Comment from Y. M. Roger

Excellent

One night's temptation that can shape the rest of your life, yeah? :/ :/ A wonderful free verse offering for the contest here -- thanx so much for sharing and best of luck! ;)

Fingers desperate entwine --> [did you mean...?] Fingers desperately entwine

 Comment Written 19-Sep-2020

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reply by the author on 19-Sep-2020

Thanks for read and suggestion. I think I'll change it to passionately entwine.

Comment from roof35

Excellent

This certainly is a story of temptation. Makes one wonder, did they or didn't they? It is well written and the vacancy sign is the perfect illustration for the words that follow. Nicely done.

 Comment Written 19-Sep-2020

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reply by the author on 19-Sep-2020

Thanks much for the read and review. The question might be-- would I or wouldn't I. Oh, well, let's the reader ponder a bit.

Comment from RodG

Excellent

This is sensuous, not erotic, and it's easy to visualize the entire scenario. Even though I know she's being adulterous, I'm like the guy, hoping she says yes. Rod

 Comment Written 18-Sep-2020

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reply by the author on 18-Sep-2020

You are not alone. Thanks for the read, review and comment.