Comment from Earl Corp

Excellent

I like the line, "every flower shall one day wilt and die." That's a powereful line. Very nice job. Thanks for sharing. Good luck in the contest. Stay safe and stay healthy.

 Comment Written 29-Sep-2020

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reply by the author on 29-Sep-2020

Thanks Earl.
It's always a pleasure to see your review.
Ricky

Comment from palmart

Excellent

Great Prologue! It is very hard the reading of contrasts: children going to a Park for a walk with nice butterflies (soft) and the impact of the death and the Brain Haemorrhage (hard). All in the same paragraph! It modifies the feelings in just a bunch of words. Up and down...

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2020

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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2020

Thanks for your review.
As a child I would go to her house to meet her and knock on the door and then we would walk to school.
Multiple trips there was no answer.
Finally I searched out her teacher.
And Miss green asked me if I knew what heaven was?
And then she explained why Jen was no longer in her class.
it was a little bit hard to take especially at young age of only six years old
Ricky

reply by palmart on 25-Sep-2020

You`re very welcome, Ricky1024! What a situation for such a little person!!

Life tests us, despite our age..!