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Comment from Eternal Muse
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I can't believe you could create a full-body poem like this with no letter A! It is amazing. You are very talented and creative. Loved your humor and wit, as well as your artistic presentation and artwork.

The skin on my body, loosened by time,
keeps me from thinking I'm still in my prime.
Our youthful good looks don't linger for long.
The urge to hold on is ever so strong.

What an accomplishment! I am very impressed.


 Comment Written 23-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
    Thank you so much for the review and for those wonderful comments. I'm so glas you liked it.
    Beth
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
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Poem with no letter A
Mirrors
by BethShelby

Hello, Beth,

It's too bad you missed the deadline for the contest, this is a great entry. I didn't even notice the letter A was missing. The topic is relatable for many women. Well done.

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
    Thank you so much for the review and for your lovely comments.
    Beth
Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
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What a great poem, written without any A's! I feel so bad for you, that the contest was filled, when you were done writing it, but you did a fantastic job. I enjoyed the theme, having already entered the 7th decade of my life, myself, asking myself where the time has gone and what has happened to the body I left behind?

I only found one spag:

My stuffy nose is, most likely. bright red.
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My stuffy nose is, most likely, bright red.

I really love that picture! Where did you get it?

Here are my favorite verses:

"The skin on my body, loosened by time,
keeps me from thinking I'm still in my prime."

and,

"The prize is not for the glory of youth.
Time comes with wisdom, discernment, plus truth."

 Comment Written 22-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
    Thank you so much Mary Kay, I probably got more reviews and stars on this than I would if I'd made the contest. My eyes have gotten so bad lately, I can't seem to tell a period from a comma. I'm so glad you liked this and I'm glad you told me your favorite lines.
    Beth
reply by Mary Kay Bonfante on 23-Sep-2020
    That's great to know, Beth, Congratulations! You're very welcome. Love and blessings, Mary Kay xoxo
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2020
    You should be a paid editor. You see most all the errors and that is a big help.
    Beth
reply by Mary Kay Bonfante on 23-Sep-2020
    Thanks so much :-)
    I was an editorial assistant for several years, but it was hard to deal with the deadlines. They loved my accuracy (called me "Eagle Eyes") but my speed, not so much!
    This is much more pleasant.
Comment from Tina Crute
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This is such a relatable poem. What woman doesn't consider how her body and appearance have changed?
The picture and background look antiquated because of the colors. Wise choice on both!
No A's...That must've been hard to do. I am sorry you didn't make it into the contest, because this would be a contender!
Tina

 Comment Written 22-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 22-Sep-2020
    Thank you so much for the review and comments. I probably got more reviews than I would have if I'd made the contest so that is okay. I'm glad I posted it anyway. I enjoyed your comments.
    Beth
reply by Tina Crute on 23-Sep-2020
    It worked out for the best then. It was meant to be!
    I look forward to reading more of your work!
Comment from Gert sherwood
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BethShelby your Poem with no letter A Mirrors
yes is well told and made me smile. Its too bad that you couldn't enter the contest. One wonderful thing I saw your poem is on fanstory as being All Time Best and Congratulations. Thank you so much for sharing your poem.
Gert

 Comment Written 22-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 22-Sep-2020
    Thank ;you for the review and nice comments. I might have gotten more reviews and comments this way than if I'd entered the contest.
    Beth
reply by Gert sherwood on 22-Sep-2020
    You are welcome Beth
    Gert
Comment from Colin John
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Hi Beth, this surely would have done well in the contest and gotta be quicker next time lol. I got disqualified for being 20 mins late,wish I had got something in then edited maybe. thanks for sharing Kind regards Colin

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 21-Sep-2020
    Thank you so much for the review and comments. Yes, I'll try to be quicker next time.
    Beth
reply by Colin John on 21-Sep-2020
    :)
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
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That's too bad Beth it would have been a good contender. Everything you say is so true, but we have to accept the bad with the good. The good is that as we age (most of us) we do discern things with a more enlightened view. We can't have beauty and wisdom both, I guess.

Ralf

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 21-Sep-2020
    Thank you so much for the review and nice comments. it is true not everyone becomes wiser with age but most of us have lived enough of life to become a little smarter.
Comment from amada
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It's amazing that you wrote these beautiful poem without using the letter a. Amazing. I like this following line the best: "In the dim morning light, wrinkles don't show. If something's different, I don't need to know..." Amazing work.

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 21-Sep-2020
    THank you for reviewing this. I really enjoyed your comments. I'm glad you like it.
    Beth
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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A clever write, well rhymed and I adore the sentiments here Beth. So many lines I love here: 'In the dim morning light, the wrinkles don't show', 'The urge to hold on is ever strong', and the final line is magical: 'Time comes with wisdom, discernment, plus truth'. Love Dolly x

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 21-Sep-2020
    Thank you for the review and comments. I'm glad you told me the lines you like best.
    Beth
Comment from Dena Brenner
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This is brilliant. Maybe, because I can relate to it too well! I am very impressed that I didn't even know about the no As until I finished reading. Your words and imagery are extremely poignant, but also accessible to all, not just women. Favorite line "the prize is not for the glory of youth" Good reminder!

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 21-Sep-2020
    Thank you so much. I really appreciate the review and I enjoyed your nice comments. I especially like the six stars.
    Beth
reply by Dena Brenner on 21-Sep-2020
    It was well deserved!