seagrass plenitude (haiku)
The trail to my beach is bordered by seagrass...38 total reviews
Comment from Gert sherwood
amada your haiku
The trail to my beach is bordered by seagrass...
seagrass plenitude is excellent of how you bring out the natural of seagrass of how tits blades stand in splendor--
Gert
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2020
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amada your haiku
The trail to my beach is bordered by seagrass...
seagrass plenitude is excellent of how you bring out the natural of seagrass of how tits blades stand in splendor--
Gert
Comment Written 08-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2020
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Thank you so much, dear Gert.
Comment from Alchera
sun shines on tall grass
as its blades stand in splendor--
wind hushes its wings
Perfectly penned are set the set up lines with its dash and the punch line.
The juxtaposition of images exists and also the contrast with the fragment. It is a beautiful haiku!
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2020
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sun shines on tall grass
as its blades stand in splendor--
wind hushes its wings
Perfectly penned are set the set up lines with its dash and the punch line.
The juxtaposition of images exists and also the contrast with the fragment. It is a beautiful haiku!
Comment Written 08-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2020
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Thank you for your encouragement.
Comment from lightink
Beautiful imagery but the way it sounds when read out loud is even more beautiful...full of 's' alliteration and assonance and then quiets into 'w' alliteration. Delicious wording, Dear!
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2020
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Beautiful imagery but the way it sounds when read out loud is even more beautiful...full of 's' alliteration and assonance and then quiets into 'w' alliteration. Delicious wording, Dear!
Comment Written 30-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2020
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Thank you for your exquisite review to my haiku.
Comment from dragonpoet
Your words use orovide strong language Margery and god personification that seem to describe the artwork perfectly.
Good luck, keep writing, and stay healthy.
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2020
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Your words use orovide strong language Margery and god personification that seem to describe the artwork perfectly.
Good luck, keep writing, and stay healthy.
dragonpoet
Comment Written 30-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2020
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Thank you for reading my haiku and for your good wishes.
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My pleasure.
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Comment from Aussie
Simple but true. I liked the illustration to compliment your poem, is it pastel? From the most simple of nature's gifts is born an idea, pen to paper and your haiku has found life.
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2020
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Simple but true. I liked the illustration to compliment your poem, is it pastel? From the most simple of nature's gifts is born an idea, pen to paper and your haiku has found life.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2020
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Thank you, Aussie for reading and liking my haiku. The picture is not a pastel, unfortunately, I found it in FanArt, right here in FanStory. I truly appreciate your insightful review.
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You can download pictures for free on Bing.
Comment from Sallyo
Beautiful celebration of the play of light and wind on grass. The "blades" is correct, but also unexpected in the otherwise soft wording. Beautiful illustration, too.
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2020
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Beautiful celebration of the play of light and wind on grass. The "blades" is correct, but also unexpected in the otherwise soft wording. Beautiful illustration, too.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much for reading this haiku and for your comments.
Comment from elchupakabra
The subtle alliterations in this piece are strong and carry this haiku. It is very well done and I like the image. Good work here and best of luck in the contest. Later daze.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2020
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The subtle alliterations in this piece are strong and carry this haiku. It is very well done and I like the image. Good work here and best of luck in the contest. Later daze.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2020
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Thank you for reading my haiku and for your good wishes.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
very beautiful haiku I think will do very well in the contest. I love the metaphor wind hushes its wings. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest and with your writings.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2020
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very beautiful haiku I think will do very well in the contest. I love the metaphor wind hushes its wings. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest and with your writings.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2020
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Thank you for your sweet review.
Comment from estory
Nice job with this haiku format. You had the balance, the nature image, and something of an epiphany moment in that last line. So it had all the elements, I think, for a good haiku. I like that image of the sunlit splendor of the grass, that comes to life in the wind. It speaks of the spirit bringing our bodies to life. estory
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2020
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Nice job with this haiku format. You had the balance, the nature image, and something of an epiphany moment in that last line. So it had all the elements, I think, for a good haiku. I like that image of the sunlit splendor of the grass, that comes to life in the wind. It speaks of the spirit bringing our bodies to life. estory
Comment Written 29-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2020
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Thank you, estory. Your comments really sound like poetry to me!I Wow. Follow the thought...
Comment from RShipp
Because of your chosen picture as a guide, I was able to see myself walking the trail your have described just as I read your poem.
Beautiful work.
Best of luck in the Haiku Poetry Contest.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2020
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Because of your chosen picture as a guide, I was able to see myself walking the trail your have described just as I read your poem.
Beautiful work.
Best of luck in the Haiku Poetry Contest.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2020
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Thank you for your great review to my haiku about seagrass.