The Corridor of Bad Choices
Don't go back there . . .65 total reviews
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Linda,
There are a lot of doors here. Some rooms might be worth re-visiting. Others, not. But which doors to open? There might be fire-breathing dragons in one of those rooms. Maybe the devil himself in another. We don't know until we open the door. You can't stay in the hallway forever.
Of course, this is a metaphor of a person's life... where they've been, where they're going... mistakes they've made, opportunities missed ... happiness, tears. It's what life is all about. Knowing and not knowing. Gamble or stay safe? Love? Who knows?
I like this verse,
"can she just peek then walk away
without choking on past mistakes
losing her way in old storms"
and the final lines,
"careful of fire breathing dragons
in pretty palaces"
Nicely penned!
Cheers,
Kimbob
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Hi Linda,
There are a lot of doors here. Some rooms might be worth re-visiting. Others, not. But which doors to open? There might be fire-breathing dragons in one of those rooms. Maybe the devil himself in another. We don't know until we open the door. You can't stay in the hallway forever.
Of course, this is a metaphor of a person's life... where they've been, where they're going... mistakes they've made, opportunities missed ... happiness, tears. It's what life is all about. Knowing and not knowing. Gamble or stay safe? Love? Who knows?
I like this verse,
"can she just peek then walk away
without choking on past mistakes
losing her way in old storms"
and the final lines,
"careful of fire breathing dragons
in pretty palaces"
Nicely penned!
Cheers,
Kimbob
Comment Written 04-Oct-2020
Comment from Louise Michelle
What a thought provoking poem. I agree that we should not return to past behaviors as long as we've grown and learned from our mistakes. At the same time, it can do us good to reflect on the past, if only to see how we've changed for the better. Very nicely written. Hugs, Lou
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What a thought provoking poem. I agree that we should not return to past behaviors as long as we've grown and learned from our mistakes. At the same time, it can do us good to reflect on the past, if only to see how we've changed for the better. Very nicely written. Hugs, Lou
Comment Written 04-Oct-2020
Comment from robyn corum
Linda,
I totally agree. There are some things that, once we've closed the door, we should never go back and try to revisit.
A note:
--> can she just peek (then) walk away
and a suggestion:
--> walls, floors, doors painted pretty(ily)
Thanks!
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Linda,
I totally agree. There are some things that, once we've closed the door, we should never go back and try to revisit.
A note:
--> can she just peek (then) walk away
and a suggestion:
--> walls, floors, doors painted pretty(ily)
Thanks!
Comment Written 04-Oct-2020
Comment from Becky Kern-Taylor
Very nice play on life in general. You got recognized and all time best awards, good for you. As I said it was very insightful and still kind of vague. Great job.
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Very nice play on life in general. You got recognized and all time best awards, good for you. As I said it was very insightful and still kind of vague. Great job.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2020
Comment from L. Kalere
There are many ways to proceed through life, like knowing when to leave the past behind, especially if it was destructive. Very nicely stated...especially the last two lines.
please check out the spelling of "than" in first line of 3rd stanza...should be "then?"
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
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There are many ways to proceed through life, like knowing when to leave the past behind, especially if it was destructive. Very nicely stated...especially the last two lines.
please check out the spelling of "than" in first line of 3rd stanza...should be "then?"
Comment Written 04-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
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Thanks for reading and commenting. I fixed the than/then problem. Linda
Comment from dragonpoet
Linda, This is a well done poem about a person that is lost in her mistakes. She needs to find a door that allows hope of apology and forgiveness to make the palace of life open again.
The artwork reminds of the hallways in French chateaus.
Joan
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
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Linda, This is a well done poem about a person that is lost in her mistakes. She needs to find a door that allows hope of apology and forgiveness to make the palace of life open again.
The artwork reminds of the hallways in French chateaus.
Joan
Comment Written 04-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
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Thanks for reading. Linda
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No problem.
Joan
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
This is so metaphoric. Every word you use represents something of a past journey that has not fared well and can never be fixed. That is a sad assessment of past mistakes. I believe everything is fixable.
Ralf
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
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This is so metaphoric. Every word you use represents something of a past journey that has not fared well and can never be fixed. That is a sad assessment of past mistakes. I believe everything is fixable.
Ralf
Comment Written 04-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
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Thank you, Raffaelina. Linda
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about the times we make wrong choices and when we realize that we made the wrong choices we try to avoid making the same mistakes again.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
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A very well-written poem about the times we make wrong choices and when we realize that we made the wrong choices we try to avoid making the same mistakes again.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
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Thank you for your read and feedback. Linda
Comment from ESOSTINE
I found the imagery very interesting. To close the door behind us is always a good step to follow in life in order to make remarkable progress. It could be really tempting/worthwhile to steal a glance back sometimes just for a lesson or two, but should not dwell there. Thanks for sharing your inspiration.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
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I found the imagery very interesting. To close the door behind us is always a good step to follow in life in order to make remarkable progress. It could be really tempting/worthwhile to steal a glance back sometimes just for a lesson or two, but should not dwell there. Thanks for sharing your inspiration.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
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Thank you so much for reading, your comments and six star rating. Linda
Comment from TPAC
I too have twelve doors in a corridor, haven opened four, fearing the others. Your thoughts captures this endurance well. A very imaginative read in my stated opinion.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
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I too have twelve doors in a corridor, haven opened four, fearing the others. Your thoughts captures this endurance well. A very imaginative read in my stated opinion.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
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Thank you, so much! Great feedback. Linda
