you,
Alexandra :))
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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2023
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This is a very strong and well written story. There are extra letters and symbols that I also get when I edit so it would be a good idea for you to read through once more to find those
I wanted to tell you that quickly so you can fix those and your wonderful work will be able to shine through.
I'm sure this was very difficult to write and to experience at all. You must have winder how many of those elder nums were hypocrites im relationship themselves. Maybe your relationship was to close to them themselves being found out. Hmm?
For other reasons that I've shared here, my young life was a domino effect of hitting my head against walls then movie ever since one 6'3" all American type athletic guy decided to attack me right as I was explaining to him that I was waiting until I was married and I actually through in that I might have waited to become a nun. Naively I thought he would say I understand. Then he would learn my super safety plan next I had my under garments on. I was so innocent I thought that was game over for him.
I make the mistake of being dorm president and he was vice president I wouldn't have been there with him otherwise.
I know the few times I've mentioned that in writing here I felt vulnerable but it is ok. The sooner you make reality known the sooner you will feel more complete.
Anyone that knows you here should be nothing but proud of you. I'm proud of you. In a couple weeks I will sharing a bon fiction story and also book for young teens that I've been writing and illustrating.
I knew of high school boys who hung themselves because they couldn't share who they were. That is what is driving my stories. Smart people here will be glad for you. More Power to You!! You are an example to others who will not live in the dark shadows of convents just to be themselves.
Best wishes to you,
Alexandra :))
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Comment Written 18-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2023
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Wow this is powerful I will be reading this again you brought tears to my eyes when you spoke so highly of me and of my courage I see your courage too we are both examples there's another one on here too it isn't afraid to write about her vulnerability to share her vulnerability Jessizero. She gives me courage. You, she & I & a few others pass our courage forward. Thank you.
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Yes. Proud to be in such a group. Of course you're welcome. :))
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***Hug hug***
Comment from Jay Squires
I see from your author's notes that writing this chapter was difficult, but healing. I can understand that.
I have one general question. Why does Lizzie's persona break into the narrative in quotes. The narrator is an unidentified person, but not Lizzie. It's just that there is no clear distinction between the Narrator and Lizzie ... except for the quotation marks. That raises the question, why do you need a narrator at all? Why not tell the story from Lizzie's point of view entirely?
It looks like I missed the first two chapters, largely because I've been away from Fanstory a lot. But I have been looking forward to digging into your memoirs. So far, I'm intrigued by it.
Jay
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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2023
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I see from your author's notes that writing this chapter was difficult, but healing. I can understand that.
I have one general question. Why does Lizzie's persona break into the narrative in quotes. The narrator is an unidentified person, but not Lizzie. It's just that there is no clear distinction between the Narrator and Lizzie ... except for the quotation marks. That raises the question, why do you need a narrator at all? Why not tell the story from Lizzie's point of view entirely?
It looks like I missed the first two chapters, largely because I've been away from Fanstory a lot. But I have been looking forward to digging into your memoirs. So far, I'm intrigued by it.
Jay
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Comment Written 17-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2023
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Thank you for your involved review. I hope your being away as often is not for any unpleasant reason. Let me reflect on your question & get my responses to you.
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No, no, nothing unpleasant. Well, actually unpleasant, but in an Amazon Publishing problem kind of way.
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So are you publishing on Amazon?
My third book of Be Wee With Bea was too late to be part of the package of my other 5 books. So I'm wondering what that involves. I do not want to spend any more $$ on my books.
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Yes, I published my short story collection, a novelette, and Book one through four of my mega-novel, The Trining. I'm working on the final book five, which should be out by the end of September. But it is HARD work, Liz. Especially the paperbacks.
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So what assistance did you get & was there much expense? I did one book with iUniverse & spent $ 60,000. That was my savings from when I was working. Now I'm on Soc Sec. A different picture.
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OMG, Liz. $60,000! And may I ask how much of that did you recoup from your sales? There is no cost for publishing on Amazon, either for Kindle, paperback, or even hardcover. But unless you are prepared to market your books, it will be money flushed down the toilet. And it does take a lot of time to master the process of getting the books published. You have to do all the work yourself. There are several people here, though, who have done it. It is doable. Let me know when you are ready and I can point you in the right direction and help you get started.
Jay
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Really, no cost? I got $79 in royalties. I understand I followed the naive pattern of many. They appealed to my ego. It was in the marketing. I believe they did what they said they would. My friend saw and add for my book in Readers Digest. It just all amounted to basically nothing. I will have to look into Amazon...thank you.
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I was guilty of falling for that with my first novel. The "publisher" was "PublishAmerica". And they made a ton of money off the backs of green writers like me. So don't feel bad about that.
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Oh, I'm angry for your deception but I don't feel alone.
