Amber and Rust Leaves
5/7/5 Autumn Haiku - contest entry24 total reviews
Comment from rspoet
Hello Gypsy,
You have marvelous sound and visual imagery in this splendid 5-7-5 haiku
with excellent grammatical connection.
The visual use of the color rust, also suggests the rustling sounds.
The juxtaposition with the creeks sounds in the satori works perfectly.
Nice touch of alliteration too.
Easy to to see and hear why this haiku won the contest.
Congratulations!
Best wishes to all.
Robert
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2020
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Hello Gypsy,
You have marvelous sound and visual imagery in this splendid 5-7-5 haiku
with excellent grammatical connection.
The visual use of the color rust, also suggests the rustling sounds.
The juxtaposition with the creeks sounds in the satori works perfectly.
Nice touch of alliteration too.
Easy to to see and hear why this haiku won the contest.
Congratulations!
Best wishes to all.
Robert
Comment Written 17-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2020
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Thank you very much for the outstanding review and six stars, it means a lot to me coming from you. Have a lovely day.
Hugs,
Gypsy
Comment from dragonpoet
This poem is a beautiful and simple description of nature sounds by a creek in fall. The picture matches well with the words.
Conngrats on winning the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Happy Holidays.
Joan
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2020
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This poem is a beautiful and simple description of nature sounds by a creek in fall. The picture matches well with the words.
Conngrats on winning the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Happy Holidays.
Joan
Comment Written 16-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and feedback. I appreciate your congratulations!
Hugs,
Gypsy
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You are most kindly welcome, Gypsy.
Joan
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Gypsy--Congrats on your win for this gorgeous poem. Stunning alliteration and assonance--sursurrus is a wonderful word. I can see those vivid leaves and hear the crunch! Cheers. LIZ
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2020
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Gypsy--Congrats on your win for this gorgeous poem. Stunning alliteration and assonance--sursurrus is a wonderful word. I can see those vivid leaves and hear the crunch! Cheers. LIZ
Comment Written 15-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words. I appreciate your congratulations too.
Hugs,
Gypsy
Comment from sammielwf
Gypsy Blue Rose,
Amber and Rust Leaves:
brings me to the clearing of the a deer path in the country side of Blue Hills Maine. At the close of Autumn, the hiking paths are covered with leaves of all colors and the quiet rivulet that runs by the paths edges- whispers as you state in your poem. On any given day ,the does that follow their mother's so closely can be spotted if you are very quiet on your feet.
So many hidden paths in the rural parts of Maine- and I have been privileged to stumble on a few hidden gems in my exploring days.
Thank you for the beauty of this verse.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2020
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Gypsy Blue Rose,
Amber and Rust Leaves:
brings me to the clearing of the a deer path in the country side of Blue Hills Maine. At the close of Autumn, the hiking paths are covered with leaves of all colors and the quiet rivulet that runs by the paths edges- whispers as you state in your poem. On any given day ,the does that follow their mother's so closely can be spotted if you are very quiet on your feet.
So many hidden paths in the rural parts of Maine- and I have been privileged to stumble on a few hidden gems in my exploring days.
Thank you for the beauty of this verse.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2020
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Thank you very much, Sammie, I appreciate your review and feedback.
hugs,
gypsy
Comment from greyson ernst
congrats!!!!!!!!!!!!!! i love the picture and im not surprised that you won and as always keep writing and stay safe have a happy holiday
sincerely Greyson Ernst
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2020
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congrats!!!!!!!!!!!!!! i love the picture and im not surprised that you won and as always keep writing and stay safe have a happy holiday
sincerely Greyson Ernst
Comment Written 15-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2020
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Thank you very much, Greyson, I appreciate your review and feedback and congrats :) happy holiday to you too.
hugs,
gypsy
Comment from Contests
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2020
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 A contest winning entry! A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for posting the winning contest entry. |
Comment Written 15-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2020
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Thank you very much for the seven stars, it's my first. I'm honored.
Gypsy
Comment from Mark Schardine
amber and rust leaves
crunch under doe's cloven hooves --
creek's soft susurrus
Your use of the word susurrus (whispering, murmuring, or rustling) greatly adds to this poem. You do not ask too much when you use words we must look up.
Thank you for this beautiful poem showing a delightful autumn scene, a poem to recall when we venture out.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2020
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amber and rust leaves
crunch under doe's cloven hooves --
creek's soft susurrus
Your use of the word susurrus (whispering, murmuring, or rustling) greatly adds to this poem. You do not ask too much when you use words we must look up.
Thank you for this beautiful poem showing a delightful autumn scene, a poem to recall when we venture out.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2020
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from juliaSjames
This is one of the most beautiful haiku poems I have read. A treat for eyes and ears that immerses the reader in the peace and beauty of autumn in the woods.
I have heard the "creek's soft susurrus" many times. In this write it whispers to me, "all's well".
Good luck in the contest. This will score high.
Stay safe and serene
Blessings Julia
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2020
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This is one of the most beautiful haiku poems I have read. A treat for eyes and ears that immerses the reader in the peace and beauty of autumn in the woods.
I have heard the "creek's soft susurrus" many times. In this write it whispers to me, "all's well".
Good luck in the contest. This will score high.
Stay safe and serene
Blessings Julia
Comment Written 09-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2020
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Thank you very much, Julia! I appreciate the six stars, especially coming from you. Have a wonderful weekend, my friend.
Hugs,
Gypsy
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A fine write introducing a new word to me and you put it to good use here in this ambient write about Autumn's vibrant colour, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2020
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A fine write introducing a new word to me and you put it to good use here in this ambient write about Autumn's vibrant colour, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 09-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Comment from Gloria ....
This is so beautiful, Gypsy. I love the whisper of leaves and does can be so gentle on their feet for such large animals.
An excellent entry into the contest and I wish you much luck with the Committee.
Gloria
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2020
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This is so beautiful, Gypsy. I love the whisper of leaves and does can be so gentle on their feet for such large animals.
An excellent entry into the contest and I wish you much luck with the Committee.
Gloria
Comment Written 08-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2020
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Thank you very much, Gloria. I appreciate your time and review. Have a nice day.
Gypsy