Melodious Transition
Let the breezes and the colors move you!13 total reviews
Comment from rspoet
You've written an excellent 5-7-5 haiku for the nature contest
with excellent imagery and connection in lines one and two.
The satori line is a nice extension of the thought.
Nice choice of art work.
Well done.
Best wishes in the contest.
Robert.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
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You've written an excellent 5-7-5 haiku for the nature contest
with excellent imagery and connection in lines one and two.
The satori line is a nice extension of the thought.
Nice choice of art work.
Well done.
Best wishes in the contest.
Robert.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
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Thank you so much, Robert!
Comment from lancellot
Hmm, it is a nice poem and I like pleasant theme of changing of the seasons. That complies with the nature element. Good you changed cooling to cool.
Good entry.
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reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
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Hmm, it is a nice poem and I like pleasant theme of changing of the seasons. That complies with the nature element. Good you changed cooling to cool.
Good entry.
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Comment Written 03-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
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Thank you.
Comment from Bill Schott
This nature 5-(8)-5, Melodious Transition, has the proper formatting (almost) and brings in Autumn's song with this well versed poem.
Needs to lose a syllable.
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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2020
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This nature 5-(8)-5, Melodious Transition, has the proper formatting (almost) and brings in Autumn's song with this well versed poem.
Needs to lose a syllable.
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Comment Written 03-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2020
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Thank you for both the review and the catch, Bill -- have a great night!
