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With their call stalled, Liz & Linda begin walking

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Comment from Wabigoon
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Hi Liz--
I have the chance to learn a lot here, maybe. I lived in "Badger House" in Madison, WI, way back when and have always thought "Badger medicine" was involved in what I experienced there. I am delighted to read your assessment of what this might mean.
This is well done with maybe too many names and too much information all at once, at least for me.

Thanks
Wabigoon/Jeff

 Comment Written 05-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 06-Sep-2020
    Thank you for your involved appreciative review. I am delighted that you found connection with my meaning for Badger medicine. I'm gladyou are enjoying the story. There is one more chapter then we say good-bye to the girls.
Comment from AJ McCall
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First I will say, the picture captures the entire story in the women's face. My heart went out to those girls as they said the names of each of their missing family members. It's horrible that this actually happens. This was a heart-felt chapter. I'll be waiting for the next one!

 Comment Written 01-Sep-2020


reply by the author on 01-Sep-2020
    Thank you for your emotionally attached review. When I reread it to edit it, I became very agitated and teary. The next one is equally as emotional with a touch of anger. After this poem posted, I will post the next called the Marquee Light
Comment from Colin John
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Hi Liz, thank you for sharing this lovely story about these girls making their escape and I love all of the names that relate mainly to animals and nature and the likes,Look forward to reading more. Cheers Colin

 Comment Written 30-Aug-2020


reply by the author on 30-Aug-2020
    I am pleased that you are appreciationg my stories.
Comment from Marjon van Bruggen
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So they followed the track under the waterfall. I thought they would. I also heard of this possibility, that there is a narrow dry passage under a great waterfall. What cought my attention also was the moment of prayer, where all the girls dedicate their chant to members of the family who are deceased. Quite moving!

 Comment Written 30-Aug-2020


reply by the author on 30-Aug-2020
    Thank you for your appreaciative review. I got teary as I reread this to edit it. I wanted to impress upon readers how epidemic this problem is on the reservations; that it is possible that every girl here may have been personally impacted by human trafficking.
reply by Marjon van Bruggen on 30-Aug-2020
    Welcome, Liz, to the review.
Comment from Andrelyn Izquierdo
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I love how you have chosen to use Native traditions in using their nicknames/spirit animals as their identities and highlight their talents. It is interesting the situation they have found themselves in, but is nice how they are trying to work together for a common goal.

 Comment Written 29-Aug-2020


reply by the author on 30-Aug-2020
    Thank you for your interested review. I want to impress how much of an epidemic problem trafficking for Native women and teens. You are welcome to catch up on the the other chapters on my portfolio. There is no need to do reviews. Just enjoy.
reply by Andrelyn Izquierdo on 31-Aug-2020
    You?re welcome and thank you for the offer.
Comment from Lucy de Welles
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Smooth, clear, easy to understand story, moves forward at a moderately fast pace, which is nice because new reader can catch up quickly with story. Characters are interacting with their non-physical loved ones. Believing for certain outcomes. Taking things as they come. Taking the "good" with the "bad". Doing their duties. Dilemma of Coyote possibly muddling with Wolf's wisdom and blocking their direction out of the cave. Resolution to come...
Well done!
Lucy



"Several fired many questions at S(p)ring Blossom, the cave leader."

 Comment Written 29-Aug-2020


reply by the author on 29-Aug-2020
    Thank you for your involved review. You are welcome to catch up with the past chapters by going to my portfolio. There is no need to write a review, just enjoy.
Comment from aryr
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What a great picture choice, Liz? I do so enjoy how you add in the prayers and acknowledgements throughout. It is so true that Native Americans do chant and pray throughout the day and if awake at night, then that time as well. You show a bond that is growing in the group which is truly needed if they are to survive, to escape, to grow. An amazing job.

 Comment Written 29-Aug-2020


reply by the author on 29-Aug-2020
    Thank you so much for your refreshing review. I am so glad you have the highest appreciation for my writing.
reply by aryr on 30-Aug-2020
    You are so welcome, Liz, don't stop writing.
Comment from Mistydawn
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This is another great installment. It's well-written, very interesting. The ceremonies the girls performed made them and the hardships they had to endure seem more realistic. Made us have empathy for them. I look forward to reading more.

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2020


reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
    I was teary as I wrote and reread this ep. They are getting closer to the outside. But then I researched the landscape around the Reservation & it is quite a journey still to go to get down the mountain. Thank you for your loyal following and enthusiastic review.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
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Nice reunion and the circle time starts. All of the native girls have beautiful names. This chapter is calmer. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.

 Comment Written 27-Aug-2020


reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
    Thank you for your supportive review. I'm glad you appreciated it.
Comment from lyenochka
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I really liked your cave descriptions and that the sun is Grandfather and the moon is Grandmother. That gives me such a sense of being close to Nature. I smiled at "Brother Badger" because we have a poet here that goes by that.

Turtled watched as the (Turtle)
Whoa, you were right. We're really still dry". (not sure if the close quote marks are meant to be here or if you're missing an open quote.)

 Comment Written 27-Aug-2020


reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
    I am, as usual, very uplifted by your review. Thank you.