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Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Running to help"how live gives you lemonade
6 total reviews
Comment from royowen
Well done, to do it again, you must have been a bit naughty, please edit and read after you write these Iza. Blessings, Roy
Typo : saw me and ask(ed) me. 2: I asked her(e) 3 : the baker asked me for (many) money? 4 who needs to (go) and buy food 6: A blue ratio(n) card.
7 (okaI) mommy. Okay?
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2020
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Well done, to do it again, you must have been a bit naughty, please edit and read after you write these Iza. Blessings, Roy
Typo : saw me and ask(ed) me. 2: I asked her(e) 3 : the baker asked me for (many) money? 4 who needs to (go) and buy food 6: A blue ratio(n) card.
7 (okaI) mommy. Okay?
Comment Written 31-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2020
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Good Evening Mr. Owen, thank you so much for your wonderful review. You are so right I didn't reviewed my work properly, please forgive me for my silly mistakes.
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I forgive you
Comment from estory
A lot of family dynamics comes through in this little tale. We see you trying to smooth over the argument between your parents by going to buy the bread, and your parents shaken by your disappearance into worrying about you and going after you as you cross the busy intersection. We also get the innocence of the child here in that little scene of wanting to pay for the bread with buttons from your blouse. estory
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2020
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A lot of family dynamics comes through in this little tale. We see you trying to smooth over the argument between your parents by going to buy the bread, and your parents shaken by your disappearance into worrying about you and going after you as you cross the busy intersection. We also get the innocence of the child here in that little scene of wanting to pay for the bread with buttons from your blouse. estory
Comment Written 31-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much for taking a chance on this small memory:)
Comment from lyenochka
Oh my goodness! You were so fearless! Your poor parents were so worried. Where were your other siblings? Was it before they were born? God gave you a strong spirit and lots of protection!!
I told here that I'm going to buy bread. (her)
arguing about who needs to and buy food, (remove the "and")
- Okai, mommy. (Okay)
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2020
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Oh my goodness! You were so fearless! Your poor parents were so worried. Where were your other siblings? Was it before they were born? God gave you a strong spirit and lots of protection!!
I told here that I'm going to buy bread. (her)
arguing about who needs to and buy food, (remove the "and")
- Okai, mommy. (Okay)
Comment Written 31-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2020
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Hi Hellen, thank you so much for your wonderful review, and you are right as a child my Angel had a full time job:) of rescuing my button:)
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You were assigned the perfect angel for you! 😊💖
Comment from Colin John
Hi Iza, this is a very well written and interesting chapter of your amazing book. I have been off the bread for 6 weeks now and feel that I want some now lol. Cheers Colin
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2020
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Hi Iza, this is a very well written and interesting chapter of your amazing book. I have been off the bread for 6 weeks now and feel that I want some now lol. Cheers Colin
Comment Written 30-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2020
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MMM, make sure you buy the one hot from the oven:) it's the best:)
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Did not succumb Iza lol Cheers
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
(typos: asked me for many s/b money; okai s/b okay; story it's for another day s/b story is for ... ) Delightful tale, well told--buttons for coins--Mom showed up in the nick of time! Cheers. LIZ
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2020
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(typos: asked me for many s/b money; okai s/b okay; story it's for another day s/b story is for ... ) Delightful tale, well told--buttons for coins--Mom showed up in the nick of time! Cheers. LIZ
Comment Written 29-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2020
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Yes she made my day:)
Comment from Lucy de Welles
I just love your story, Iza! Such a simple story, but so sweet and shows the love of your parents for you. Shows that you are keen to take responsibility and get the job done. Give us this day our daily bread. So much in life to learn. Learn as we go. Can't wait to see what happens next.
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I just love your story, Iza! Such a simple story, but so sweet and shows the love of your parents for you. Shows that you are keen to take responsibility and get the job done. Give us this day our daily bread. So much in life to learn. Learn as we go. Can't wait to see what happens next.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2020