Grandpa's Magical Gift
Sometimes providence needs a little help...39 total reviews
Comment from pome lover
indeed I am smiling - cute, cute! and congratulations on your honors!
Did your husband do that for one of your kids, by chance, or did you just think up this delightful 80 word gem?
At any rate, I was happy to see the poor rabbit didn't smother overnight.:)
Neat story!
Katharine - pome lover
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2020
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indeed I am smiling - cute, cute! and congratulations on your honors!
Did your husband do that for one of your kids, by chance, or did you just think up this delightful 80 word gem?
At any rate, I was happy to see the poor rabbit didn't smother overnight.:)
Neat story!
Katharine - pome lover
Comment Written 06-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2020
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Nooo.... this one was totally fiction - came up with the idea while I was out on the patio... ;) ;) Thanx for the review, Lady Katharine! ;) Yvette
Comment from Stephen Force
Really really nice story, Well composed, succinct, and entertaining; all in 80 words.:) I like the way you inserted a little intrigue into this very very short story, while keeping the ending perfectly logical. Nice going and good luck.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2020
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Really really nice story, Well composed, succinct, and entertaining; all in 80 words.:) I like the way you inserted a little intrigue into this very very short story, while keeping the ending perfectly logical. Nice going and good luck.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2020
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Yeah, 80's not a whole lot, but it you 'got it' - hooray!! ;) Thanx so much for such an awesome review, Steve - I worry on these short ones that I might miss points 'in my head' and forget to 'spell them out' for the reader! ;) Take care! ;) Yvette
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice image and
story, Yvette, and yes
I was smiling:)
-After reading the story
and going back to the
beginning made it even better.
-You create good suspense,
especially at the reading of the will.
-A great ending and a very
happy little girl with an
imaginative father and grandfather!
-A very good entry; good luck.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2020
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-Very nice image and
story, Yvette, and yes
I was smiling:)
-After reading the story
and going back to the
beginning made it even better.
-You create good suspense,
especially at the reading of the will.
-A great ending and a very
happy little girl with an
imaginative father and grandfather!
-A very good entry; good luck.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2020
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Thanx so much for stopping in, Pam -- Eighty words aren't much, and I worry on these short ones that I might miss points 'in my head' and forget to 'spell them out' for the reader... so glad you really enjoyed! ;) Take care! ;) Yvette
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You are very welcome, Yvette; I don't think you missed any points in this one!
Comment from Joan E.
What a spectacular trunk! The last thing I expected was a rabbit to hop out!! I am still smiling and wish you well in the Flash Fiction contest. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2020
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What a spectacular trunk! The last thing I expected was a rabbit to hop out!! I am still smiling and wish you well in the Flash Fiction contest. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 04-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2020
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LOL!! So glad I was able to surprise you, Joan! :) Thanx so much for stopping in here -- Eighty words aren't much, and I worry on these short ones that I might miss points 'in my head' and forget to 'spell them out' for the reader! ;) Take care! ;) Yvette
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Not to worry--you included all the salient points. More cheers- Joan
Comment from Mark D. R.
Yvette,
You see I do read longer posts written by the people I follow. LOL
Cute twist to your fictional story - well conceived and written. Grandpas often have good sons (and daughters) who fill the offspring and spouses with happiness.
Mark
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2020
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Yvette,
You see I do read longer posts written by the people I follow. LOL
Cute twist to your fictional story - well conceived and written. Grandpas often have good sons (and daughters) who fill the offspring and spouses with happiness.
Mark
Comment Written 03-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2020
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Surprise, surprise - wink, wink! :) Thanx so much for stopping in, Mark -- Eighty words aren't much, and I worry on these short ones that I might miss points 'in my head' and forget to 'spell them out' for the reader... so glad you really enjoyed! ;) Take care! ;) Yvette
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Yup smiling to this unexpected story. Magic trunk, tell me kindly what I gotš??? a magical dream with a beautiful rabbit. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings and the context.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2020
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Yup smiling to this unexpected story. Magic trunk, tell me kindly what I gotš??? a magical dream with a beautiful rabbit. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings and the context.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2020
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Thanx so much for stopping in, Iza -- Eighty words aren't much, and I worry on these short ones that I might miss points 'in my head' and forget to 'spell them out' for the reader... so glad you really enjoyed! ;) Take care! ;) Yvette
Comment from Sankey
Hullo stranger. So sorry I have not been around your stuff in ages. I should have made a note somewhere of my favourite prose writers. Unfortunately, because I have fanned so many of you your writing notices get lost off the pages. This was a lovely read and I wish you well for the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2020
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Hullo stranger. So sorry I have not been around your stuff in ages. I should have made a note somewhere of my favourite prose writers. Unfortunately, because I have fanned so many of you your writing notices get lost off the pages. This was a lovely read and I wish you well for the contest.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2020
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Thanx so much for stopping in, Sankey -- have certainly missed hearing from you! ;) Eighty words aren't much, and I worry on these short ones that I might miss points 'in my head' and forget to 'spell them out' for the reader... so glad you really enjoyed! ;) Take care! ;) Yvette
Comment from Ronni
Hi Yvette,
Adorable little tale, sometimes expectations are always most
treasured by precious children, as proved by excited little Katy.
Her and Grandpa shared child like spirits when he was alive,
and he delivered his magical gift in equally child like joy!
Clever twist....poor Charles, so bereft!
Thanks for sharing dear. Cute reminder to us all about
expectations and losing sight of the magical or most precious
no matter in what form it arrives or is gifted to us.
Love, blessings, Ronni (;) (:)
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2020
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Hi Yvette,
Adorable little tale, sometimes expectations are always most
treasured by precious children, as proved by excited little Katy.
Her and Grandpa shared child like spirits when he was alive,
and he delivered his magical gift in equally child like joy!
Clever twist....poor Charles, so bereft!
Thanks for sharing dear. Cute reminder to us all about
expectations and losing sight of the magical or most precious
no matter in what form it arrives or is gifted to us.
Love, blessings, Ronni (;) (:)
Comment Written 02-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2020
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Thanx so much for stopping in, Lady Ronni - hope you're still up and enjoying the sunshine!! These short ones are tough as eighty words aren't much, and I worry on these short ones that I might miss points 'in my head' and forget to 'spell them out' for the reader... so glad you really enjoyed! ;) Keep taking good care! ;) Yvette
Comment from equestrik
This is such a lovely write-it made me smile and so happy for this little grandchild. So sweet. This is well told in the 80 words and is perfect for the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2020
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This is such a lovely write-it made me smile and so happy for this little grandchild. So sweet. This is well told in the 80 words and is perfect for the contest.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2020
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Wow - such a wonderful surprise, my lady!! ;) Thanx so much for this one and for those bright stars this morning -- Eighty words aren't much, and I worry on these short ones that I might miss points 'in my head' and forget to 'spell them out' for the reader... so glad you really enjoyed! ;) Take care! ;) Yvette
Comment from wishawave
I like the arrangement of the storyline. The characters are very fresh and vivid. It is a surprise at the end of the story. I enjoyed reading your short story. The content is meaningful.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2020
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I like the arrangement of the storyline. The characters are very fresh and vivid. It is a surprise at the end of the story. I enjoyed reading your short story. The content is meaningful.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2020
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Thanx so much for stopping in, wishawave -- Eighty words aren't much, and I worry on these short ones that I might miss points 'in my head' and forget to 'spell them out' for the reader... so glad you really enjoyed! ;) Take care! ;) Yvette