Hotter in hell
Hell found...love13 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This one-hundred-word story, Hotter in Hell, has the required word count and necessary words and leaves us with a sassy woman giving the devil a hard time.
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This one-hundred-word story, Hotter in Hell, has the required word count and necessary words and leaves us with a sassy woman giving the devil a hard time.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2020
Comment from Cindy Decker
Hi, Iza,
This chapter is so relevant today. I was taught a long time ago, that the most difficult part of hell is separation from God. Until the moment a person reaches hell, he has full access to Jesus, to be his friend, to cry to him, to plead with him, and to thank him, and love him. When he or she reaches hell, God is nowhere near and can no longer hear a person's cries. That's what I found was the most disturbing about hell as your story illustrates.
Your chapter is a good lesson for every one to learn.
Best wishes in the contest.
Cindy
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2020
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Hi, Iza,
This chapter is so relevant today. I was taught a long time ago, that the most difficult part of hell is separation from God. Until the moment a person reaches hell, he has full access to Jesus, to be his friend, to cry to him, to plead with him, and to thank him, and love him. When he or she reaches hell, God is nowhere near and can no longer hear a person's cries. That's what I found was the most disturbing about hell as your story illustrates.
Your chapter is a good lesson for every one to learn.
Best wishes in the contest.
Cindy
Comment Written 30-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2020
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing my silly story:)
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Writer,
hahahahahahahahahahaha I can almost understand this. I mean, if you know it's your last time and last chance, why WOULDN'T you want to make the best impression possible?
But I didn't get the 'until... is gone'?
What does that mean?
Thanks and good luck!
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2020
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Dear Mystery Writer,
hahahahahahahahahahaha I can almost understand this. I mean, if you know it's your last time and last chance, why WOULDN'T you want to make the best impression possible?
But I didn't get the 'until... is gone'?
What does that mean?
Thanks and good luck!
Comment Written 28-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2020
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing my silly story:)
Comment from rockmann
I guess a girl really wants to look good, no matter where she is. But I imagine being in hell will make her makeup fall off. Or, maybe her vision of hell will be not being able to wear makeup. Either way, nicely done.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2020
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I guess a girl really wants to look good, no matter where she is. But I imagine being in hell will make her makeup fall off. Or, maybe her vision of hell will be not being able to wear makeup. Either way, nicely done.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2020
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing my silly story:)
Comment from Y. M. Roger
A fun take on the contest here -- thanx for sharing!! :)
pit hands-on her heart praying. --> pit, hands on her heart, praying.
fire, your screams --> fire; your screams OR fire. Your screams
What God has to --> What has God to
Oh, well, let me put my --> Oh, let me put on my
hell it doesn't --> hell, it doesn't
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2020
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A fun take on the contest here -- thanx for sharing!! :)
pit hands-on her heart praying. --> pit, hands on her heart, praying.
fire, your screams --> fire; your screams OR fire. Your screams
What God has to --> What has God to
Oh, well, let me put my --> Oh, let me put on my
hell it doesn't --> hell, it doesn't
Comment Written 28-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2020
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Hello my dear friend:) and thank you so much for your review and comments:)
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, anonymous,
Great entry for the 100 Word Story writing prompt contest. The discussion between girl and demon is funny. Good word count. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2020
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Hello, anonymous,
Great entry for the 100 Word Story writing prompt contest. The discussion between girl and demon is funny. Good word count. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2020
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Thank you Ms. Gypsy Blue Rose:) for your kind comments and beautiful review:)
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is a great entry for the 100 Word Story writing prompt. It had my attention from beginning to end, and I chuckled at the humorous end. Best of luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2020
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This is a great entry for the 100 Word Story writing prompt. It had my attention from beginning to end, and I chuckled at the humorous end. Best of luck in the contest!
Comment Written 28-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2020
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Thank You so much, my dear friend:)
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You're welcome!
Comment from Patty Palmer
Way to go!! The story about hell is funny. Your imagination of what hell is like sounds about right. When she said she was going to put on her mascara, all I could think of was it's going to melt and run all over her face and then she will look like shit for sure! Good job!
Patty
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2020
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Way to go!! The story about hell is funny. Your imagination of what hell is like sounds about right. When she said she was going to put on her mascara, all I could think of was it's going to melt and run all over her face and then she will look like shit for sure! Good job!
Patty
Comment Written 27-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2020
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Ha, Ha, Ha you are right:)
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is an interesting entry for the 100 Word Story contest.
This short story is fairly well told but seems to be missing a few words, I suppose to make it fit into the required word count.
"nobody is really gone until...is gone?" Not sure what was supposed to be there.
"let me put my mascara." Put ON my mascara??
Well done and I wish you good luck with the contest.
Sharon
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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2020
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I think this is an interesting entry for the 100 Word Story contest.
This short story is fairly well told but seems to be missing a few words, I suppose to make it fit into the required word count.
"nobody is really gone until...is gone?" Not sure what was supposed to be there.
"let me put my mascara." Put ON my mascara??
Well done and I wish you good luck with the contest.
Sharon
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2020
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Hello my dear friend:) and thank you so much for your review and comments:)
Comment from royowen
What an excellent entry in this 100 word, poor lady, obviously not terribly aware of hell as a permanent home, until the devil reminds her where she is, then, of course a women needs to be looking good, beautifully writteN good luck, blessings Roy
Typo : let me put (on) my mascara.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2020
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What an excellent entry in this 100 word, poor lady, obviously not terribly aware of hell as a permanent home, until the devil reminds her where she is, then, of course a women needs to be looking good, beautifully writteN good luck, blessings Roy
Typo : let me put (on) my mascara.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2020
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Hello my dear friend:) and thank you so much for your review and comments:)
