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Mona Lisa

5-7-5 (dark eyes scan afar)

26 total reviews 
Comment from Carlos' girl
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okay. you win. wow..i mean WOW.. really says exactly everything a poem about Mona Lisa should say , no more no less. crazy good, love it. This is genius. so glad I read this. its ...perfect

 Comment Written 19-Nov-2020

reply by the author on 19-Nov-2020
    Carlos? girl!

    Wow! I have been in her presence twice in my life; the second time with my 17 1/2 year old daughter. Both times she followed me around the gallery. I was among the many who were mesmerized by her beauty and gaze.
reply by Carlos' girl on 19-Nov-2020
    i bet the mona lisa in.person is intense. good luck w contest!
Comment from mauial
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Good job with keeping with the 5-7-5 poem style. I think your poem pretty much captures what the well chosen art work projects. Your words were very melodic.

 Comment Written 19-Nov-2020

reply by the author on 19-Nov-2020
    I was lucky to have her look at me on two occasions. I was not the only one in the gallery who was mesmerized by her gaze (-; Pleased my melody affected you positively.
Comment from tempeste
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Ciao poet! I gave you your first vote!

A lovely tribute to Da Vinci's masterpiece .. still today after 500 years her gaze and smile enchants us ..

 Comment Written 19-Nov-2020

reply by the author on 19-Nov-2020
    Tempeste,

    Thanks in advance for your vote. She will be disappointed if others don?I agree with you (-;

    You might like to read about da Vinci and Michaelangelo in Firenze in the historical novel:

    Oil and Marble: A Novel of Leonardo and Michelangelo
    by Stephanie Storey

    From 1501?1505, Leonardo da Vinci and Michelangelo Buonarroti both lived and worked in Florence. Leonardo was a charming, handsome fifty year-old at the peak of his career. Michelangelo was a temperamental sculptor in his mid-twenties, desperate to make a name for himself
Comment from Jasmine Girl
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I have been to Louvre and seen the original painting Mona Lisa. This one is not a bad one with a twist. With her painted eyebrows and red lips, she could enamor us all. With the full moon under her, she almost looks like a werewolf.

Well done.

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2020

reply by the author on 13-Nov-2020
    Thanks Lisa! I saw her twice. Each time she followed me. Others likely had a similar experience (-;

    If you want to read a most interesting book about two of the world?s greatest artists, consider:

    Oil and Marble: A Novel of Leonardo and Michelangelo
    by Stephanie Storey

    From 1501?1505, Leonardo da Vinci and Michelangelo Buonarroti both lived and worked in Florence. Leonardo was a charming, handsome fifty year-old at the peak of his career. Michelangelo was a temperamental sculptor in his mid-twenties, desperate to make a name for himself....
reply by Jasmine Girl on 13-Nov-2020
    Thank you so much for this book recommendation and it looks like a very interesting and entertaining book. I will definitely read or listen to it.
Comment from judiverse
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This a great entry, and best of luck in the contest. That's a striking image you selected for your artwork. You're privileged to have seen the actual Mona Lisa hanging in the Louve. Your words lend a musical sound to the poem. Your syllable count is precise, and you have some excellent rhyme with dark and afar. Alliteration with enigmatic and enamors adds to the musical quality. judi

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2020

reply by the author on 13-Nov-2020
    Judi,

    Thanks so much your generous remarks for my Mona Lisa contest entry. You can Google its actual size, but it is surprisingly small and actually not very bright. Regardless, her gaze and smile capture you.
reply by judiverse on 13-Nov-2020
    You're welcome. judi
Comment from Ann Market
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You described very well the Mona Lisa painting! I really liked your description sentence, and I enjoyed reading this! Good luck to you in the contest!

 Comment Written 13-Nov-2020

reply by the author on 13-Nov-2020
    Thank you Ann for your generous comments and good wishes.
Comment from lyenochka
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I do love da Vinci's Mona Lisa best. Or La Jaconde / La Giaconda (Delight) which sounds better than "monkey smile." Her smile is really enigmatic. I like your repetition of "en" words (enigmatic, enamored). Best wishes in the contest!

 Comment Written 12-Nov-2020

reply by the author on 12-Nov-2020
    You may like to read Stephanie Storey?s historical novel about Michaelangelo sculpting David and Da Vinci painting Mona Lisa in Florence, Italy in the first few years of 1500. Thanks for your encouraging words.
reply by lyenochka on 12-Nov-2020
    Interesting! Someday! I'm mostly reading articles and Fanstory posts now.
Comment from Cindy Decker
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Mark, I love this mysterious, modern-day version of Mona Lisa. Da Vinci couldn't have found a better model! 400 years after her inception her smile still captivated.
Excellent work, Mark.
Cindy

 Comment Written 12-Nov-2020

reply by the author on 12-Nov-2020
    Cindy,

    At the same time Leonardo painted Mona Lisa, Michaelangelo was sculpting David in Florence, Italy. If you are interested in reading a novel about them in the early 1500s, read Stephanie Storey?s historical fiction, Oil and Marble - a fascinating story.
reply by Cindy Decker on 12-Nov-2020
    Thank you. I will look up this book. Thank you for your conmentary.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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I have had the privilege of seeing this painting for real when I was just 16 as we had a trip to Paris and then on to Barcelona. Me and my family were on a 3 week adventure in our little Rover 90. I remember being disappointed by it because the painting seemed small and the colours dark. Her critical eyes followed me as I left the room, your words brought back the memory, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 12-Nov-2020

reply by the author on 12-Nov-2020
    Dolly,

    You are right about that painting. Twice in my life, she glanced my way. The second time was with my daughter in her teen years. Pleased my post brought back such fond memories for you.

    If you like to read, you may want to get Stephanie Storey?s novel, Oil and Marble about Michaelangelo and da Vinci creating David and Mona Lisa in the early 1500s.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
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A very well-written 5-7-5 poem about the eyes that scan afar while her smile brings magic feeling to everyone around in the room.

 Comment Written 12-Nov-2020

reply by the author on 12-Nov-2020
    Thanks Sandra! I had the pleasure to have her glance my way twice in my life. The second time, with my teenage daughter, was the best.