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Renga is a Japanese linked poetry 5/7/5 and 7/7

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Comment from Y. M. Roger
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Beautiful tie-in of the Psalms here, Gypsy -- and such a lovely thought that Earth is the God's greenhouse! ;) Thanx so very much for that warm smile and reassurance, my lady! ;) Yvette

 Comment Written 13-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 13-Sep-2020
    Thank you very much for your review and kind words, Yvette. Take care.

    Hugs,

    Gypsy
Comment from lyenochka
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Loved how you took the lion into the spiritual realm with the "greenhouse of God" and the reference to the 23rd psalm. Then Roy followed with that same theme.

duells in the greenhouse of God (duels)


 Comment Written 12-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 12-Sep-2020
    Thank you very much for your review and fine feedback. I doubled checked the word shells and the dictionary says this:
    Duell: live in or at a specified place


reply by lyenochka on 12-Sep-2020
    Oh - then I misunderstood completely. I thought it was dueling with other beasts.
    The verb to live is usually spelled as "dwells." 'w' not 'u'
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2020
    Thank you, Helen, I fixed it. You are right. Even though I lived in the USA for most of my life, I still have problems with some words.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
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This is beautiful. I love the play words in the form of duells.
Also, perhaps the reader can be nudged towards looking at the colours used. A beauty in understatement.

 Comment Written 11-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 11-Sep-2020
    Thank you very much for your review and kind words.

    Hugs,

    Gypsy
Comment from royowen
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I've added to this, it seemed like a good opportunity to do so, a chapter dear to my heart. Your chapters are up to 71, which is a great achievement Gypsy, well done, great 7/7, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 11-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 11-Sep-2020
    Thank you very much for adding to our book and the fine review.

    Hugs,
    Gypsy
reply by royowen on 11-Sep-2020
    Excellent Gypsy
Comment from mermaids
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There is power and meaning in your words. The picture of the lion fits your first line "imperial animal". Your poem has a spiritual feel and flow to it. Excellent couplet that has meaning and makes the reader think.

 Comment Written 11-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 11-Sep-2020
    Thank you very much for your review and kind words.

    Hugs,

    Gypsy