Blacksmiths
Free Verse26 total reviews
Comment from tempeste
Ciao Sugarray,
I took a look at your portfolio . There are so many beautiful entries to choose from.
Blacksmiths is creative and offers a unique
comparison which frankly, I have never come across since I started writing and reading poetry three years ago.
Blacksmiths sweats hard to shape/ fix/ fit pieces
or to actually create an object from scratch,
just like a poet works to find /connect the right words ,to put their thoughts and opinions in poetry hoping to touch emotional others.
Keep safe!
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
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Ciao Sugarray,
I took a look at your portfolio . There are so many beautiful entries to choose from.
Blacksmiths is creative and offers a unique
comparison which frankly, I have never come across since I started writing and reading poetry three years ago.
Blacksmiths sweats hard to shape/ fix/ fit pieces
or to actually create an object from scratch,
just like a poet works to find /connect the right words ,to put their thoughts and opinions in poetry hoping to touch emotional others.
Keep safe!
Comment Written 18-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
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Hey there, Franca. Thank you and I am delighted you looked at different pieces. I agree with you that poets and blacksmiths take a labored approach to crafting pieces fit for use. Hugs, my friend.
Melissa
Comment from Y. M. Roger
What a wonderful free verse and metaphorical comparison to what we do with our pens!! ;) Oh, we do have those times of 'trying to make it fit', don't we? ;) :) Thanx for sharing such a beautiful image, my lady!! ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2020
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What a wonderful free verse and metaphorical comparison to what we do with our pens!! ;) Oh, we do have those times of 'trying to make it fit', don't we? ;) :) Thanx for sharing such a beautiful image, my lady!! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 13-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2020
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Hi Yvette. Thank you for your thoughts about the Blacksmith. I guess those of us who create things are all smiths of some sort. Hugs!!
Melissa
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Melissa,
This is worthy of a sixer, if only I had one left.
The only thing I'd change would be your first line. I'd omit "as".
"A poet is a blacksmith..."
That last line is the icing on the cake,
"Writing forged from his soul." ... that's worth the extra star all by itself. "forged" is such a great way to describe writing. And it's often forged right from the poet's soul.
I've seen blacksmiths in action, how they'll hammer on a piece, making that perfect fit, eliminating spurs, until it's just right. Nothing less will do.
What a great piece!
Good for you!
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2020
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Hi Melissa,
This is worthy of a sixer, if only I had one left.
The only thing I'd change would be your first line. I'd omit "as".
"A poet is a blacksmith..."
That last line is the icing on the cake,
"Writing forged from his soul." ... that's worth the extra star all by itself. "forged" is such a great way to describe writing. And it's often forged right from the poet's soul.
I've seen blacksmiths in action, how they'll hammer on a piece, making that perfect fit, eliminating spurs, until it's just right. Nothing less will do.
What a great piece!
Good for you!
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 09-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2020
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Thank you for the wonderful review, Bob. I am so glad you liked it and ..got.. the analogy!! I love to write and it does seem that I have to work it over and over before it seems right. :)
Melissa
Comment from Ulla
Hi Melissa, absolutely. This is very a very well thought out poem and so very well formulated in these original words. I liked it a lot. Thanks a lot for sharing. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2020
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Hi Melissa, absolutely. This is very a very well thought out poem and so very well formulated in these original words. I liked it a lot. Thanks a lot for sharing. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 09-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2020
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Thanks so much Ulla!
Melissa
Comment from juliaSjames
Excellent free verse, Melissa. This is my favourite poetic form. It allows my soul to roam free.
Your analogy took me by surprise. But you sustained the metaphor with admirable skill.
Particularly enjoyed
"controlling the fires of inspiration,"
Stay safe healthy and blessed
Julia
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2020
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Excellent free verse, Melissa. This is my favourite poetic form. It allows my soul to roam free.
Your analogy took me by surprise. But you sustained the metaphor with admirable skill.
Particularly enjoyed
"controlling the fires of inspiration,"
Stay safe healthy and blessed
Julia
Comment Written 09-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2020
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Hello Julia. I am very glad you enjoyed the poem... Blacksmiths.. I do not often write FV, but it seemed the thing to do. :). Thank you.
Melissa
Comment from Bill Pinder
Melissa,
I like this poem that expresses the comparison between a blacksmith and a poet. I really like that analogy and the well chosen words that you use in this free verse. Bill
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2020
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Melissa,
I like this poem that expresses the comparison between a blacksmith and a poet. I really like that analogy and the well chosen words that you use in this free verse. Bill
Comment Written 09-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2020
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Hello Bill. Thank you very much. Trochaic meter can be a challenge... but a fun one. :)
Melissa
Comment from Gloria ....
Indeed, poetry is forging our mettle into steel. An superb metaphor to illustrate the process of writing poetry.
Strength in brevity and the clarity of words strike the right chord.
Great job with this fine free verse, Melissa. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2020
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Indeed, poetry is forging our mettle into steel. An superb metaphor to illustrate the process of writing poetry.
Strength in brevity and the clarity of words strike the right chord.
Great job with this fine free verse, Melissa. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 09-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2020
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Hello Gloria. Thank you so much! I appreciate your lovely comments.
Melissa
Comment from Cindy Decker
Hi,
I love this allegorical poem!
You compare a writer to a blacksmith very skillfully.
Excellent work,
Good luck in the contest,
Best wishes,
Cindy
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2020
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Hi,
I love this allegorical poem!
You compare a writer to a blacksmith very skillfully.
Excellent work,
Good luck in the contest,
Best wishes,
Cindy
Comment Written 09-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2020
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Hi Cindy. Thanks so much.
Melissa
Comment from Mary Vigasin
Very creative and imaginative writing on the poetic writers' process
I can picture the process.
Very well written and I enjoyed reading your words.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2020
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Very creative and imaginative writing on the poetic writers' process
I can picture the process.
Very well written and I enjoyed reading your words.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2020
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Thank you Mary!
Melissa
Comment from lyenochka
Wow! I really like that simile - poet to blacksmith and that "writing forged from his soul" is a really powerful ending. And the metaphor of "shaping thoughts to create something meaningful." Super poem!
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2020
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Wow! I really like that simile - poet to blacksmith and that "writing forged from his soul" is a really powerful ending. And the metaphor of "shaping thoughts to create something meaningful." Super poem!
Comment Written 08-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2020
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Thank yo very much Helen!! Hugs!
Melissa
