Commentary and Philosophy Poetry posted December 31, 2023 Chapters:  ...155 156 -157- 


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Rondeau Redouble with envoi)

A chapter in the book Commentary and Philosophy

The Boom

by Treischel

This poem is my poor attempt to reconcile the big bang theory with Creationism
 
The Boom
(Rondeau Redouble with envoi)

Genesis 1 and 2
               “When God began creating the heavens and the earth, the earth was at first a shapeless chaotic mass, 
                 with the spirit of God brooding over the dark vapors.
                 And God said, Let there be light.”


He brooded as the vapors were compressed
while thoughts were spinning through his sacred mind.
The pull of darkness sharply coalesced
as thoughts and vapors rapidly aligned.

The particles got more and more confined.
The darkest gasses started to congest
so dense that they were strongly intertwined.
He brooded as the vapors were compressed.

Soon all the forming molecules were stressed,
and worldly notions yet to be refined,
created visions soon to be expressed
while thoughts were spinning through His sacred mind

The core of all the chaos was refined
to form a pulsing bead actions invest
with all the force a universe can bind.
The pull of darkness sharply coalesced.

The present plans can only God attest
were formed the special way that He defined.
Consolidated once at His behest
as thoughts and vapors rapidly aligned.

When pressured atom quarks became distressed,
a universe imagined as inclined
by God who has ensured that we be blessed
beyond our comprehension, things combined.
He Brooded.

He squeezed the mass with all his might
Then God said, “Let there be light.”
BOOM!!!




As noted in the beginning, I believe that the Bible version of creation is truely compatible with the scientific theory of The Big Bang, which describes a small tiny bead so strongly compressed with dense matter that it exploded to form the whole Universe. I keyed off the biblical term the God brooded over the dark vapors, which scientists might defint as Dark Matter.
This poem basically uses the format of a Rondeau Redouble which, uses the four lines of the first stanza in sequence as refrains in the last line of each succeeding stanza, and a phrase from the first refrain is repeated at the end of the final stanza. I then added a 3 line envoi to create the final effect.
The image is a photograph I took of a Fourth of July fireworks
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