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a New Form with closing Couplet
A chapter in the book Commentary and Philosophy
To Spare the Rod
by Treischel
To Spare the Rod
(A New Form) I really like to be amused, And hate it if I get abused, When life's conditions have me bruised Along the ardent pathways used. Used to be such a simple man, Bruised before my life's tale began. Abused because it was God's plan. Amused there's now a spanking ban. Ban is now the context of law. Plan replaced any perceived flaw, Began enlightened treatment thaw, Man from violence must withdraw. Withdraw Old Testament's crude thought. Thaw it to the message Christ brought. Flaw of strictness is overwrought. Law correction fervently sought. Now children stand aloft. But are we better off? |
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My parents believed in the Old Testament version of discipline, as stated in "Spare the Rod, Spoil the Child", as did most parents in the 1950's, when I grew up. Today those methods are called abuse, but we also have much more juvenile crime, disrespect for authority, and automatic weapons in children's hands blowing away classmates.
Proverbs 13:23-24
Those who spare the rod of discipline hate their children.
Those who love their children care enough to discipline them.
Proverbs 23: 13-14
Don't fail to discipline your children. They wont die if you spank them.
Physical discipline may well save them from death.
Now we have turned away from this teaching, and changed the laws.
This poem is a new form created by Gungalo. It has a very complex structure. See her poem, Toss the Coins. Here are her instructions:
Start with a beginning, 8-syllable quatrain that is monorhymed. The end rhymes from the first verse are the beginning words for the next verse, in reverse order, which will then have new end rhymes. These end rhymes similarly follow to be the first words of the next verse, and so on until the end. You may write as many verses as you would like, four being the minimum, making sure to end with mono-rhymes. Center align.
I think this new form should have a name. Here are some of my suggestions:
Gungalo Twist, Twistolet, Mono-flip, Reflectolet, Twisted Ladder, Helical Harmony.
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and 2 member cents. Proverbs 13:23-24
Those who spare the rod of discipline hate their children.
Those who love their children care enough to discipline them.
Proverbs 23: 13-14
Don't fail to discipline your children. They wont die if you spank them.
Physical discipline may well save them from death.
Now we have turned away from this teaching, and changed the laws.
This poem is a new form created by Gungalo. It has a very complex structure. See her poem, Toss the Coins. Here are her instructions:
Start with a beginning, 8-syllable quatrain that is monorhymed. The end rhymes from the first verse are the beginning words for the next verse, in reverse order, which will then have new end rhymes. These end rhymes similarly follow to be the first words of the next verse, and so on until the end. You may write as many verses as you would like, four being the minimum, making sure to end with mono-rhymes. Center align.
I think this new form should have a name. Here are some of my suggestions:
Gungalo Twist, Twistolet, Mono-flip, Reflectolet, Twisted Ladder, Helical Harmony.
This picture was taken from Yahoo Images.
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