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A Zejel Poem with Closing Envoi

A chapter in the book Commentary and Philosophy

Sifting Sand

by Treischel

Sifting Sand
(A Zejel Poem with Closing envoi))


On rocky hillside where I stand,
I hold the earth right in my hand,
And feel the sense of sifting sand.

Resulting from my hardy climb,
In such enormity of time
That is a complex paradigm,
Far greater than I ever planned

Upon my fingers, flowing through,
I had a thought I never knew -
To scatter eons residue,
I toss the surface of the land.

As I continue here to scour,
Along with every passing hour,
That gives most mystical power,
I know it leaves me feeling grand.

Through these hands, sand particles race.
There's such a joy that I embrace
That you can read it on my face -
The feel of earth at my command.

Sweet Mother Earth flows through my hand
Each cooling strand of shifting sand
On rocky hillside where I stand.






I took my grandson, Jeremy, for a walk and let him climb the sandstone cliffs nearby. His look of amazement and joy, caused me to write this poem.

This poem is a Zejel. Another amazing format I learned from Gungalo.
ZEJEL: A Spanish form. The first stanza, known as the mudanza, has three lines, rhyming aaa. All other stanzas, as many as you like, have 4 lines, with the rhyme going back to the first stanza. Rhyme Scheme: aaa bbba ccca ddda etc. Colloquial language tends to be used. Meter: 8-syllable lines (not obligatory). For this poem I also added a closing 3 line Envoi with an aaa rhyme scheme that echoes the first three lines.

This photograph was taken by the author himself along the Mississippi river banks in St. Paul, Minnesota in July, 2013.
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