Peach Of The Beach
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Peach Of The Beach (five)"Female lifeguard.
3 total reviews
Comment from equestrik
I love this and love that a girl showed up to save the day. Good writing and good story development. The conversations here are well done and down to earth. Nice.
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I love this and love that a girl showed up to save the day. Good writing and good story development. The conversations here are well done and down to earth. Nice.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2020
Comment from C. Gale Burnett
I do wish I had read the first five prior chapters, for it is difficult to get a feel of the story without the background information. However, that said, the dialogue drew me into this short chapter, giving me a feel of the mother/daughter relationship and the situation they were currently in. I loved the introduction of Polly to your story, which makes me want to read further.
Well done!
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2020
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I do wish I had read the first five prior chapters, for it is difficult to get a feel of the story without the background information. However, that said, the dialogue drew me into this short chapter, giving me a feel of the mother/daughter relationship and the situation they were currently in. I loved the introduction of Polly to your story, which makes me want to read further.
Well done!
Comment Written 11-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2020
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HELLO RELLA: I thank you for your review. You are appreciated. Rella, if you would like to read more chapters, you will find them on my portfolio page under: Peach Of The Beach. God bless you, Rella. cordially :rhonnie69.
Comment from Lighthouse Keeper
I wasn't sure what I was reading at first, a narrative or poetry or both but as it unfolded it clearly didn't need a label. The description of Polly contrasted with the difficulty with the car is a great set up. She lights up the page. Well crafted dialogue that captures the characters well. NOTE: There's an "i" missing from the beginning of the stanza here:
" t wasn't until she hopped briskly out of her truck"
I was so disappointed not to get a closing. Hope to catch the sequel.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2020
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I wasn't sure what I was reading at first, a narrative or poetry or both but as it unfolded it clearly didn't need a label. The description of Polly contrasted with the difficulty with the car is a great set up. She lights up the page. Well crafted dialogue that captures the characters well. NOTE: There's an "i" missing from the beginning of the stanza here:
" t wasn't until she hopped briskly out of her truck"
I was so disappointed not to get a closing. Hope to catch the sequel.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2020
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HELLO LIGHTHOUSE KEEPER: I thank you for your review. You are appreciated. If you would like to read the rest of the chapters, you will find them on my portfolio page...under: Peach Of The Beach. God bless you. cordially :rhonnie69.