The Uber Driver
The punisher13 total reviews
Comment from RShipp
'- No, to both of them! Premeditation! You are after me! You want to punish me for stealing your girlfriend.
- Girlfriend? Which one? Giorgina?'
(Funny, the 'ghost' apparently had several girlfriends from which the 'stolen one' could have been chosen.)
Best of luck in the Supernatural Flash Fiction writing prompt contest.
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'- No, to both of them! Premeditation! You are after me! You want to punish me for stealing your girlfriend.
- Girlfriend? Which one? Giorgina?'
(Funny, the 'ghost' apparently had several girlfriends from which the 'stolen one' could have been chosen.)
Best of luck in the Supernatural Flash Fiction writing prompt contest.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2020
Comment from estory
Nice quirky little ghost story that wove in the epidemic to boot. What could be scarier than the virus? I like how you created these two jousting characters, the childhood friends who are jealous of the same woman, and seem to seek revenge on each other, through dialogue alone. All the emotions came through in the conversation, and it was crisp and very much back and forth. I loved the ending, with the can of virus ending it all. I wonder what the most popular costume will be this Halloween. Fauci? Birks? the unmasked Trump? The masked Biden? estory
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Nice quirky little ghost story that wove in the epidemic to boot. What could be scarier than the virus? I like how you created these two jousting characters, the childhood friends who are jealous of the same woman, and seem to seek revenge on each other, through dialogue alone. All the emotions came through in the conversation, and it was crisp and very much back and forth. I loved the ending, with the can of virus ending it all. I wonder what the most popular costume will be this Halloween. Fauci? Birks? the unmasked Trump? The masked Biden? estory
Comment Written 17-Oct-2020
Comment from amada
This is a well written supernatural flash fiction, this one was about a Uber driver, I have hear bad news about them...but that is another story. Ypu have good descriptions, they put the reader in the seat of the story. Well done.
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This is a well written supernatural flash fiction, this one was about a Uber driver, I have hear bad news about them...but that is another story. Ypu have good descriptions, they put the reader in the seat of the story. Well done.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2020
Comment from lyenochka
Oh - scary. I guess justice came through the "Angel of Death." I liked the use of the Uber driver disguise. Best wishes in the contest!
- Shoot, I felt for it, and I'm trapped. (fell)
- Then, why you married her? (why did you marry her?)
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Oh - scary. I guess justice came through the "Angel of Death." I liked the use of the Uber driver disguise. Best wishes in the contest!
- Shoot, I felt for it, and I'm trapped. (fell)
- Then, why you married her? (why did you marry her?)
Comment Written 14-Oct-2020
Comment from Alchera
I do love it all! it's unimaginable within all this covid pandemic undergoing1 How did all this come out from or is this your reaction to all your fears of the viruses that are going to come along? A great writing indeed and well thought,too, with all its supernatural unusual events. Ghosts and speaking cat like Poe's!
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2020
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I do love it all! it's unimaginable within all this covid pandemic undergoing1 How did all this come out from or is this your reaction to all your fears of the viruses that are going to come along? A great writing indeed and well thought,too, with all its supernatural unusual events. Ghosts and speaking cat like Poe's!
Comment Written 14-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2020
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Thank you so much for your funny and encouraging review.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, anonymous,
Great entry for the Supernatural Flash Fiction writing prompt contest.
Good flash Fiction form. I like the story about the angel of death looking for revange. You did a good job with the story and the characters. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2020
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Hello, anonymous,
Great entry for the Supernatural Flash Fiction writing prompt contest.
Good flash Fiction form. I like the story about the angel of death looking for revange. You did a good job with the story and the characters. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2020
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Thank you much Ms. Gypsy Blue Rose
Comment from equestrik
Well, this little story sure got twisted around a couple of times here! I enjoyed the story though and feel you wrote it well. You developed your characters then let us see their true natures.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2020
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Well, this little story sure got twisted around a couple of times here! I enjoyed the story though and feel you wrote it well. You developed your characters then let us see their true natures.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2020
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Thank you so much for your encouraging review
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written supernatural flash fiction about a childhood act that comes back to haunt the boy who pushed his friend into the water causing him to drown no he's back to take revenge.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2020
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A very well-written supernatural flash fiction about a childhood act that comes back to haunt the boy who pushed his friend into the water causing him to drown no he's back to take revenge.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2020
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Thank you
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is a spooky story entry for the Supernatural Flash Fiction writing prompt. It is well written with a surprising ending. Best of luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2020
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This is a spooky story entry for the Supernatural Flash Fiction writing prompt. It is well written with a surprising ending. Best of luck in the contest!
Comment Written 14-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2020
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Thank you
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Oh my goodness this is a terrifying write and I shall never trust another uber driver as long as I live! Ha ha ha, an inventive story that caught my attention, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2020
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Oh my goodness this is a terrifying write and I shall never trust another uber driver as long as I live! Ha ha ha, an inventive story that caught my attention, love Dolly x
Comment Written 14-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2020
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I don't use them either:)
