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She's a great teacher - or is she?12 total reviews
Comment from Susan Louise Gabriel
Ok, you really had me!! I kept thinking, a warning of violence place on this somewhat boring recitation of a teacher's day? Until, of course, I got to the end. YIKES!!!! You weren't kidding when you place the warning on it!
But, in the interest of fairness, I will also review your writing of the "boring" stuff -- it was very thorough and detailed, and I felt like I was living out her day alongside her. So you pulled me in and then, WHAMMY! You scared the living daylights out of me!
Well done!
Sue
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2020
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Ok, you really had me!! I kept thinking, a warning of violence place on this somewhat boring recitation of a teacher's day? Until, of course, I got to the end. YIKES!!!! You weren't kidding when you place the warning on it!
But, in the interest of fairness, I will also review your writing of the "boring" stuff -- it was very thorough and detailed, and I felt like I was living out her day alongside her. So you pulled me in and then, WHAMMY! You scared the living daylights out of me!
Well done!
Sue
Comment Written 25-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2020
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Thank you. I am always glad when I can draw my readers in and then surprise them. I was an elementary school teacher for ten years, which is why I was able to detail so well the "boring" parts.
Comment from Alena Carver
The end of this story gave me chills! I love the foreshadowing used when the teacher claims that she is eating liver. I love the dark twist that you used compared to the original prompt that you received.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2020
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The end of this story gave me chills! I love the foreshadowing used when the teacher claims that she is eating liver. I love the dark twist that you used compared to the original prompt that you received.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2020
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Thank you. I felt like doing horror since it is so close to Halloween. Glad you enjoyed it!
Comment from LJbutterfly
The thing I found most interesting was the antics of the various students. I was a preschool and early childhood educator and recognized Sam, Daisy, Chloe, Mary, and the others. I know how you have to stand guard over bathroom and hand-washing activities. This story was well written and accurate. I became suspicious when the red paint was warm, but this turned out to be a good Halloween season tale.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2020
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The thing I found most interesting was the antics of the various students. I was a preschool and early childhood educator and recognized Sam, Daisy, Chloe, Mary, and the others. I know how you have to stand guard over bathroom and hand-washing activities. This story was well written and accurate. I became suspicious when the red paint was warm, but this turned out to be a good Halloween season tale.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2020
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Thank you so much! I was an elementary teacher for ten years, so I had no problem being realistic.
Comment from tfawcus
Well, you've certainly come up with a macabre ending for the season of Halloween! What I really liked about this, though, was the description of the junior primary classroom interactions. I spent many years as a primary school teacher and could visualise them all too clearly. Enough to drive the mildest-mannered teacher to thoughts of murder! LOL
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2020
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Well, you've certainly come up with a macabre ending for the season of Halloween! What I really liked about this, though, was the description of the junior primary classroom interactions. I spent many years as a primary school teacher and could visualise them all too clearly. Enough to drive the mildest-mannered teacher to thoughts of murder! LOL
Comment Written 24-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2020
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Thank you! I, too, was a primary school teacher, and although there were a few I could have cheerfully choked, I managed not to do it. LOL
Comment from equestrik
Oh my! this ending was quite a gruesome surprise. Your teacher seemed so innocent and normal but, One never knows for sure! This is sell crafted and compelling.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2020
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Oh my! this ending was quite a gruesome surprise. Your teacher seemed so innocent and normal but, One never knows for sure! This is sell crafted and compelling.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2020
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Thank you. With it being October and all I thought I would give it a horror sort of twist.
Comment from Earl Corp
I wish I still had a six star rating to give you. I'm not a horror fan but the twist at the end was great. This should have been a contest entry, Very nice job. Thanks for sharing. Stay safe and stay healthy.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2020
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I wish I still had a six star rating to give you. I'm not a horror fan but the twist at the end was great. This should have been a contest entry, Very nice job. Thanks for sharing. Stay safe and stay healthy.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2020
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Thank you so much!
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello Monica, a fantastic Friday to you. Thank you for sharing that story, it was a good read, the ending caught me off guard, I didn't see that coming. I saw that it said horror/thriller story, the whole time I was reading I was wondering when something was going to happen and your ending didn't disappoint. Nice job!
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2020
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Hello Monica, a fantastic Friday to you. Thank you for sharing that story, it was a good read, the ending caught me off guard, I didn't see that coming. I saw that it said horror/thriller story, the whole time I was reading I was wondering when something was going to happen and your ending didn't disappoint. Nice job!
Comment Written 23-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2020
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Thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed the story.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
This is wonderfully written. I love how you start this with such a pleasant and lovely scene. And end it with some of the most horrible words ever uttered. The development from the opening scene to the last line was fantastic! A very well written story. Great job!
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2020
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This is wonderfully written. I love how you start this with such a pleasant and lovely scene. And end it with some of the most horrible words ever uttered. The development from the opening scene to the last line was fantastic! A very well written story. Great job!
Comment Written 13-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2020
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Thank you so much for the wonderful compliments!
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
This story is a very straight forward story about a teacher and her class. It is well written and the descriptive narrative delineates constant disruptive energy within the group. Nothing prepares us for the ending which exudes horror. Well done.
Ralf
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2020
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This story is a very straight forward story about a teacher and her class. It is well written and the descriptive narrative delineates constant disruptive energy within the group. Nothing prepares us for the ending which exudes horror. Well done.
Ralf
Comment Written 11-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2020
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Thank you!
Comment from teols2016
I kind of figured where this was going, but it was still a good read and I couldn't guess all aspects of your ending. You sometimes rushed through the "normal" parts of this teacher's work. I would suggest cutting a couple of those out and expanding on the others (i.e. what did the teacher do to help the girl who'd wet herself in terms of cleaning up.) Otherwise, well done.
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reply by the author on 11-Oct-2020
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I kind of figured where this was going, but it was still a good read and I couldn't guess all aspects of your ending. You sometimes rushed through the "normal" parts of this teacher's work. I would suggest cutting a couple of those out and expanding on the others (i.e. what did the teacher do to help the girl who'd wet herself in terms of cleaning up.) Otherwise, well done.
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Comment Written 11-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2020
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Thank you. I will definitely take your suggestions under consideration.