Renga Multi-Author Book
Viewing comments for Chapter 81 "Poppies Sea Ripples"Renga is a Japanese linked poetry 5/7/5 and 7/7
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Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 5-7-5 poem in addition to the multi-author Renga book where the red sunset pouring over ancient land to reveal poppies like a rippled sea.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2020
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A very well-written 5-7-5 poem in addition to the multi-author Renga book where the red sunset pouring over ancient land to reveal poppies like a rippled sea.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2020
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Sandra, thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words. I appreciate them. Happy Saturday!
Comment from Mark Schardine
warm scarlet sunset
pours red upon ancient land --
poppies sea ripples
We can close our eyes and see a field of poppies that startles us with its bright red color, and then realize it moves like waves on the sea.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2020
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warm scarlet sunset
pours red upon ancient land --
poppies sea ripples
We can close our eyes and see a field of poppies that startles us with its bright red color, and then realize it moves like waves on the sea.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2020
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from juliaSjames
The overwhelming visual of poppies at sunset makes a strong fiery impression. Very yang.
That's why "ancient land" stands out in contrast. The sunset and the flowers will come and go. But the earth is a constant. Yin, receiving the masculine warmth of the sun.
The only time I saw a flaming sunset was from the air, en route to Miami. Crimson against a mass of inky clouds. Your haiku reminds me to search for the photo.
Stay safe
Blessings Julia
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2020
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The overwhelming visual of poppies at sunset makes a strong fiery impression. Very yang.
That's why "ancient land" stands out in contrast. The sunset and the flowers will come and go. But the earth is a constant. Yin, receiving the masculine warmth of the sun.
The only time I saw a flaming sunset was from the air, en route to Miami. Crimson against a mass of inky clouds. Your haiku reminds me to search for the photo.
Stay safe
Blessings Julia
Comment Written 08-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2020
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Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem. You are very kind. I like your interpretation of my poem.
Hugs,
Gypsy
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Wow... this one actually hits me with a longing for the lives lost in an 'true' ancient land, whose names are known only to families without a voice... and if it wasn't written for that, I hope my interpretation doesn't offend... a really deep one, Gypsy. Thank you. ;)
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2020
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Wow... this one actually hits me with a longing for the lives lost in an 'true' ancient land, whose names are known only to families without a voice... and if it wasn't written for that, I hope my interpretation doesn't offend... a really deep one, Gypsy. Thank you. ;)
Comment Written 08-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2020
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Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem. You are very kind.
Hugs,
Gypsy
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for adding to the Renga book with this 5-7-5 haiku. I enjoyed another splendid use of alliteration and the parallel picture plus colorful presentation. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2020
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Thank you for adding to the Renga book with this 5-7-5 haiku. I enjoyed another splendid use of alliteration and the parallel picture plus colorful presentation. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 07-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2020
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Cheers,
Gypsy
Comment from Gert sherwood
Ah Gypsy
I like the way you wrote about the color Red with your chapter in the chapter in the book Renga Multi-Author Book
with your great way of us viewers to have a beautiful vision of the setting sun and the Red Poppies rippling
Gert
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2020
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Ah Gypsy
I like the way you wrote about the color Red with your chapter in the chapter in the book Renga Multi-Author Book
with your great way of us viewers to have a beautiful vision of the setting sun and the Red Poppies rippling
Gert
Comment Written 07-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2020
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Cheers,
Gypsy
Comment from mermaids
I like the image of the poppies creating a red sea, it creates a warm feeling. The reader can see the red sun moving over the ancient land giving the poem a mystical feel. Excellent use of words and renga form.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2020
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I like the image of the poppies creating a red sea, it creates a warm feeling. The reader can see the red sun moving over the ancient land giving the poem a mystical feel. Excellent use of words and renga form.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2020
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Cheers,
Gypsy
Comment from Gloria ....
Oh Gypsy this is wonderful. There is nothing quite so magnificent as a field of red poppies and when the breeze blows it's definitely a sea of red.
Superb write and just one typo in the subtitle: Renga 5/7/5 (chapterr 81)
Much enjoyed.
Gloria
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2020
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Oh Gypsy this is wonderful. There is nothing quite so magnificent as a field of red poppies and when the breeze blows it's definitely a sea of red.
Superb write and just one typo in the subtitle: Renga 5/7/5 (chapterr 81)
Much enjoyed.
Gloria
Comment Written 07-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2020
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words. I appreciate you letting me know about the error.
Cheers,
Gypsy
Comment from Mark D. R.
Another most descriptive poem GBR!
May be too late to edit, but satori could be: rewritten as:
rippling poppy seas
Methinks it gives readers a different punch.
Mark
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2020
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Another most descriptive poem GBR!
May be too late to edit, but satori could be: rewritten as:
rippling poppy seas
Methinks it gives readers a different punch.
Mark
Comment Written 07-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2020
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Thank you very much, Mark. I appreciate you taking the time to read my poem. I like the play on words but it's a different visual effects than what I want. It's clever though, you should use it.
Cheers
Gypsy
Comment from June Sargent
Great follow up to the sunshine theme of the previous entry. I love poppies. And a field of hem would resemble a red carpet. Life affirming imagery. Red is the symbol of life in many cultures.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2020
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Great follow up to the sunshine theme of the previous entry. I love poppies. And a field of hem would resemble a red carpet. Life affirming imagery. Red is the symbol of life in many cultures.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2020
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Thank you very much, June.
Cheers
Gypsy