Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

A chapter in the book Renga Multi-Author Book
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by royowen

Hello, Roy,

Thank you very much for adding a chapter to our renga book. We are up to 82 chapters! Your 7/7 couplet fits in nicely with my 5/7/5 poem. Your poem is a reminder of what Jesus Christ did for all of us. His sacrifice shows true love. Well done!

 Comment Written 10-Oct-2020

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reply by the author on 10-Oct-2020

Thanks Gypsy, fo these great comments and review, blessings Roy

Comment from CrystieCookie999

Excellent

Well this is definitely in the right format and strongly reminds the reader that it is better to live in modern times than in Biblical times or to be shanghaied into a ship.

 Comment Written 08-Oct-2020

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reply by the author on 08-Oct-2020

Thanks so much Crystie for these marvellous comments and a great review, blessings Roy

Comment from Y. M. Roger

Excellent

Wow, Roy - you really took those poppies to a visceral level with this one -- like the turn for the Renga with this one, even though it and the poppies take it into a bit of darkness... ;) :) Thanx for sharing, sir -- have to jump in and do another piece soon! ;) Yvette

 Comment Written 08-Oct-2020

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reply by the author on 08-Oct-2020

Thanks so much Yvette, for these marvellous comments and a great review, blessings Roy

Comment from Monica Chaddick

Excellent

This is a very interesting piece of work. The artwork is really cool, and the wording provides a vision of the meaning. I am going to bring this up to my son, as he is into Japanese writing and anime.

 Comment Written 08-Oct-2020

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reply by the author on 08-Oct-2020

Thanks Monica for these excellent comments and review, blessings Roy

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written couplet about whipping someone with a rod until blood is drawn us a terrible punishment used in slavery for any wrongdoings. An excellent addition to the multi-author Renga book.

 Comment Written 08-Oct-2020

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reply by the author on 08-Oct-2020

Thanks again Sandra, for these excellent comments and a lovely review, blessings Roy

Comment from Elizabeth Emerald

Excellent

Graphic! Kudos for managing to convey this dreadful image in few words--I don't think the picture is necessary--a note would suffice to give context. Nice work. Cheers. LIZ

 Comment Written 08-Oct-2020

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reply by the author on 08-Oct-2020

Thanks so much Liz, for these wonderful comments and great review, blessings Roy

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

You have added a new and valuable dimension to the Renga book, Roy. Your imagery is clear and the references apt.

Many thanks for sharing today

Gloria

 Comment Written 07-Oct-2020

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reply by the author on 07-Oct-2020

Thanks so much Gloria, for these wonderful comments and a super review, blessings Roy

Comment from mermaids

Excellent

Your words bring forth a strong Biblical image. I think of Jesus being flogged. "The bite of the rod" is a strong line that impacts the reader. You created a vivid image that brings forth emotions.

 Comment Written 07-Oct-2020

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reply by the author on 07-Oct-2020

Thanks so much Elaine, for these wonderful comments and a super review, blessings Roy

Comment from Teri7

Excellent

Roy, This is a very interesting and well written 7/7 renga poem. You used very good descriptive words and very interesting picture. Thank you for sharing. blessings, Teri

 Comment Written 07-Oct-2020

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reply by the author on 08-Oct-2020

Thanks so much Teri, for these wonderful comments and great review, blessings Roy

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

Thank you for adding this 7-7 to the Renga collection. Your addition of the illustration adds to the intensity of your words.
P.S. Sally Law recently cited that you introduced Emily Romano's brevette form. Is it capitalized and are there any limitations about the title. Thanks- Joan

 Comment Written 07-Oct-2020

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reply by the author on 08-Oct-2020

Thanks so much Joan, for these wonderful comments and great review, blessings Roy PS In the brevette form to my knowledge, capitals are optional, but just three words, (Subject) noun, verb and (object) noun, Ongoing meaning, I.E. ?snails, l e a k, slime? optional length on title. Hope that helps.

reply by Joan E. on 08-Oct-2020

Yes, that helps. I also went on-line and found the second line should be spaced out to show an ongoing action. Cheers- Joan