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Swallowtail Butterfly

200 Word Story Contest Entry

4 total reviews 
Comment from tempeste
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Ciao mystery poet, there was lots of competition but in the end I gave you my vote .. You have 4 now.

I enjoy observing what goes on in my wee patch of green ... once I was watching a spider sitting in his web waiting for insect to get stuck in his sticky net , when a tiny sparrow out of the blue swooped down and the predator became prey ..

Life is so unpredictable ... In the blink of the eye everything can change.

butterflies are so beautiful .. I love those bright green/ yellow ones ..

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2020


reply by the author on 30-Aug-2020
    Thank you so much for the great review, tempeste. So, the spider got snatched up, huh? Lol. Yep, we never know what the next heartbeat will bring. I really appreciate the gracious stars. I'm glad you liked this silly piece.

    Ron
reply by tempeste on 30-Aug-2020
    ️Ciao !

    I voted your entry because it had a meaning for me ..

    I'm very glad it won a position on the podium.

    ️Ciao !
Comment from writer723
Exceptional
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What a beautiful story! The ending was a bit sad for the poor butterfly, though. I enjoyed reading your colorful descriptions. You included some very vivid imagery. I felt the tranquility of a lovely morning scene. Your lovely tale reminds me of the hummingbirds who drink nectar from our feeders. Pretty picture that you used. Butterflies are so graceful.

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2020


reply by the author on 30-Aug-2020
    Wow, thank you so much for the fantastic review and giant sixer, Writer723. I dearly appreciate the gracious stars and kind comments. I'm glad you liked my little offering. I hope you have a wonderful rest of your weeknd. Thank you again.

    =]

    Ron
Comment from A Little Bird
Exceptional
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Congratulations on this well-written piece! How disappointing to have that poor little butterfly eaten at the last moment! At the same time; blue jays are also gorgeous animals and must eat something! Good luck with the competition!

 Comment Written 27-Aug-2020


reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
    Wow, thank you so much for the fantastic review and giant sixer, ALB. Not long ago a friend of mine saw these giant yellow butterflies in her back yard. One was snatched up by a blue jay right in front of her and its big yellow wings were hanging out of its beak as it flew away. That's what actually inspired this silly piece. I dearly appreciate the gracious rating and good luck wishes. I'm glad you liked my little story. Have a wonderful day and thank you again.
Comment from LisaMay
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Bugger!!!! What a spoilsport of a blue jay... just doing what comes naturally. You painted the peace and grace of the morning scene most poetically, lulling us with its tranquility.... then death strikes. It happens to us all.

 Comment Written 27-Aug-2020


reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
    lol. Yes it does. Thank you for the great review and stars, Lisa. I'm glad you liked this ridiculous piece.