Rebellious September
Amphibrach meter ~ Rhyming poem29 total reviews
Comment from Mistydawn
What a cute little poem. I love how you humanize the seasons, give them personal characteristics. It makes them seem so real. Your poem is very well-written, interesting start to finish. Good luck with your contest.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
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What a cute little poem. I love how you humanize the seasons, give them personal characteristics. It makes them seem so real. Your poem is very well-written, interesting start to finish. Good luck with your contest.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
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Hi Misty! Thank you!!!!!
Melissa
Comment from June Sargent
This is lovely! The rhythm and rhyme just flowed so flawlessly. And I could picture September standing her ground and not leaving. The imagery highlighted by the artwork of faded sunflowers is perfect. When it's over, it's over. There is no fat lady waiting to sing!
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
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This is lovely! The rhythm and rhyme just flowed so flawlessly. And I could picture September standing her ground and not leaving. The imagery highlighted by the artwork of faded sunflowers is perfect. When it's over, it's over. There is no fat lady waiting to sing!
Comment Written 22-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
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Hi June. Thanks for the wonderful review. so glad you liked my galloping beat!! :)
Melissa
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Amphibrach meter ~ Rhyming poem about summer that holds on and not willing to enter Autumn but eventually it will have to stand back so that nature can complete its seasonal cycle.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
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A very well-written Amphibrach meter ~ Rhyming poem about summer that holds on and not willing to enter Autumn but eventually it will have to stand back so that nature can complete its seasonal cycle.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
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Thank you Sandra!!
Melissa
Comment from Susan Louise Gabriel
This is an excellent poem in the amphibrach meter! You did an excellent job in maintaining the meter all the way through the poem. Your poem and the poetic language you use is really excellent. I wish I still had six stars left.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2020
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This is an excellent poem in the amphibrach meter! You did an excellent job in maintaining the meter all the way through the poem. Your poem and the poetic language you use is really excellent. I wish I still had six stars left.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2020
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Hello Susan. Thank you very much for your lovely review... wishing me six stars is such a compliment!! :)
Melissa
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is an amazing write, cleverly worded and perfectly metered and a pleasure to read Melissa. You have certainly mastered meter in your poetry and added a touch of magic to all your work. When I see your name, I know I am in for a treat. This is a magical write Melissa, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2020
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This is an amazing write, cleverly worded and perfectly metered and a pleasure to read Melissa. You have certainly mastered meter in your poetry and added a touch of magic to all your work. When I see your name, I know I am in for a treat. This is a magical write Melissa, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 22-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2020
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Hi Dolly. Your review just melts my heart. I am delighted that you liked this Rebellious verse ;). I do not know where it came from, but when I repeated September in my mind, I heard amphibrach...go figure. LOL. Hugs!
Melissa
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Not an easy meter to write in, but you nailed it Melissa, love Dolly x
Comment from Miss Cookie Atkinson
I love the artwork you choose to go with your poem, they are a perfect match.
You captured my attention from the start, in fact it turned my heat Fr the first time last night
thank you for sharing Cookie
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2020
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I love the artwork you choose to go with your poem, they are a perfect match.
You captured my attention from the start, in fact it turned my heat Fr the first time last night
thank you for sharing Cookie
Comment Written 22-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2020
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I really appreciate your comments Miss Cookie!!
Melissa
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Thank you very much
Cookie
Comment from Pantygynt
This is a difficult metre to write in and one I intend to look at in the class. The effectiveness of its flow depends more than most on matching the natural stress to the metrical stress like any metrical writing but it is a little more difficult.
September is an excellent example of what one might call an amphibrachic word. Sunflowers is not, at least not in my pronunciation.
September = x / x = amphibrach
Sunflowers = / x x = dactyl
Deluges = / x x = dactyl
As far as I can see those two dactylic examples are what is 'throwiing' the rhythm somewhat. The rest seems perfectly sound.
Hope this helps.
Please keep a copy of the original for use in class.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2020
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This is a difficult metre to write in and one I intend to look at in the class. The effectiveness of its flow depends more than most on matching the natural stress to the metrical stress like any metrical writing but it is a little more difficult.
September is an excellent example of what one might call an amphibrachic word. Sunflowers is not, at least not in my pronunciation.
September = x / x = amphibrach
Sunflowers = / x x = dactyl
Deluges = / x x = dactyl
As far as I can see those two dactylic examples are what is 'throwiing' the rhythm somewhat. The rest seems perfectly sound.
Hope this helps.
Please keep a copy of the original for use in class.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2020
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I am so glad you looked at this one, Jim, and look forward to discussing it with you. Thank you bunches!
Melissa
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your poem is excellent in all respects--skillfully-written, vividly descriptive, and lovely. Personification is effectively and enthusiastically used to describe seasons not wanting to give up control.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2020
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Your poem is excellent in all respects--skillfully-written, vividly descriptive, and lovely. Personification is effectively and enthusiastically used to describe seasons not wanting to give up control.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2020
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Hi Janice. Thank you, sweet friend, for your lovely and encouraging comments. :)
Melissa
Comment from poetwatch
Amphibrach is something I have to look up, Melissa. :) but I do like what I read. Your poem has a good marching beat and of course you know your way around words. Woman you do know how to write poetry. This is a good entry for the Rhyming Poem contest.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2020
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Amphibrach is something I have to look up, Melissa. :) but I do like what I read. Your poem has a good marching beat and of course you know your way around words. Woman you do know how to write poetry. This is a good entry for the Rhyming Poem contest.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2020
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Hello Jose. You have melted my heart with your wonderful review and encouraging words. Thanks, my friend!!
Melissa
Comment from judiverse
I can't believe we're almost into October already. I feel we were robbed of summer because of the virus. The country has seen a lot of hurricanes this season. I don't envy people living in those states. We have quite a few leaves blowing about, so fall is definitely coming. I like your description of September having a "rebellious façade." It doesn't want to yield to October. I hope we'll see some spectacular fall colors this year. We deserve it. Excellent rhyming poem, and best of luck in the contest. It reads very gracefully, with lovely word choices. judi
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2020
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I can't believe we're almost into October already. I feel we were robbed of summer because of the virus. The country has seen a lot of hurricanes this season. I don't envy people living in those states. We have quite a few leaves blowing about, so fall is definitely coming. I like your description of September having a "rebellious façade." It doesn't want to yield to October. I hope we'll see some spectacular fall colors this year. We deserve it. Excellent rhyming poem, and best of luck in the contest. It reads very gracefully, with lovely word choices. judi
Comment Written 21-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2020
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Hi Judi. Thank you for the excellent review. I am looking forward to cooler Fall temps too!!
Melissa
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You're welcome. We are starting to get those cooler temps. judi
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You're welcome. We are getting cooler days. There is not going to be a Covered Bridge festival this year, but I figure my husband and I can drive around and see the foliage and covered bridges anyway. judi
