The Lonely Loon
Minute Poetry14 total reviews
Comment from tempeste
This entry gave me a bittersweet sensation.
Bitter because you made it appear that this loon was alone and this saddened me .. I know my reaction is nutty ..
I was so relieved when at the end of your poem we see that the loon was not alone but actually has a partner who is sitting in their nest on eggs.
Animals lives are wholly focus on finding a mate , procreating and bring up their off spring .. this secured their species.
Procreating for humans is important but it is not the only thing in our lives .. we have a job and we dedicate time to hobbies .. and not for every human having a family is a priority.
We can feel complete even if we don't have children.. but an animal without a mate has no purpose .
When a lion gets old ..younger lions will challenge him and sooner or later the older lion will lose not only his position but also his pride( females and his off spring will be killed ) ..
this tragic outcome has always saddened me..
Also after the old lion will live in solitude and die alone ( sigh)
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2020
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This entry gave me a bittersweet sensation.
Bitter because you made it appear that this loon was alone and this saddened me .. I know my reaction is nutty ..
I was so relieved when at the end of your poem we see that the loon was not alone but actually has a partner who is sitting in their nest on eggs.
Animals lives are wholly focus on finding a mate , procreating and bring up their off spring .. this secured their species.
Procreating for humans is important but it is not the only thing in our lives .. we have a job and we dedicate time to hobbies .. and not for every human having a family is a priority.
We can feel complete even if we don't have children.. but an animal without a mate has no purpose .
When a lion gets old ..younger lions will challenge him and sooner or later the older lion will lose not only his position but also his pride( females and his off spring will be killed ) ..
this tragic outcome has always saddened me..
Also after the old lion will live in solitude and die alone ( sigh)
Comment Written 20-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2020
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Franca, thank you so very much for this lovely review and comments on nature. Hugs!
Comment from tempeste
This entry gave me a bittersweet sensation.
Bitter because you made it appear that this loon was alone and this saddened me .. I know my reaction is nutty ..
I was so relieved when at the end of your poem we see that the loon was not alone but actually has a partner who is sitting in their nest on eggs.
Animals lives are wholly focus on finding a mate , procreating and bring up their off spring .. this secured their species.
Procreating for humans is important but it is not the only thing in our lives .. we have a job and we dedicate time to hobbies .. and not for every human having a family is a priority.
We can feel complete even if we don't have children.. but an animal without a mate has no purpose .
When a lion gets old ..younger lions will challenge him and sooner or later the older lion will lose not only his position but also his pride( females and his off spring will be killed )
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2020
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This entry gave me a bittersweet sensation.
Bitter because you made it appear that this loon was alone and this saddened me .. I know my reaction is nutty ..
I was so relieved when at the end of your poem we see that the loon was not alone but actually has a partner who is sitting in their nest on eggs.
Animals lives are wholly focus on finding a mate , procreating and bring up their off spring .. this secured their species.
Procreating for humans is important but it is not the only thing in our lives .. we have a job and we dedicate time to hobbies .. and not for every human having a family is a priority.
We can feel complete even if we don't have children.. but an animal without a mate has no purpose .
When a lion gets old ..younger lions will challenge him and sooner or later the older lion will lose not only his position but also his pride( females and his off spring will be killed )
Comment Written 20-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2020
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Thanks so very much Franca... you have made my day!
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is an interesting poem that I enjoyed. Looking for a nest on a misty day is delightful.
Well written. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2020
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This is an interesting poem that I enjoyed. Looking for a nest on a misty day is delightful.
Well written. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2020
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Thank you!
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello Mystery Writer!
What a lovely Minute Poem!
I lived on Loon Lake in northern Michigan a lifetime ago, when I first began my teaching career. One can never forget the song of the loon - eerie but beautiful.
The meter in a few of your lines is not strictly iambic pentameter, but that doesn't detract from your soulful offering.
Much enjoyed!
Thank you!
diane
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2020
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Hello Mystery Writer!
What a lovely Minute Poem!
I lived on Loon Lake in northern Michigan a lifetime ago, when I first began my teaching career. One can never forget the song of the loon - eerie but beautiful.
The meter in a few of your lines is not strictly iambic pentameter, but that doesn't detract from your soulful offering.
Much enjoyed!
Thank you!
diane
Comment Written 19-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2020
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Thanks so much Diane. I know you live on the U.P., but did not know about Loon Lake. I would love to camp there and hear the loons. Hugs! :)
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Hello Mystery Writer,
My Loon Lake is in Hale, Michigan = lower peninsula - east side of state = about 70 miles north of Saginaw.
Gorgeous! :)
Comment from Dick Narvett
A well-crafted minute poem that lets one see, hear and feel the environment. This simple tale of a male in search of his mate brings nature to life. The perfect picture is a plus.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2020
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A well-crafted minute poem that lets one see, hear and feel the environment. This simple tale of a male in search of his mate brings nature to life. The perfect picture is a plus.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2020
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Thanks so very much, Dick!!
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Nothing compares to that call in the early morn just before the sun! A great employment of the minute form here -- thanx so much for sharing and best of luck! ;)
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2020
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Nothing compares to that call in the early morn just before the sun! A great employment of the minute form here -- thanx so much for sharing and best of luck! ;)
Comment Written 19-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2020
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Thank you.
Comment from Loren .
I wish I had an extra star in my galaxy to shine down on this beautiful poem. I' d forgotten how beautifully you are able to coax such imagery with your words. I'm glad I saw this. Loren
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2020
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I wish I had an extra star in my galaxy to shine down on this beautiful poem. I' d forgotten how beautifully you are able to coax such imagery with your words. I'm glad I saw this. Loren
Comment Written 19-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2020
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Thanks so much Loren! Hugs!
Comment from roof35
You followed the rules and penned an excellent post for the Minute Poem Contest. The illustration is perfect and sets the stage for your words. Very nicely done.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2020
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You followed the rules and penned an excellent post for the Minute Poem Contest. The illustration is perfect and sets the stage for your words. Very nicely done.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2020
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Thank you.
Comment from RodG
You have combined photo and poem beautifully and put us there on that lake "at the edges of dawn" to listen to the "faint, haunting tune of lonely loon." The scene flows smoothly from beginning to end. I am not a big fan of the Minute format, but I really like this one. Rod
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2020
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You have combined photo and poem beautifully and put us there on that lake "at the edges of dawn" to listen to the "faint, haunting tune of lonely loon." The scene flows smoothly from beginning to end. I am not a big fan of the Minute format, but I really like this one. Rod
Comment Written 18-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2020
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Hi Rod... you have made my day with your encouraging comments. So very appreciated, my friend. :)
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My pleasure.
Comment from rspoet
This is an excellent minute poem for the contest
with wonderful imagery of the loon.
The rhymes and syllables are true to the form.
Some might quibble with the iambic meter, as in: dense, dampened spray,
but I don't think it will matter.
Perfect picture to match.
Well done.
Best wishes in the contest.
Robert
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2020
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This is an excellent minute poem for the contest
with wonderful imagery of the loon.
The rhymes and syllables are true to the form.
Some might quibble with the iambic meter, as in: dense, dampened spray,
but I don't think it will matter.
Perfect picture to match.
Well done.
Best wishes in the contest.
Robert
Comment Written 18-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2020
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Hey Robert... thanks so much, I am so glad you liked it!
