Sturdy Roots
Withered cornhusks weigh on the mind29 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
I can feel the connection between farmer and his land. The poem is meaningful and the rhyme and meter is well done, it doesn't feel forced.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Â Atticus
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I can feel the connection between farmer and his land. The poem is meaningful and the rhyme and meter is well done, it doesn't feel forced.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Â Atticus
Comment Written 13-Mar-2025
Comment from Boogienights
I don't know much about farming, but it's clear, the turmoil going on in this man's mind. Starting full of doubt and anguish, only to end up in a state of peace. I love this poem, thanks for sharing.
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I don't know much about farming, but it's clear, the turmoil going on in this man's mind. Starting full of doubt and anguish, only to end up in a state of peace. I love this poem, thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2025
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Good artwork, Pam. They look like fingers to me.
-Your notes are appreciated.
-You wrote a very good poem
with effective imagery and rhyme.
-You create a good word picture
of what this man is going through,
starting with the first line.
-The one about the mulch is also good.
-The second verse shows how difficult
it is for him because no one pays
attention to him and his difficulties.
-The next verse shows how he hopes to improve.
-You ask a good question in the last verse
and answer it with how he sees the tender
corn that's grown from sturdy roots.
-Very well done.
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-Good artwork, Pam. They look like fingers to me.
-Your notes are appreciated.
-You wrote a very good poem
with effective imagery and rhyme.
-You create a good word picture
of what this man is going through,
starting with the first line.
-The one about the mulch is also good.
-The second verse shows how difficult
it is for him because no one pays
attention to him and his difficulties.
-The next verse shows how he hopes to improve.
-You ask a good question in the last verse
and answer it with how he sees the tender
corn that's grown from sturdy roots.
-Very well done.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2025
Comment from Wayne Fowler
I'm not sure why his mind is muddled. Or why he's crying. Why us he calling for help? Does he suffer from some mental disorder?
"But does this image clear his mind?" - What is the image?
Nice rhyming and a good 'feel' in your poem.
Best wishes.
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I'm not sure why his mind is muddled. Or why he's crying. Why us he calling for help? Does he suffer from some mental disorder?
"But does this image clear his mind?" - What is the image?
Nice rhyming and a good 'feel' in your poem.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2025
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Pam,
This sounds like a man fight depression or maybe some other form of mental illness. But firm roots in self esteem and faith can bring him out of it.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Have a nice day.
Joan
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Hi Pam,
This sounds like a man fight depression or maybe some other form of mental illness. But firm roots in self esteem and faith can bring him out of it.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Have a nice day.
Joan
Comment Written 13-Mar-2025
Comment from Stacy M.S.
I always appreciate poems written about nature.
You have so many descriptions here of the garden, the sun, crops and then the idea of the animals and creatures that may inhabit it.
And, I agree...when the roots are grounded, everything else will eventually fall into perfect place.
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I always appreciate poems written about nature.
You have so many descriptions here of the garden, the sun, crops and then the idea of the animals and creatures that may inhabit it.
And, I agree...when the roots are grounded, everything else will eventually fall into perfect place.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2025
Comment from Mia Twysted
Roots in the mind are just as crucial as roots in the ground. We need sturdyness under our feet to help us feel secure. Once we feel secure, we can reach out and feel for the sun.
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Roots in the mind are just as crucial as roots in the ground. We need sturdyness under our feet to help us feel secure. Once we feel secure, we can reach out and feel for the sun.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2025
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
This is an excellent poem and supportive presentation. understood the poem because my dad lived to a few months short of 100. My mom died 3 years earlier and that's when he became confused but prior he was completely lucid still. This analogy is very good and if I understand correctly with the strong roots inside, a person can fight against the effects of dementia or aging. I hope I understood.
I enjoyed reading and reviewing this.
Best wishes,
Alex
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This is an excellent poem and supportive presentation. understood the poem because my dad lived to a few months short of 100. My mom died 3 years earlier and that's when he became confused but prior he was completely lucid still. This analogy is very good and if I understand correctly with the strong roots inside, a person can fight against the effects of dementia or aging. I hope I understood.
I enjoyed reading and reviewing this.
Best wishes,
Alex
Comment Written 12-Mar-2025
Comment from Neonewman
I love corn on the cob, best when it's fresh. This is an excellent way of describing what the farmers go through. Just because it's planted, doesn't mean it will reach fruition.
Great work, Pam.
God bless,
Steve
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I love corn on the cob, best when it's fresh. This is an excellent way of describing what the farmers go through. Just because it's planted, doesn't mean it will reach fruition.
Great work, Pam.
God bless,
Steve
Comment Written 11-Mar-2025
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, Sturdy Roots, presented with four octaves, seems to work the plans, the work, the potential failure, and the eventual bounce back within the dreams of the farmer.
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This poem, Sturdy Roots, presented with four octaves, seems to work the plans, the work, the potential failure, and the eventual bounce back within the dreams of the farmer.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2025
