Traffic
Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "The Basket"With their call stalled, Liz & Linda begin walking
9 total reviews
Comment from Susan X Smith
I loved reading this excerpt because it was well written, peaked my curiosity, and also because of the Native American flavor. I once had a co-worker friend who was half Navajo, and for some reason many people thought we were sisters. They didn't even ask, they just assumed we were, although I don't have any sisters. Anyway, this brief section of a book brought me back in time.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2020
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I loved reading this excerpt because it was well written, peaked my curiosity, and also because of the Native American flavor. I once had a co-worker friend who was half Navajo, and for some reason many people thought we were sisters. They didn't even ask, they just assumed we were, although I don't have any sisters. Anyway, this brief section of a book brought me back in time.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2020
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Thank you for your enthusiastic review. I'm glad you could relate to it. The earlier chapter 1-13 are about us rescuing teens from trafficking. It's gets political near the end of them because as I'm sure you know, there is criminal poverty. I have invited many new to the series, to go onto my portfolio to read the previous chapters. It is not necessary to write a review. Just enjoy
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I really enjoyed this. Especially liked the use of internal dialogue. At the start it showed that something wasn't quite well in a powerful way. The story is interesting and easily kept my interest. Well written!
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2020
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I really enjoyed this. Especially liked the use of internal dialogue. At the start it showed that something wasn't quite well in a powerful way. The story is interesting and easily kept my interest. Well written!
Comment Written 13-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2020
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Thank you for your enthusiastic review. I have invited many new to the seriess to go onto my portfolio to read the previous chapters. It is not necessary to write a review. Just enjoy.
Comment from robyn corum
Liz,
Really nice chapter! Not a single nit (we'll.. there was one place where you have an unnecessary space.)
The characters are fun and I adored this strange woman offering them readings, food, and help. Sounds like the next chapter(s) should prove quite interesting! *smile*
Your writing style is intriguing and engaging and very enjoyable. THIS particular plotline is so promising. I'm wishing you great success with it.
Thanks so much - I enjoyed the read!
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2020
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Liz,
Really nice chapter! Not a single nit (we'll.. there was one place where you have an unnecessary space.)
The characters are fun and I adored this strange woman offering them readings, food, and help. Sounds like the next chapter(s) should prove quite interesting! *smile*
Your writing style is intriguing and engaging and very enjoyable. THIS particular plotline is so promising. I'm wishing you great success with it.
Thanks so much - I enjoyed the read!
Comment Written 13-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2020
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Thank you for your enthusiastic review. You are correct in your anticipation of the next chapter.
Comment from Rashanna Popoola
I really enjoyed reading this story it had excitement, wonder, family ties, all the things which a good story should have.This Adventure was on point and just right to read. Great Job Writer!
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2020
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I really enjoyed reading this story it had excitement, wonder, family ties, all the things which a good story should have.This Adventure was on point and just right to read. Great Job Writer!
Comment Written 13-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2020
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Thank you for your enthusiastic review. I have invited many new to the series to go onto my portfolio to read the previous chapters. It is not necessary to write a review. Just enjoy.
Comment from lyenochka
Now your story moved from a detective/mystery/adventure one of getting those girls rescued to one that is more fantasy. Lots of cultures have stories about shape-shifters. It's very cool that this one was so compassionate and giving. Wonder if the adventure will be in their dreams or in reality.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2020
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Now your story moved from a detective/mystery/adventure one of getting those girls rescued to one that is more fantasy. Lots of cultures have stories about shape-shifters. It's very cool that this one was so compassionate and giving. Wonder if the adventure will be in their dreams or in reality.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2020
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Thank you for your enthusiastic review. I'm so glad you are getting involved.
Comment from aryr
This was a great continuation chapter Liz. Kia Zita gave them each what they needed, the bread, the berries and the sleeping drink. Liz was able to figure out that Kia Zita was indeed a shapeshifter. She spoke words of wisdom when she came across the two girls. You did a great job with this one.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2020
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This was a great continuation chapter Liz. Kia Zita gave them each what they needed, the bread, the berries and the sleeping drink. Liz was able to figure out that Kia Zita was indeed a shapeshifter. She spoke words of wisdom when she came across the two girls. You did a great job with this one.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2020
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Thank you for your enthusiastic review. I'm so glad you are getting involved.
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Most welcome Liz, really enjoying it.
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Most welcome Liz, really enjoying it.
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I talked with Anne last night. She been having pain for years somewhere in her back area for many years. She said, a doctor she went to see had come out of retirement for some reason. It turns out her took her off the pain meds and has been having her use pain patches. They've been working. She has been pain free for 3 months. She's got so much energy. She sounded so much better. She has junked all of her computers and is getting a new one. I hope she gets everything back into a normal routine. She sends her best.
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Wow, thank you Liz on the update regarding Anne. I knew she was having pain issues and spent several messages talking to her about different options. Glad to hear the patches are working. LOL it seems as if she kept adding pieces to her old computer, perhaps with the new one things will go well. Sure do miss 'Mugs'.
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She's been writing long hand...imagine...more of Mugs. I discovered something very cool. Everything we write on her is on-line. I wanted to see something about my Be Wee With Bea book that published and I discovered the whole Part 2 on there. I just "googled" Liz ONeill Be Wee With Bea Part2 and there it was. Also my current one Traffic is there if I "google" each chapter one at a time. Our poems are there too. Everything we write is there. Some might find that, a risk of some sort, but I think it is cool.
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That is cool and I don't think of it as a risk.
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That is cool and I don't think of it as a risk.
Comment from Mistydawn
This was a very interesting chapter. An unexpected twist, but it works. It's well-written, very realistic. The girls are lucky Kai Zita came to them when she did.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2020
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This was a very interesting chapter. An unexpected twist, but it works. It's well-written, very realistic. The girls are lucky Kai Zita came to them when she did.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2020
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Thank you for your enthusiastic review. Thank you for letting me know how it is coming across. As you know, that's very helpful.
Comment from Colin John
Hi Liz, another fine chapter and shape shifting I thought was just in the terminator movies, love the person into an animal for healing reasons and the chaptor shows that well. Cheers Colin x
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2020
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Hi Liz, another fine chapter and shape shifting I thought was just in the terminator movies, love the person into an animal for healing reasons and the chaptor shows that well. Cheers Colin x
Comment Written 10-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2020
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Thank you for your enthusiastic & humorous review. Thank you for letting me know how it is coming across. As you know, that's very helpful.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Quite an interesting story and I like the shapeshifting part, adds an aura of mystery and realism. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2020
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Quite an interesting story and I like the shapeshifting part, adds an aura of mystery and realism. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2020
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Thank you for your enthusiastic review. I always look forward to your responses.