Suns delight
A 3 syllable per line poem10 total reviews
Comment from Susan Louise Gabriel
Oh, this just makes me long for the carefree days of summer when I was a teen and laid outside on the lawn to try to get a tan. You've done a really good job with what seems like a potentially difficult poetic structure to follow.
Excellent poem!
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2020
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Oh, this just makes me long for the carefree days of summer when I was a teen and laid outside on the lawn to try to get a tan. You've done a really good job with what seems like a potentially difficult poetic structure to follow.
Excellent poem!
Comment Written 14-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2020
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Hi Susan Thanks very much for your review and yes I can't wait for summer I love sunbaking and thought I would share my day No real sun since
cheers Christine
Comment from Tom Herndon
Hahaha! Reads like a Dr. Seuss. How delightful. Some of my faves:
warm my bones
other zones
not much on
just my thong (brilliant)
music soothes
stress removes
That was a lot of fun to read. Clear, simple, funny.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2020
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Hahaha! Reads like a Dr. Seuss. How delightful. Some of my faves:
warm my bones
other zones
not much on
just my thong (brilliant)
music soothes
stress removes
That was a lot of fun to read. Clear, simple, funny.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2020
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Hi Tom Thanks you for your review and yes I suppose a bit Dr Suessee LOL Had a lovely sunbake and thought this might sum it up
Cheers Christine
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written three syllable line poem about the little things we can enjoy in life like spending time in the sun and get some sunlight on your skin with music playing in the background.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2020
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A very well-written three syllable line poem about the little things we can enjoy in life like spending time in the sun and get some sunlight on your skin with music playing in the background.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2020
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Hi Sandra Thanks for your review and I do love a sunbake and waiting for another sunny day It is warmong up though lovely weather
Cheers Chris
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
A 3 syllable per line poem
Suns delight
by Chrissy710
Hello, good for you. I'm glad you get to go out and enjoy the sun. I like the syllable challenge. Most of my poems are like that. Great job, cheers,
Gypsy
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2020
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A 3 syllable per line poem
Suns delight
by Chrissy710
Hello, good for you. I'm glad you get to go out and enjoy the sun. I like the syllable challenge. Most of my poems are like that. Great job, cheers,
Gypsy
Comment Written 13-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2020
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Hi Gypsy Thanks heaps for your review and yes I love the sun I make my Vit D ( thats my excuse anyway LOL ) Waiting for more days to stretch out
Cheers Chris
Comment from LisaMay
OK - I won't give you a 'slip, slop, slap' lecture. You poor locked-up Victorians need any chance at happiness you can get, and lying in the sun relaxing to music sounds nicely therapeutic. You've expressed the simple pleasure very well. I hope your other zones don't blister.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2020
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OK - I won't give you a 'slip, slop, slap' lecture. You poor locked-up Victorians need any chance at happiness you can get, and lying in the sun relaxing to music sounds nicely therapeutic. You've expressed the simple pleasure very well. I hope your other zones don't blister.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2020
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Hi Lisa, Thanks for your review ( and no lecture Ha aha) And yes we are finally allowed out a bit more I live in regional Vic and restrictions have eased some so we can travel around Vic But not to Melbourne yet No blisters this time cant wait for next hot day this weekend I hope
Cheers Chris
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Chrissy, this is a delightful piece--creatively composed and vividly descriptive, flowing along telling your joyful story! I have posted a poem of this style, my first ever (Naive Lou and Clueless Cal--still active.)
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2020
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Chrissy, this is a delightful piece--creatively composed and vividly descriptive, flowing along telling your joyful story! I have posted a poem of this style, my first ever (Naive Lou and Clueless Cal--still active.)
Comment Written 13-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2020
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Hi Janice Thanks for ypur review and kind words I did read and review your poem great incentive for mine So Thanks and it is fun to do
we do enjoy a challenge Cheers Chris
Comment from aryr
Christine you did a great job with this. Only 3 syllables per line, amazing. I really enjoyed the picture choice and I think the background color enhanced it. Nice rhyme. I hope you didn't get burned, because it does sound like a wonderful stress release.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2020
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Christine you did a great job with this. Only 3 syllables per line, amazing. I really enjoyed the picture choice and I think the background color enhanced it. Nice rhyme. I hope you didn't get burned, because it does sound like a wonderful stress release.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2020
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Hi Ary, Thanks so much and have a go it was fun to do this style No burn and cant wait for next hot day so ai can lay out again Cheers Chris
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You are so welcome, Christine, whew glad you didn't get burned. Enjoy.
Comment from donette1914
This was so creative and so talented and this sounds so amazing about now
look forward into your next poem
thank you for sharing it was a pleasure
the photo went real well with this penned poem
very nice words to go with it
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2020
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This was so creative and so talented and this sounds so amazing about now
look forward into your next poem
thank you for sharing it was a pleasure
the photo went real well with this penned poem
very nice words to go with it
Comment Written 13-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2020
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Hi donette Thanks for a lovely review and kind words I had fun thinking this up bit the sun was helpful I love sunbaking my favourite pastime Glad you liked my effort Cheers Christine
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Hi Christine, this is a fun write and I am glad you are enjoying some freedom as your words are expressive and full of sunny light. Let us hope we can enjoy the outdoors more freely soon, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2020
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Hi Christine, this is a fun write and I am glad you are enjoying some freedom as your words are expressive and full of sunny light. Let us hope we can enjoy the outdoors more freely soon, love Dolly x
Comment Written 13-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2020
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Thanks Dolly For your review I will try and find out where I got the idea
Sorry to put you in it apologies I will let you know when I find out
Yes enjoying the sunshine it felt so good to feel the sun on my cold body Cheers Chrisx
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No problem Christine, I don?t want to take credit when someone else invented it. Have a wonderful day x
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Hi Dolly No it was Janet Canerdy who inspired me to do this
Comment from lyenochka
Enjoyed your celebration of the sun and sunbathing in your poem composed entirely of three-syllable lines. Great job! I'm glad that spring is coming your way!
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2020
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Enjoyed your celebration of the sun and sunbathing in your poem composed entirely of three-syllable lines. Great job! I'm glad that spring is coming your way!
Comment Written 13-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2020
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Thanks so much and so am I we all need some sunshine for many reasons Cheers Chris