Well, this nicely fulfills the contest goal of a surprise within the plot and a surprise for the reader. Well done.
Very cleverly done. The part about his wife draws you in and the close with her daughter comes as a complete surprise. Loved the part about picking up his cane. It adds nicely to the story. Good luck.
F.J.
Sounds like a Father's Day story.
A great moment which became a great memory!
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