Trick or Treat 2020
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Comment from mermaids
There is an eery feel to your words. Covid-19 is much worse than goblins, ghosts and all the other characters of Halloween. Love your line "nurse galore". I am a nurse.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2021
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There is an eery feel to your words. Covid-19 is much worse than goblins, ghosts and all the other characters of Halloween. Love your line "nurse galore". I am a nurse.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2021
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Thank you!
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Lord,
A timely subject, my friend. I think a lot of parents will find other ways for their kids to celebrate Halloween. It's a shame it has to be this way, but we have to stay safe.
You nailed the syllable count, but the meter is all over the place. But who cares? It's a fun poem starring Covid-Schmovid, Prince of Dark Viruses.
"Masked children gather at the door
Nurses galore
Covid X-Men
Doctors again" ... I take it these are what 2020 children are getting dressed up like. I especially like "Covid V-Men"
Good Luck in the contest!
Cheers,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2020
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Hi Lord,
A timely subject, my friend. I think a lot of parents will find other ways for their kids to celebrate Halloween. It's a shame it has to be this way, but we have to stay safe.
You nailed the syllable count, but the meter is all over the place. But who cares? It's a fun poem starring Covid-Schmovid, Prince of Dark Viruses.
"Masked children gather at the door
Nurses galore
Covid X-Men
Doctors again" ... I take it these are what 2020 children are getting dressed up like. I especially like "Covid V-Men"
Good Luck in the contest!
Cheers,
Kimbob
Comment Written 07-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2020
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haha Thank you father.
Yes kids in fancy dress is definitely one take. 😉
I took license with iambic meter but the rules stated it wasn't required. I definitely considered changing it once I had laid the verse down. I came to the conclusion that the poem would be gutted of the nuance expressed. So let it stand as it was conceived.
I appreciate your comments.
Best
John
Comment from Sally Law
I love satires. You have made me laugh with this and I'm feeling better already. A fun minute and nice poetic swat at Covid-19.
Sending you my best today as always, and best wishes for the upcoming contest,
Sally ;)
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2021
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I love satires. You have made me laugh with this and I'm feeling better already. A fun minute and nice poetic swat at Covid-19.
Sending you my best today as always, and best wishes for the upcoming contest,
Sally ;)
Comment Written 07-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2021
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Thank you!
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your minute poem is vividly descriptive, creative, and very timely. The pandemic has a chokehold on every aspect of life. Those who take no precautions do so at their peril!
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2021
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Your minute poem is vividly descriptive, creative, and very timely. The pandemic has a chokehold on every aspect of life. Those who take no precautions do so at their peril!
Comment Written 07-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2021
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Thank you!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a very scary picture and I enjoyed the sentiments of this minute poem, but the iambic meter is completely missing here which is integral for minute poems, good luck! Love Dolly x
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2020
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This is a very scary picture and I enjoyed the sentiments of this minute poem, but the iambic meter is completely missing here which is integral for minute poems, good luck! Love Dolly x
Comment Written 07-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2020
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Thanks Dolly, as always I welcome your comments.
It is true this is not strictly iambic. I laid it down and then started to examine the feet with the intent of fixing it. However, I like the message and and realized it was going to be quite different if I followed the strict iambic format. Then I read the rules for this competition and they state that iambic is not a requirement. So on this occasion I decided ti leave it alone. 🙂 on a prior minute poem I did rework it to be iambic, on your advice, but on that occasion I only had a couple of minor changes to put it right. Not that it helped my any in the competition anyway. 🤣 My entries never cut the mustard but I don't mind at all. I get a lot of enjoyment out writing. So I will stick with this little fellow, because I am fond of him. 😂
Take care and stay safe. xx
John
Comment from Monica Chaddick
This is a wonderful poem that very accurately describes what covid is driving us to. I have already told my grandkids that I don't know if there will even be a Halloween this year.
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reply by the author on 06-Oct-2020
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This is a wonderful poem that very accurately describes what covid is driving us to. I have already told my grandkids that I don't know if there will even be a Halloween this year.
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Comment Written 06-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2020
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Ah no, your praise is making me blush. It is just an average poem at best.
Thank you
John 😁
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written minute poem about Halloween amidst the coronavirus pandemic that in itself us a horror show with many people affected in the one or other way.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2021
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A very well-written minute poem about Halloween amidst the coronavirus pandemic that in itself us a horror show with many people affected in the one or other way.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2021
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Thank you!
Comment from Mary Vigasin
My take is that the masked children are not Halloween mask but what we now live with daily having to wear masks for Covid 19. Your poem tells us of our lives now have changed with the sickness, masks, distancing and deaths.
Well done sir.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2021
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My take is that the masked children are not Halloween mask but what we now live with daily having to wear masks for Covid 19. Your poem tells us of our lives now have changed with the sickness, masks, distancing and deaths.
Well done sir.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2021
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Thank you!
Comment from royowen
Oh yes indeed, if one combines Covid 19 with the possibility of trying to describe what hell is, then that's a distinct possibility indeed, beautifully written, a great minute poet, a good satire, a feeling of unreality, well communicated, well done a great poem, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2021
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Oh yes indeed, if one combines Covid 19 with the possibility of trying to describe what hell is, then that's a distinct possibility indeed, beautifully written, a great minute poet, a good satire, a feeling of unreality, well communicated, well done a great poem, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 05-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2021
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Thank you!
Comment from papa55mike
Yeah, our church is wondering what to do about trunk or treat. I guess we'll just throw candy at kids. What a wonderfully written poem.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2021
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Yeah, our church is wondering what to do about trunk or treat. I guess we'll just throw candy at kids. What a wonderfully written poem.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 05-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2021
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Thank you!
