One Thousand Cranes
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Comment from lyenochka
Oh, I like it! I see you got to use the "cirrus clouds" and ooh what a lot of alliteration you used! Enjoyed the cloud reference and imagining the gazelles! A poem for nephophiles (cloud lovers!)
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
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Oh, I like it! I see you got to use the "cirrus clouds" and ooh what a lot of alliteration you used! Enjoyed the cloud reference and imagining the gazelles! A poem for nephophiles (cloud lovers!)
Comment Written 03-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
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nephophiles is an interesting word, it almost sounds like necrophiliacs... A very different meaning LoL
Thank you very much for inspiring me to write this poem. Citrus is a lovely word.
Thank you very much for your review and kind feedback, I really appreciate it. Blessings.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Teri7
Gypsy, This is a very beautiful and very well written 5-7-5 poem about graceful gazelle. You used very good descriptive words and very lovely imagery. Thank you for sharing. love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
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Gypsy, This is a very beautiful and very well written 5-7-5 poem about graceful gazelle. You used very good descriptive words and very lovely imagery. Thank you for sharing. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 02-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
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Thank you very much for your review and kind feedback, I really appreciate it. Blessings.
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Comment from AP Apgar
I like your poem- very clever- I can picture gazelles below grazing on the hillside watching the clouds go by without a care in the world- good job--
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
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I like your poem- very clever- I can picture gazelles below grazing on the hillside watching the clouds go by without a care in the world- good job--
Comment Written 02-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
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Thank you very much, AP. Blessings.
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Comment from Aiona
So much alliteration. It follows the 5-7-5 syllable format. I had to Google the syllables in "celestial" because when I say it, it has four syllables! LOL! But yes, it's three. I just pronounce the dipthong weirdly. In the American South, even "coin" is a two-syllable word. Lovely poem.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2022
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So much alliteration. It follows the 5-7-5 syllable format. I had to Google the syllables in "celestial" because when I say it, it has four syllables! LOL! But yes, it's three. I just pronounce the dipthong weirdly. In the American South, even "coin" is a two-syllable word. Lovely poem.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2022
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Thank you very much for your review and feedback, I appreciate it.
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Comment from MJK
I just simply adore the fun word choice in this piece -- the alliteration and the cloud imagery create such a pleasing sound in the reader's head. I also love the way you set up the closing line with a dash, so we slow down in a way that mimics the subtlety of their movement.
At first I tried to look for some real-world meaning, but then told myself that clearly wasn't the goal. Rather, it's like a Dr. Seuss moment of fantasy, but with a literate adult audience in mind.
Hope I "got" it the way you intended. Thanks for the fun imagery!
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2022
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I just simply adore the fun word choice in this piece -- the alliteration and the cloud imagery create such a pleasing sound in the reader's head. I also love the way you set up the closing line with a dash, so we slow down in a way that mimics the subtlety of their movement.
At first I tried to look for some real-world meaning, but then told myself that clearly wasn't the goal. Rather, it's like a Dr. Seuss moment of fantasy, but with a literate adult audience in mind.
Hope I "got" it the way you intended. Thanks for the fun imagery!
Comment Written 02-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2022
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With haiku and 5/7/5 poems you never get it wrong, it's a personal interpretation. You nailed it.
Thank you very much for your review and feedback, I appreciate it.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Frank Jauregui
Nicely written 5-7-5. Each line is grammatically connected and flows well, throughout. The image you chose pairs up perfectly with your work. The triple "G" repetition on the first line sets up the remainder of the work and gets it moving forward in an orderly fashion. Well done!
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2022
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Nicely written 5-7-5. Each line is grammatically connected and flows well, throughout. The image you chose pairs up perfectly with your work. The triple "G" repetition on the first line sets up the remainder of the work and gets it moving forward in an orderly fashion. Well done!
Comment Written 02-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2022
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Thank you very much for your review and feedback, I appreciate it.
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Comment from Ricky1024
"Graceful Gazelle"
A 5/7/5 Poem.
Speaks of the gazelles in the clouds.
It's always fun to look up at the clouds and try to come up with your own personal thoughts.
And, then realize the different designs that God paints for us.
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This was well written Rich in Theme and Imagery.
Thanks for sharing.
Doctor Ricky 1024
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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2022
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"Graceful Gazelle"
A 5/7/5 Poem.
Speaks of the gazelles in the clouds.
It's always fun to look up at the clouds and try to come up with your own personal thoughts.
And, then realize the different designs that God paints for us.
...
This was well written Rich in Theme and Imagery.
Thanks for sharing.
Doctor Ricky 1024
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Comment Written 02-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2022
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Thank you very much for your review and feedback, I appreciate it.
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Comment from Kayte Ray
Nicely written I like the way the rhythm of this feels like it comes together while you are reading. This has a very natural flow to it that I appreciate
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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2022
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Nicely written I like the way the rhythm of this feels like it comes together while you are reading. This has a very natural flow to it that I appreciate
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Comment Written 02-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2022
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Thank you very much for your review and feedback, I appreciate it.
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