The Diner
best place in town46 total reviews
Comment from Begin Again
Good screen play in a story - you introduced the characters and put them in place so well. None of your character description led up to the actual story (rioting and fire) until the very end, but you kept the reader fully entertained with who and what they were. An enjoyable read. Smiles to you.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2021
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Good screen play in a story - you introduced the characters and put them in place so well. None of your character description led up to the actual story (rioting and fire) until the very end, but you kept the reader fully entertained with who and what they were. An enjoyable read. Smiles to you.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2021
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Many thanks for checking this one out. GMG
Comment from pome lover
good heavens! what a story. and a rather surprising end, with the reader getting all interested in the characters and then....
Your mini bios were good and the details and description of the meals... and the story was getting enjoyable, and...
It sounds like some of the cities here, unfortunately.
Congratulations on your award and recognition. well deserved.
pome lover
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good heavens! what a story. and a rather surprising end, with the reader getting all interested in the characters and then....
Your mini bios were good and the details and description of the meals... and the story was getting enjoyable, and...
It sounds like some of the cities here, unfortunately.
Congratulations on your award and recognition. well deserved.
pome lover
Comment Written 12-Oct-2020
Comment from teols2016
It took me a bit to think about what exactly happened. The fact you didn't name a specific cause for the protest, or the attack on the diner, made things a bit confusing. But you were absolutely right not to name a cause. Your message condemns the violence and loss brought about when protests become violent. Well done.
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It took me a bit to think about what exactly happened. The fact you didn't name a specific cause for the protest, or the attack on the diner, made things a bit confusing. But you were absolutely right not to name a cause. Your message condemns the violence and loss brought about when protests become violent. Well done.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2020
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Congrats on your prize for this gripping piece. Masterful and vivid depictions of characters and scene--before and after the devastation. Fine work. Cheers. LIZ
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Congrats on your prize for this gripping piece. Masterful and vivid depictions of characters and scene--before and after the devastation. Fine work. Cheers. LIZ
Comment Written 12-Oct-2020
Comment from mermaids
You have a vivid use of words here and a variety of characters. I feel bad for these people who violently had their breakfast interrupted. You have a smooth flow of story and this is a true to life tale.
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You have a vivid use of words here and a variety of characters. I feel bad for these people who violently had their breakfast interrupted. You have a smooth flow of story and this is a true to life tale.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2020
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
This has become a common theme in the US right now. We have had riots every day for 2 months. Many have lost business and even homes. It is nuts and the people grow sick of it. They are finally doing something about it.
Really well written. Great background on each character and an unexpected outcome.
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This has become a common theme in the US right now. We have had riots every day for 2 months. Many have lost business and even homes. It is nuts and the people grow sick of it. They are finally doing something about it.
Really well written. Great background on each character and an unexpected outcome.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2020
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Giraffmang,
Nice piece of General Fiction having lucid as well as perfectly matching the theme phraseology, smooth but not so captivating flow as is found in your writings, and beautifully depicting its theme.
Hoping for something better and worth enjoying in days to come.
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Hello Giraffmang,
Nice piece of General Fiction having lucid as well as perfectly matching the theme phraseology, smooth but not so captivating flow as is found in your writings, and beautifully depicting its theme.
Hoping for something better and worth enjoying in days to come.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2020
Comment from Melissa Russell Deur
This story has an interesting point of view--inside out, not outside in. We see the customers in the diner and learn just enough about each one to care. And we meet Candice and Jasper, whose livelihoods depend on the success of the diner. We know nothing about the protesters or their "cause"--it could be any protest. But it's NOT peaceful! I felt enraged at the end--how DARE the protesters kill innocent people and destroy Jasper's business! How do those actions help their cause at all? Now I'm going to bed angry!
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This story has an interesting point of view--inside out, not outside in. We see the customers in the diner and learn just enough about each one to care. And we meet Candice and Jasper, whose livelihoods depend on the success of the diner. We know nothing about the protesters or their "cause"--it could be any protest. But it's NOT peaceful! I felt enraged at the end--how DARE the protesters kill innocent people and destroy Jasper's business! How do those actions help their cause at all? Now I'm going to bed angry!
Comment Written 11-Sep-2020
Comment from tfawcus
Graphic and powerful. Great character synopses and contrast between the scene before and after the event. Senseless acts of violence seem to be the norm these days, and it is always the innocent people who suffer.
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Graphic and powerful. Great character synopses and contrast between the scene before and after the event. Senseless acts of violence seem to be the norm these days, and it is always the innocent people who suffer.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2020
Comment from Sanku
can totally empathise with you as to why you wrote this .It was sharp and to the point. A scene where thoughtless action of a few people totally destroys lives of many. What do they achieve? Did they rally want to m achieve or they just wanted attention..
Thank you for posting this.
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can totally empathise with you as to why you wrote this .It was sharp and to the point. A scene where thoughtless action of a few people totally destroys lives of many. What do they achieve? Did they rally want to m achieve or they just wanted attention..
Thank you for posting this.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2020
