Incident At Taysom Hill Park
A black sun rose one morning18 total reviews
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Definitely not a happy contest entry. It is, however, well written and tells a complete story. The character is believable and there's a problem. I'm not to fond of the solution, but still a good story. Good luck with the contest. I'm sure you won't need it.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2020
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Definitely not a happy contest entry. It is, however, well written and tells a complete story. The character is believable and there's a problem. I'm not to fond of the solution, but still a good story. Good luck with the contest. I'm sure you won't need it.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2020
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Comment from Mary Vigasin
I do like this story of murder and suicide.
For only 80 words; it gives the entire picture of the the despair of the killer, why he killed her and his final verdict.
Well done job.
Good luck in the contests.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2020
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I do like this story of murder and suicide.
For only 80 words; it gives the entire picture of the the despair of the killer, why he killed her and his final verdict.
Well done job.
Good luck in the contests.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2020
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Glad you enjoyed this story. Appreciate the review.
Comment from BethShelby
Wow! This is brutal flash fiction. It sounds like Derrick managed to knock himself down a little to far to picked back up. After the sledge hammer incident, the gun in his mouth was the most logical choice. Nicely written. Good luck in the contest.
Beth
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2020
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Wow! This is brutal flash fiction. It sounds like Derrick managed to knock himself down a little to far to picked back up. After the sledge hammer incident, the gun in his mouth was the most logical choice. Nicely written. Good luck in the contest.
Beth
Comment Written 23-Sep-2020
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Your insights are spot on. Much appreciated review.
Comment from Sanku
This surely is black sun rising. I feel sorry for the man who pulled the trigger on himself .But i shudder at what the girl had to suffer.All the best for the contest.
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This surely is black sun rising. I feel sorry for the man who pulled the trigger on himself .But i shudder at what the girl had to suffer.All the best for the contest.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2020
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Glad you enjoyed this story. Appreciate the review.
Comment from Earl Corp
Congrats for being able to tell a complete story within 80 words, no matter how dark it was. Very nice job. Good luck in the contest. Stay safe and stay healthy.
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Congrats for being able to tell a complete story within 80 words, no matter how dark it was. Very nice job. Good luck in the contest. Stay safe and stay healthy.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2020
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Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written eighty-word flash fiction about the events that lead to the incident at Taysom Hill Park. He knows he knocked himself down too far when he kills his cheating girlfriend and could not face the consequences and end us life as well.
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A very well-written eighty-word flash fiction about the events that lead to the incident at Taysom Hill Park. He knows he knocked himself down too far when he kills his cheating girlfriend and could not face the consequences and end us life as well.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2020
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Comment from robyn corum
BRETT!
Oh my stars. I was NOT expecting THAT. Which, I suppose, makes the moment have that much more of an impact. But, whoa...
I hate that this crazy man had to take another with him - isn't that far too often the case?
A complete story in just 80 words. Kudos!
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BRETT!
Oh my stars. I was NOT expecting THAT. Which, I suppose, makes the moment have that much more of an impact. But, whoa...
I hate that this crazy man had to take another with him - isn't that far too often the case?
A complete story in just 80 words. Kudos!
Comment Written 23-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2020
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Appreciate your insights and the review.
Comment from Bill Schott
This eighty-word flash fiction story, Incident at Taysom Hill Park, has the required word count and and takes the reader to Derrick Brown's last bad decision.
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This eighty-word flash fiction story, Incident at Taysom Hill Park, has the required word count and and takes the reader to Derrick Brown's last bad decision.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2020
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