The Pulse of One Soul
Love is two souls becoming one.7 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
This is a lovely entry for this contest. When two souls become so entwined in life that they live as one being, it's such a beautiful thing. It's really the way God meant marriage to be. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2020
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This is a lovely entry for this contest. When two souls become so entwined in life that they live as one being, it's such a beautiful thing. It's really the way God meant marriage to be. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 01-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2020
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Thank you, Helen. I'm glad you liked it. :)
Comment from Becky Kern-Taylor
Beautiful picture, beautiful poem. What is better than a good marriage? It sets the stage for happy children, great in laws, aunts and uncles, and a happy life. My youngest son didn't tie the knot until he was 51. He married a 41 year old doll. they are so so happy and I rejoice that I don't have to worry about my single son. No children involved, only motorcycles.
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2020
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Beautiful picture, beautiful poem. What is better than a good marriage? It sets the stage for happy children, great in laws, aunts and uncles, and a happy life. My youngest son didn't tie the knot until he was 51. He married a 41 year old doll. they are so so happy and I rejoice that I don't have to worry about my single son. No children involved, only motorcycles.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2020
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Thank you, Becky. I'm glad you liked it. :) I know what you mean except for the great in laws. :)
Comment from To Write Is To Live
I like how you identify the angels of our better natures, described in lines 10-12, keep love alive between two people, and makes two souls into one!
Good luck in the Joseph's Star poetry contest!
Thank you for writing and sharing, "The Pulse of One Soul."
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2020
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I like how you identify the angels of our better natures, described in lines 10-12, keep love alive between two people, and makes two souls into one!
Good luck in the Joseph's Star poetry contest!
Thank you for writing and sharing, "The Pulse of One Soul."
Comment Written 30-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2020
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Thank you! I'm glad you liked it, for To Write Is To Live. :)
Comment from Mimi Linny
Very pretty and nicely written entry for the Joseph's Star writing prompt, telling the story of love of two blending to create a whole. Only comment would be that in the 2nd verse, 2nd line... The word "there're" is a little awkward - know you were going for 3 syllables, but am thinking that if you just change that word to "the," you would achieve the same meaning and still have a flow of 3 syllables. Again, nicely written piece and good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2020
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Very pretty and nicely written entry for the Joseph's Star writing prompt, telling the story of love of two blending to create a whole. Only comment would be that in the 2nd verse, 2nd line... The word "there're" is a little awkward - know you were going for 3 syllables, but am thinking that if you just change that word to "the," you would achieve the same meaning and still have a flow of 3 syllables. Again, nicely written piece and good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 30-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2020
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Hi, Mimi. :) I'm glad you told me about "there're". I looked it up and goy ore confused. Nobody agrees. "The" would be perfect except that the rules want complete statements on every sentence. It wouldn't work. I'm glad you like it.
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So sorry - I didn't know that there needed to be complete statements used for each line until I reread the rules. Again, nicely written and good luck in the contest!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
There is much togetherness in these words and I could feel the love and friendship too, a loving and thoughtful write, fine words, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2020
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There is much togetherness in these words and I could feel the love and friendship too, a loving and thoughtful write, fine words, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 30-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2020
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Thank you, Dolly. Coming from your pen I'm glad you liked it. :)
Comment from eliz100
Your poem has met the syllable count for this contest. You have told the story of love in a unique way. The picture matches the poem perfectly. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2020
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Your poem has met the syllable count for this contest. You have told the story of love in a unique way. The picture matches the poem perfectly. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2020
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Thank you eliz. I'm glad you liked it. :)
Comment from lancellot
It is different. I'll give you that, but I think it could have more depth and feeling. More to stir a cold heart. Now, I must say the presentation needs adjustment. The font color and background color makes it almost impossible to read. One or the other needs to be changed.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2020
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It is different. I'll give you that, but I think it could have more depth and feeling. More to stir a cold heart. Now, I must say the presentation needs adjustment. The font color and background color makes it almost impossible to read. One or the other needs to be changed.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2020
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Lancellot, I can't even see it! And can't get into it. :(
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I had to highlight it to see it. If the edit feature will not let you in, you can try sending a message to Tom, the Admin. He may be able to help you.
