Commentary and Philosophy Poetry posted October 14, 2014 Chapters:  ...122 123 -124- 125... 


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Echo Quintain

A chapter in the book Commentary and Philosophy

Victim

by Treischel

How oft' my heart gets broken
Disappointment creeping in
These scars are left as token
Of your patience wearing thin
Your patience wearing thin

You'd think by now I'd harden
Like a scab upon a sore
But still, I beg your pardon
And keep coming back for more
Coming back for more

My nature bleeds forgiveness
As I feel for all mankind
There's much unfinished business
That keeps troubling my mind
Keeps troubling my mind

I pray that I might change you
And that things won't stay the same
Often feel the things we go through
That it's somehow me to blame
Somehow me to blame

I keep on turning faces
As I'm slapped upon my cheek
Bruised and beaten spaces
The rewards of being meek
Of being meek

My only means of coping
And being a poor bettor
Is still to keep on hoping
Tomorrow will be better
Tomorrow will be better






This is just a poem unrelated to anything currently going on in my life.

So often the victim of abuse believes that they are to blame. Somehow it is their inadequacy that caused the incident. Then their desire to be loved, forgiven, and changed kicks in to gear. I tried to capture that here.

This poem is a Quintain.
A quintain is a poem of 5 lines. What make this an Echo is the fifth line repeating all or part of the fourth line. This gives is a dramatic impact.
The rhyme scheme is: ababb.
The meter here is to a count of 7.

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