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Viewing comments for Chapter 12 "The Marquee"With their call stalled, Liz & Linda begin walking
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Comment from Ric Myworld
We all see things from many different perspectives, but some are so twisted we never know what to expect next. Then, there are those few who can put it on paper for readers to visualize. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2020
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We all see things from many different perspectives, but some are so twisted we never know what to expect next. Then, there are those few who can put it on paper for readers to visualize. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2020
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Thank you for your enriching review. I am honored. You are welcome to review some of the previous chapters in my portfolio. You don't need to do reviews. Just enjoy. Even if you went back to chap. 9 you'd get a lot out of it.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I think you have another strong chapter. Your use of viewpoint is excellent. We can see this through your characters eyes. The story is developing well and at a good pace. Great job.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2020
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I think you have another strong chapter. Your use of viewpoint is excellent. We can see this through your characters eyes. The story is developing well and at a good pace. Great job.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2020
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Thank you for your supportive review.
Comment from Marjon van Bruggen
I like this book and chapters especially for all the information I get about customs and way of living and thinking of native Americans, living in reserves. Added to that, there is the great adventure of all the girls, rescued by Liz and Linda. Their unbelievable travel to return home with their families. Great writing.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2020
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I like this book and chapters especially for all the information I get about customs and way of living and thinking of native Americans, living in reserves. Added to that, there is the great adventure of all the girls, rescued by Liz and Linda. Their unbelievable travel to return home with their families. Great writing.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2020
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Thank you for your supportive appreciative review. They're almost home. The next chapter is the conclusion. I got sad when realized this. I will miss the girls.
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Welcome, Liz. I'll read the conclusive chapter.
Comment from AnnieDawn
A very interesting chapter. I love reading about native American history even if it is fictional. You have a good start on your book. I don't know where this chapter fits in but there is some good groundwork here. Thanks for sharing and I hope to run into more of the chapters that you write.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2020
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A very interesting chapter. I love reading about native American history even if it is fictional. You have a good start on your book. I don't know where this chapter fits in but there is some good groundwork here. Thanks for sharing and I hope to run into more of the chapters that you write.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2020
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Thank you for your supportive appreciative review. They're almost home. The next chapter is the conclusion. You are welcome to go back at least about 4 chapter to appreciate more of their ritual. It is not necessary to write a review. Just enjoy.
Comment from equestrik
Another good and well written installment to your story. The thing I really liked was how all the girls came together and used their gifts in order to make sure everyone got to safety.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2020
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Another good and well written installment to your story. The thing I really liked was how all the girls came together and used their gifts in order to make sure everyone got to safety.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2020
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Thank you for your suppoetive review. I've got just one more Ch. I got sad as I redited it. I'll miss the girls. I will move on.
Comment from Mistydawn
I'm so glad that they are so close to home. Hopefully, the rest of their trip will be safe, nonproductive. Your story is well-written, interesting. Your characters came to life. I could feel their hope, their sorrow. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2020
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I'm so glad that they are so close to home. Hopefully, the rest of their trip will be safe, nonproductive. Your story is well-written, interesting. Your characters came to life. I could feel their hope, their sorrow. Nicely done.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2020
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Thank you for your supportive loyal review. I just finished the last one, the conclusion...now I'm sad again. I was sad when I originally finished writing it now I'm soon going to be posting the LAST of the girls. Then I move on. bwaaaa
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I know how that goes oh to well. My big thing is I change the conclusion over and over because I don't want it to end. This is why my characters never die. It's eaiser to say so long for now than goodbye.
Comment from aryr
Another great job, Liz. The discussion about the poverty, even the lack of running water and plumbing was pronounced and well planned. I seriously think that a lot of people are not aware of what actually is happening on a reservation. Unfortunately, the government steals the land, makes the Natives move, then slowly further steals from them or gradually forgets about them. I know of the Crow Nation Reservation in Montana and many others throughout the country and they are all despicable. No wonder, Native pride has taken a swing downward. Very well done, Liz.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2020
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Another great job, Liz. The discussion about the poverty, even the lack of running water and plumbing was pronounced and well planned. I seriously think that a lot of people are not aware of what actually is happening on a reservation. Unfortunately, the government steals the land, makes the Natives move, then slowly further steals from them or gradually forgets about them. I know of the Crow Nation Reservation in Montana and many others throughout the country and they are all despicable. No wonder, Native pride has taken a swing downward. Very well done, Liz.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2020
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Thank you for your supportive loyal review. I just finished the last one, the conclusion...now I'm sad again. I was sad when I originally finished writing it now I'm soon going to be posting the LAST of the girls. Then I move on. bwaaaa
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Life is going on , but the survival of an abduction event its not healing over night. Time and family supports its the key. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2020
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Life is going on , but the survival of an abduction event its not healing over night. Time and family supports its the key. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2020
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Thank you for your involved review. I'm glad you are enjoying it.
Comment from lyenochka
Wow! They made it! I was surprised that there wasn't more rejoicing over the escape out of the cave. But you wanted us to see the dire situation that the native people on reservation faced. You covered important historical facts. Now I'm wondering the the kidnapping actually occurred. I like your view of MT from the eyes of Vermonters.
Comments:
Her voice tone a little higher at the end of the statement. (needs a verb - unless you wanted it this way.)
"And yet the Navaho would be starving (Navajo) That's how you spelled it earlier.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2020
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Wow! They made it! I was surprised that there wasn't more rejoicing over the escape out of the cave. But you wanted us to see the dire situation that the native people on reservation faced. You covered important historical facts. Now I'm wondering the the kidnapping actually occurred. I like your view of MT from the eyes of Vermonters.
Comments:
Her voice tone a little higher at the end of the statement. (needs a verb - unless you wanted it this way.)
"And yet the Navaho would be starving (Navajo) That's how you spelled it earlier.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2020
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Thank you for your supportive involved review. I'm glad it is striking you as it is.
