The Hit
a one hundred word story15 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, Bill,
Excellent entry for the 100 Word Dash Contest.
It's a complete flash fiction story about a couple in the worse situation possible. I didn't expect the ending. Well done. :)
Gypsy
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2020
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Hello, Bill,
Excellent entry for the 100 Word Dash Contest.
It's a complete flash fiction story about a couple in the worse situation possible. I didn't expect the ending. Well done. :)
Gypsy
Comment Written 21-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2020
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Thank you, GBR
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Wow! The punch line got me here and this is a tragic write and reminded of the Ruth Ellis case when she shot her lover and he was indeed shocked and the poor girl hung for it. Love Dolly x
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2020
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Wow! The punch line got me here and this is a tragic write and reminded of the Ruth Ellis case when she shot her lover and he was indeed shocked and the poor girl hung for it. Love Dolly x
Comment Written 20-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2020
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Thank you, Dolly.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the 100 Word Dash writing prompt.
This short piece tells a clear story with a surprise ending.
Well done and I wish you good luck with the contest.
Sharon
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2020
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I think this is a good entry for the 100 Word Dash writing prompt.
This short piece tells a clear story with a surprise ending.
Well done and I wish you good luck with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 20-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2020
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Thanks, Sharon.
Comment from lyenochka
Wow. I was not expecting that last sentence. You did a super job with setting up the scene, creating suspense and misleading the reader. I hope you win!
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2020
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Wow. I was not expecting that last sentence. You did a super job with setting up the scene, creating suspense and misleading the reader. I hope you win!
Comment Written 20-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2020
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Thanks, lyenochka
Comment from Liz O'Neill
Oh no...expletive deleted. What a great plot and ending. In 100 words you created the introduction, middle and end. What a surprise the ending is. This is such good writing it deserves A+.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2020
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Oh no...expletive deleted. What a great plot and ending. In 100 words you created the introduction, middle and end. What a surprise the ending is. This is such good writing it deserves A+.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2020
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Thank you, Liz
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written hundred-word flash fiction about the final hit job to the man who screw up and needs to be eliminated in his last moments realize his wife is the assassin appointed by the agency.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2020
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A very well-written hundred-word flash fiction about the final hit job to the man who screw up and needs to be eliminated in his last moments realize his wife is the assassin appointed by the agency.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2020
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Thank you, Sandra
Comment from equestrik
Oh man! I had a feeling about midway through. Dang, poor adoring dude but I guess, or hope he died still thinking of his adoration. This is well written and entertaining for sure.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2020
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Oh man! I had a feeling about midway through. Dang, poor adoring dude but I guess, or hope he died still thinking of his adoration. This is well written and entertaining for sure.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2020
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Thank you, equestrik
Comment from writer723
This is a well-written story and very interesting. Your details made the scenario suspenseful. The wife being the assassin was a surprise and a twist ending. It just goes to show that sometimes one can be sleeping with the enemy unaware.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2020
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This is a well-written story and very interesting. Your details made the scenario suspenseful. The wife being the assassin was a surprise and a twist ending. It just goes to show that sometimes one can be sleeping with the enemy unaware.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2020
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Thank you, 723
Comment from damommy
Yikes! That was certainly a surprise. His wife was the hit man. Well, at least, he knew it was coming and accepted it. What a shocker, though. Great story in these few words.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2020
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Yikes! That was certainly a surprise. His wife was the hit man. Well, at least, he knew it was coming and accepted it. What a shocker, though. Great story in these few words.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2020
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Thank you, Yvonne
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is a well written crime story entry for the 100 Word Dash. We all need to be mindful in this pandemic time. It's either guns or germ warfare. Well done!
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2020
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This is a well written crime story entry for the 100 Word Dash. We all need to be mindful in this pandemic time. It's either guns or germ warfare. Well done!
Comment Written 18-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2020
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Thanks, TT
