Commentary and Philosophy Poetry posted April 25, 2014 Chapters:  ...110 111 -112- 113... 


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A Figure Eight Poem

A chapter in the book Commentary and Philosophy

Ghosts of Past Progress

by Treischel


Everywhere ghosts of past progress
stand mute to former noblesse.
Once shining business, now dispossess
their gilded dreams,
or so it seems.
Their walls, once pillars of commerce,
bear fates that are now quite converse,
as misfortune turned for the worse.

Solid visions - gone up in smoke,
now just a ruin, windows all broke,
festooned with graffiti's art stroke.
Once a fine place,
Now empty space.
Its model foundations were strong.
The leaders who brought it along,
now wonder, "Where did it go wrong?"







This abandoned building was once the lower train depot for downtown St. Paul, Minnesota. Once a bustling business in the hayday of the train industry, it now stands empty, a home for pigeons and vagabonds. Examples like this can be found in many cities across the USA.

This poem is a Figure Eight poem.
The Figure Eight format was created by this author. Several reviewers suggested that it take a name. Wackydo, a fellow Fanstorian, suggested this name because the wide upper and lower portion with a tighter center suggests the form of an 8.
Here is the structure. Each stanza has a syllable count of:
8-8-8-4-4-8-8-8
The rhyme scheme is: aaabbccc
There can be any number of stanzas.
There is no requirement for a specific meter, just an adherence to the syllable count.

This photograph was taken by the author himself.
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