The Reunion
250-word story. Waiting and wondering...10 total reviews
Comment from Mia Twysted
Not quite the result I would have expected. If someone broke my heart I don't know if I could be so forgiving so fast. It says so much about the character of that woman.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2020
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Not quite the result I would have expected. If someone broke my heart I don't know if I could be so forgiving so fast. It says so much about the character of that woman.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2020
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I like to think he only broke her heart by leaving, not through any bad behaviour. He realized he shouldn't have moved away so he came back.
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This is a sketchy beginning sentence but you carried the tone on well, continuing the setting, character study, and plot. The best part was the reveal, mask down. They both found out who they really were. A happy ending.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2020
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This is a sketchy beginning sentence but you carried the tone on well, continuing the setting, character study, and plot. The best part was the reveal, mask down. They both found out who they really were. A happy ending.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2020
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Thanks for your review!
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
I think that this is the kind of reunion that every man would look forward to receiving. I like this and enjoyed reading this well written work. Great job and well done!
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2020
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I think that this is the kind of reunion that every man would look forward to receiving. I like this and enjoyed reading this well written work. Great job and well done!
Comment Written 02-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2020
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Thanks for your review!
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the Unmasked writing prompt.
This is an interesting story, well told.
Well done and I wish you good luck with the contest.
Sharon
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I think this is a good entry for the Unmasked writing prompt.
This is an interesting story, well told.
Well done and I wish you good luck with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 02-Oct-2020
Comment from Earl Corp
Recognise should be spelled recognize. You did a nice job with the prompt. Very nice job. Good luck in the contest. Stay safe and stay healthy.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2020
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Recognise should be spelled recognize. You did a nice job with the prompt. Very nice job. Good luck in the contest. Stay safe and stay healthy.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2020
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Thanks for reviewing and for your nice words. (I write in New Zealand English and we spell with an 's'... my computer spelling is set for my country... if i put a 'z' it changes it back to an 's'. We aren't all Americans on the FanStory site.)
Comment from equestrik
This is a sweet and fun write for the 'unmasked' contest. I think th end was great as I feared an unpleasant surprize ending. Very nice entry for this.
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This is a sweet and fun write for the 'unmasked' contest. I think th end was great as I feared an unpleasant surprize ending. Very nice entry for this.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2020
Comment from Debra White
Hello :)
Belinda seems keen, despite having had her heart broken by Gary before!
I enjoyed your story. You built from the starting sentence beautifully and crafted a really well written and engaging tale. I like the suspense you created as Gary waiting for Belinda's reaction upon seeing him again and I also particularly enjoyed the part where Gary fumbled his mask and twanged himself in the eye!
Excellent!
Good luck in the voting booth.
Best wishes, Debra :)
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Hello :)
Belinda seems keen, despite having had her heart broken by Gary before!
I enjoyed your story. You built from the starting sentence beautifully and crafted a really well written and engaging tale. I like the suspense you created as Gary waiting for Belinda's reaction upon seeing him again and I also particularly enjoyed the part where Gary fumbled his mask and twanged himself in the eye!
Excellent!
Good luck in the voting booth.
Best wishes, Debra :)
Comment Written 30-Sep-2020
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This Romance Fiction is a bit humorous though the truth discovered, Belinda did it and her reunion with Gary became possible even at his new moustache; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
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This Romance Fiction is a bit humorous though the truth discovered, Belinda did it and her reunion with Gary became possible even at his new moustache; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
Comment Written 30-Sep-2020
Comment from Iza Deleanu
That's a positive and unexpected happy end story:"Belinda stared, unsure...
"It's you! I nearly didn't recognise you! Your new moustache will tickle when I kiss you." I think your story met the contest requirements and has the element of suspense. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your contest and your writings.
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That's a positive and unexpected happy end story:"Belinda stared, unsure...
"It's you! I nearly didn't recognise you! Your new moustache will tickle when I kiss you." I think your story met the contest requirements and has the element of suspense. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your contest and your writings.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2020
Comment from djsaxon
A charming vignette, prompted I guess by definition and these extraordinary times. Nice flow. I totally endorse the use of italics to convey the thought process. I also use and love the device. It is immediate and avoids unnecessary speech tags. Well done and good luck in the prompt - DJ
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A charming vignette, prompted I guess by definition and these extraordinary times. Nice flow. I totally endorse the use of italics to convey the thought process. I also use and love the device. It is immediate and avoids unnecessary speech tags. Well done and good luck in the prompt - DJ
Comment Written 30-Sep-2020
