This Present Road
A monorhyme for current times...32 total reviews
Comment from Sally Law
Remembering when it was safe to walk down the street with you, mystery poet. A friend of mine was boarding a plane and was asked to remove his patriotic face mask. It said nothing--just an American flag. The steward asked him to remove it, said it would be "offensive" to the other passengers. He did it because he was retired law enforcement and didn't want to cause a ruckus. He also noticed that there were several with offensive masks on the plane, unchecked.
All birds come home to perch, even the bad ones. Our nation is in deep trouble and what has been happening lets me know we are far from peace. I agree, "the spirit's pain won't be constrained!"
Sending you my best today as always, and best wishes for the contest. A winner here!!
Sally Law xo
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2020
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Remembering when it was safe to walk down the street with you, mystery poet. A friend of mine was boarding a plane and was asked to remove his patriotic face mask. It said nothing--just an American flag. The steward asked him to remove it, said it would be "offensive" to the other passengers. He did it because he was retired law enforcement and didn't want to cause a ruckus. He also noticed that there were several with offensive masks on the plane, unchecked.
All birds come home to perch, even the bad ones. Our nation is in deep trouble and what has been happening lets me know we are far from peace. I agree, "the spirit's pain won't be constrained!"
Sending you my best today as always, and best wishes for the contest. A winner here!!
Sally Law xo
Comment Written 02-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2020
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Hold on to those 'rememberings' as I'm not sure the Eagle will reign over the same America going forward... and that both breaks my heart and angers me at the same time. Thank you for your review, Lady Sal. :)
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I feel the same, dear mystery poet.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written monorhyme poem about the current tensions in a country much divided and everyone blames the other side and their words are mostly lies .
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2020
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A very well-written monorhyme poem about the current tensions in a country much divided and everyone blames the other side and their words are mostly lies .
Comment Written 02-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2020
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Thanks much, Sandra!
Comment from Veenbee
I love the imagery of the eagle's hilltop reign the the similarity of the human soul . Very nice usage of words.
I love the lines about time's weather vane, for me, giving time a pulse. Great job. Veenbee
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2020
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I love the imagery of the eagle's hilltop reign the the similarity of the human soul . Very nice usage of words.
I love the lines about time's weather vane, for me, giving time a pulse. Great job. Veenbee
Comment Written 02-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2020
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Thanks much, Veenbee.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A fine monorhyme and you brought a scene of carnage here as our freedoms and peace seem to be slipping away as life is changing and the scenes are filled with terror and unrest, a very descriptive write, much enjoyed and perfectly formed for the contest, a WINNER for me, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2020
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A fine monorhyme and you brought a scene of carnage here as our freedoms and peace seem to be slipping away as life is changing and the scenes are filled with terror and unrest, a very descriptive write, much enjoyed and perfectly formed for the contest, a WINNER for me, love Dolly x
Comment Written 02-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2020
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You are so right,
Dolly. Thanks so much for stopping by!
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"The Present Road", is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. With craft and skill, this talented poet has told it as it is. You KEEP WRITING and I'll KEEP READING. I very much look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2020
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"The Present Road", is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. With craft and skill, this talented poet has told it as it is. You KEEP WRITING and I'll KEEP READING. I very much look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2020
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Thanks much, Duchess!
Dear Anon,
You're very welcome!
God bless, take care and keep safe!
the Duchess
Comment from CrystieCookie999
You did a nice job with the perfect rhymes and half-rhymes going on here with the ain/aim sound. I like these lines best: Should note the coming hurricane
from dreams aflame
and lives defamed.
I think you mean ' dies are cast' instead of 'dyes.' Good luck in that contest!
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2020
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You did a nice job with the perfect rhymes and half-rhymes going on here with the ain/aim sound. I like these lines best: Should note the coming hurricane
from dreams aflame
and lives defamed.
I think you mean ' dies are cast' instead of 'dyes.' Good luck in that contest!
Comment Written 02-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2020
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Thanks much, CrystieCookie!
Comment from Fonda Little
My favorite part was, "And when the eagle cries again,
pray peace reclaim
freedom's refrain.", because there is power in prayer! I thought this last part was pretty clever also and worded very nicely!
The Lord led me to this verse after I read this,
Isaiah 40:31
New King James Version
31 But those who wait on the Lord
Shall renew their strength;
They shall mount up with wings like eagles,
They shall run and not be weary,
They shall walk and not faint.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2020
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My favorite part was, "And when the eagle cries again,
pray peace reclaim
freedom's refrain.", because there is power in prayer! I thought this last part was pretty clever also and worded very nicely!
The Lord led me to this verse after I read this,
Isaiah 40:31
New King James Version
31 But those who wait on the Lord
Shall renew their strength;
They shall mount up with wings like eagles,
They shall run and not be weary,
They shall walk and not faint.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2020
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Thanks much, Fonda!
Comment from Andrelyn Izquierdo
I really enjoyed your poem. It carried steadied rhythm all the way through and your choice of words stood out to me. Clever to begin and end with your picture subject, the eagle. I happen to like birds, which made your piece an extra plus. The Eagle's voice can either be the war cry or the power to lay things down in peace to renew again. Great job.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2020
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I really enjoyed your poem. It carried steadied rhythm all the way through and your choice of words stood out to me. Clever to begin and end with your picture subject, the eagle. I happen to like birds, which made your piece an extra plus. The Eagle's voice can either be the war cry or the power to lay things down in peace to renew again. Great job.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2020
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Wow, Andrelyn! You just gave the rest of the week a great uplifting smile - THANK YOU so much for your wonderful comments and those awesome stars! May you find lots to smile about in your corner of the universe this week - take care!
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You're welcome.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
What a majestic image and a majestic place: the eagle that represents resilience, hope and peace. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings and the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2020
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What a majestic image and a majestic place: the eagle that represents resilience, hope and peace. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings and the contest.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2020
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Thanks much, Iza!
Comment from equestrik
I think this is really well done and I love the patriotism and sense of pride in spite of difficult hurdles presented well and with strength and a strong consitution, good will prevail.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2020
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I think this is really well done and I love the patriotism and sense of pride in spite of difficult hurdles presented well and with strength and a strong consitution, good will prevail.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2020
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Thanks much, eqestrik!
