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eviction

Six word poetry contest

43 total reviews 
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
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Congrats on your prize! So clever and whimsical--impressive internal alliteration (to coin a term) re VICTIm and eVICTIon. Glad I caught up to this! Cheers. LIZ

 Comment Written 30-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 03-Oct-2020
    Thank you, Elizabeth for the awesome review. Sorry about the delayed response.
    God bless
    Steve
Comment from lyenochka
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Very poetically said! I like the repetition of the "vict" in "victim" and "eviction." Great personification of the season of Summer. Congratulations in placing in the contest!

 Comment Written 30-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 30-Sep-2020
    Thank you, Lyenochka. I had fun with this one.
    God bless
    Steve
Comment from Melissa Russell Deur
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Congratulations on your Third Place win! I love the phrase "leaves fall victim" as it plays two ways: leaves fall and fall victim. What a wonderful and arresting thought: Summer's eviction. It does seem as if Summer suddenly gets kicked out! The interplay of "victim" and "eviction" is clever, especially with the repetition of the "vic" sound!

 Comment Written 30-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 30-Sep-2020
    Thank you, Melissa, for this most excellent, inspiring review.
    God bless
    Steve
reply by Melissa Russell Deur on 30-Sep-2020
    I'm glad you are back to writing!
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2020
    Thank you.
reply by Melissa Russell Deur on 03-Oct-2020
Comment from Wabigoon
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Neo-
I would think it would be winter's eviction, or fall's, or that's what I'd expect regarding the usual thinking about the seasons. Hard to create a poems in so few words. Nice try.

Best
Wabigoon/Jeff

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 30-Sep-2020
    Thank you, Jeff.
    God bless
    Steve
reply by Wabigoon on 30-Sep-2020
    I see that what you mean is summer is being evicted, not that it is summer's eviction of something. That makes the poem better but, dammit, tricky, dependent upon that understanding.

    Jeff
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2020
    LOL! Yeah, I love play on words. Messes with the masses. Thank you, Jeff.
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
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Hello Neonewman, this is a really well thought out six words. It is not easy to get a message across with only six words but you have very cleverly done so. Good use of metaphor and a lovely picture. Very well done. Good Luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy x

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 27-Sep-2020
    Thank you, Dorothy. I love crafting these short pieces.
    God bless!
Comment from Cindy Decker
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Your poem is an excellent way of saying Summer turned to Fall. Very artistic six word poem. This is a really good contest contender.
Best wishes,
Cindy

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 27-Sep-2020
    Thank you, Cindy. I enjoyed the challenge and love this time of the year.
    God bless!
Comment from Mastery
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Hi Steve. methinks you must have taken time away from the site for a while, because I've not seen you in a long time. Weren't you working on a book last time you were on here?

Anyway, I like this little offering. "Victim" and "eviction" have aa nice ring when used in the same poem, don't they? I Hope all is well with you, my friend.

I am working on my fifth novel for publishing as we speak. Take a look if you have time. :) Bob



































































































































































































































































 Comment Written 26-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 27-Sep-2020
    Bob, Great to hear from you, my friend. Excited to hear about your new novel. This year as you know has been crazy and full of ups and downs. I have a publisher interested in my novel and want a series of three. They also want me to have the second completed and the third started before we move forward. I will certainly find time in the near future to catch up on yours. Thank you for the great review.
    God bless!
    Steve
Comment from evesayshi
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In my opinion, a striking presentation, obviously in full compliance with the prompt - the picture is a perfect complement to the write. Best wishes in the contest...

 Comment Written 26-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 27-Sep-2020
    Thank you for another awesome review, evesayshi.
    God bless!
reply by evesayshi on 27-Sep-2020
    You are very welcome...Eve
Comment from Lulube
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Great imagery, Well descriptive words placed in the right order, to deliver a total picture. Well done, and all the best in the contest. Wonderful photo to go with your poem

lulube

 Comment Written 26-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 26-Sep-2020
    Thank you, Lulube, for this most Exceptional review. This sixer has certainly brightened my morning.
    God bless!
Comment from Ric Myworld
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Yes, with summer on the way out it won't be long before all the leaves are gone, and for many, the threat of cold rains and snow will soon be moving in. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 26-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 26-Sep-2020
    We rarely get snow here in the Houston area, but the rain always makes its debut. Thank you for the awesome review, Ric.
    God bless!