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Comment from beizanten
An attention capturing title and a very interesting previous chapter summary. You describe the characters action and emotion well bringing this interesting story into life
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2020
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An attention capturing title and a very interesting previous chapter summary. You describe the characters action and emotion well bringing this interesting story into life
Comment Written 08-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2020
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Thank you for your supportive review. You are invited to read the previous chapters on my profile. There is no need for a review. Just enjoy.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Your character sounds like me... I don't mind expired food as long as is not rotten is till good right? "Liz was famous for eating things expired. Her friends always asked, "How old is this?" Or "When did you buy this?"
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reply by the author on 08-Oct-2020
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Your character sounds like me... I don't mind expired food as long as is not rotten is till good right? "Liz was famous for eating things expired. Her friends always asked, "How old is this?" Or "When did you buy this?"
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Comment Written 08-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2020
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Thank you for your amusing review. I'm a dowser. I have programmed myself to ask "Is this food still good?" Good means I don't get sick, no intestinal difficulty, I don't need to have my stomach pumped, & *I don't die. It works everytime. I've been upset with some of the things I've had to throw out. But I'm alive to tell the story. You may an inner dowser. You just know.
Comment from AnnieDawn
This was an interesting read and a well written chapter. I only wish the chapters were numbered so that the reader could know about how far they are into the book as they are reviewing. It would help with understanding the content. Good job on this though.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2020
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This was an interesting read and a well written chapter. I only wish the chapters were numbered so that the reader could know about how far they are into the book as they are reviewing. It would help with understanding the content. Good job on this though.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2020
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Thank you for your involved review. I agree with the chapter issue. I haven't figured how to include it. There are some chapter #'s at the top of the page. You are welcome to go to my profile and read the previous chapters without reviewing. I've gone to some people's profile and just read their book to catch up. So just enjoy the previous chapters. No review is necessary.
Comment from robyn corum
Liz,
A really curious addition to your story. I imagine the next part will be highly intriguing!
Notes:
1.) Liz flipped the lock lever so Linda could open the back door.
--> open/unzip the back pocket?
2.) Doesn't it? It even tickles a little bit(,)" gurgled Liz.
3.) "Black puddles of water(,)" Linda added.
4.) "(no space) Specters ghosting up into the wavy opaqueness(,)" Liz exchanged.
5.) Her moccasins, also made of rawhide, (bore) two black crows painted on each,
Thanks!
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2020
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Liz,
A really curious addition to your story. I imagine the next part will be highly intriguing!
Notes:
1.) Liz flipped the lock lever so Linda could open the back door.
--> open/unzip the back pocket?
2.) Doesn't it? It even tickles a little bit(,)" gurgled Liz.
3.) "Black puddles of water(,)" Linda added.
4.) "(no space) Specters ghosting up into the wavy opaqueness(,)" Liz exchanged.
5.) Her moccasins, also made of rawhide, (bore) two black crows painted on each,
Thanks!
Comment Written 07-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2020
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Thank you for your helpful review. I appreciate. I especially like the unzipping action. I'm trying to make sure I include the actions as if I were doing them, so this was good.
Comment from pome lover
well, like all very good writers, you leave your audience in suspense.
I thought, somehow the water wasn't really water, or at least ordinary water, and it was affecting them, but now, who knows.
Good story telling and dialogue, which is natural, not stilted. I like their sense of humor, too. Good job.
pome lover
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2020
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well, like all very good writers, you leave your audience in suspense.
I thought, somehow the water wasn't really water, or at least ordinary water, and it was affecting them, but now, who knows.
Good story telling and dialogue, which is natural, not stilted. I like their sense of humor, too. Good job.
pome lover
Comment Written 06-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2020
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Thank you for your enthusiastic review. It's fun to hear your expression of perception about this. One of the other reviewers spoke of the Twilight Zone feeling. I will say, you will hear the theme within the next couple of chapters...lol If you are interested in reading the previous chapters, feel free. There is no need to do reviews. Just enjoy.
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will do!
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wonderful. You will not be disappointed.
Comment from Bill Pinder
Interesting story that expresses your interest in the native American culture. Just wondering if that's your culture or you're interested because you live near there. Thanks for sharing your creativity in this story.
Bill
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2020
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Interesting story that expresses your interest in the native American culture. Just wondering if that's your culture or you're interested because you live near there. Thanks for sharing your creativity in this story.
Bill
Comment Written 06-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2020
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Thank you for your involoved review. I have Native American in my heritage. My great great grandmother was Cree. Also I am very gifted to live in an area of Vermont that has wonderful stonewalls and some cairns, burial grounds across from my property. I will allude to some of my personal exeriences in my story. I have had nearly a solid diet of historical fiction in the books by Kathleen ONeal Gear and Michael Gear. Theyhave given my fodder for my next few chapters. If you haven't read all of the previous chapterts, feel free. There is no need for a review. Just enjoy it.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
This is great. Your book is enjoyable. I though this chapter was especially well written. Great use of dialogue. Your characters are coming to life. This was paced well. Terrific job.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2020
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This is great. Your book is enjoyable. I though this chapter was especially well written. Great use of dialogue. Your characters are coming to life. This was paced well. Terrific job.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2020
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Thank you for your enthusiastic review. I hope you have or are able to read some of the earlier chapters. There is no need to review, just enjoy.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
There's somebody in there? Aaack!! Wow - this was not what I was expecting for this next chapter, but you've definitely got my mind in questioning mode... I'm wondering if they're dehydrated or something... ;) Thanx for sharing! ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2020
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There's somebody in there? Aaack!! Wow - this was not what I was expecting for this next chapter, but you've definitely got my mind in questioning mode... I'm wondering if they're dehydrated or something... ;) Thanx for sharing! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 05-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2020
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Thank you for your enthusiastic review. I can always cound on an interested expression of perception from you. One of the other reviewers spoke of the Twilight Zone feeling. I will say, you will hear the theme within the next couple of chapters...lol
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
What a mesmerizing story. I was caught from the first paragraph to the very last. I, too, wonder what is in the basket. You have a wonderful style of writing. Well done!
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
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What a mesmerizing story. I was caught from the first paragraph to the very last. I, too, wonder what is in the basket. You have a wonderful style of writing. Well done!
Comment Written 04-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
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Thank you for your enthusiastic review. Some have likened the genre to Twilight Zone. I've been telling readers, you will hear Rod Serling or the theme song in at least the next couple of chapters.
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You're very welcome!
Comment from Mistydawn
I do hope this lady can help get them out of this odd realm they've seem to have found themselves in everything turning a gray. Something like that actually happened to me once in Colorado. I went into the store and everything was fine, came out and everything was a gray haze. My imagination went into overdrive and the theme from the twilight zone started playing in my head. I threw the groceries in the car and sped home.
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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2020
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I do hope this lady can help get them out of this odd realm they've seem to have found themselves in everything turning a gray. Something like that actually happened to me once in Colorado. I went into the store and everything was fine, came out and everything was a gray haze. My imagination went into overdrive and the theme from the twilight zone started playing in my head. I threw the groceries in the car and sped home.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2020
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OMG one of the other reviewers spoke of the Twilight Zone feeling. I will say,you will hear the theme within the next couple of chapters...lol
Oh by the way, a friend gave me a link that I immediately thought of you;
https://www.cbsnews.com/news/us-marshals-find-39-missing-children-georgia-operation-not-forgotten/?fbclid=IwAR0nfrvWfEBS5gA501sfM-x_xN8StmDzSnT2U2mkqvPEHwfhyqdpOUZkYDc
There is another link. Google Missing Persons 411