Instant Life Change
Personal Experience10 total reviews
Comment from Liz O'Neill
Your use of alliteration is vivid. The literary technique of onomatopoeia will draw the reader in. This aproach creates a sensory experience on many levels. Well done.
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Your use of alliteration is vivid. The literary technique of onomatopoeia will draw the reader in. This aproach creates a sensory experience on many levels. Well done.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2020
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, anonymous,
A fine entry for the 2-4-4-12 writing prompt contest. Good syllable count and connection between lines. Nice presentation. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2020
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Hello, anonymous,
A fine entry for the 2-4-4-12 writing prompt contest. Good syllable count and connection between lines. Nice presentation. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2020
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Thanks for your review. Glad you enjoyed.
Comment from RShipp
Wow! A dramatic use of your syllable count!
I believe you have met the requirements of this contest: Write a poem that has the following syllable count. First line has two syllables, second and third line have four syllables, the final line has 12 syllables.
Good luck.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2020
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Wow! A dramatic use of your syllable count!
I believe you have met the requirements of this contest: Write a poem that has the following syllable count. First line has two syllables, second and third line have four syllables, the final line has 12 syllables.
Good luck.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2020
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Thanks for your review. Much appreciated.
Comment from Bill Schott
This 2-4-4-12, Instant Life Change, with an AABB rhyme scheme, finds that the automobile is the 'heavy equipment' one should not operate while distracted.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2020
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This 2-4-4-12, Instant Life Change, with an AABB rhyme scheme, finds that the automobile is the 'heavy equipment' one should not operate while distracted.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2020
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Thanks for your review. Much appreciated.
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is an easy to read, easy to understand short poem entry for the 2-4-4-12 Poetry contest. It should do well. I wish you the best of luck!
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2020
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This is an easy to read, easy to understand short poem entry for the 2-4-4-12 Poetry contest. It should do well. I wish you the best of luck!
Comment Written 25-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2020
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Thanks very much for your review.
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You're welcome.
Comment from Eternal Muse
Oh, you describe a horrible scene. Very fitting artwork. I hope the woman survived. When I think of accident - they are the most horrible disaster ever - and many end in death or permanent disability. Call for more careful driving. It is a shame, though, that many who caused these accident were sending text messages.
Great message in this poem and excellent presentation; I wish you a lot of luck in the booths.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2020
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Oh, you describe a horrible scene. Very fitting artwork. I hope the woman survived. When I think of accident - they are the most horrible disaster ever - and many end in death or permanent disability. Call for more careful driving. It is a shame, though, that many who caused these accident were sending text messages.
Great message in this poem and excellent presentation; I wish you a lot of luck in the booths.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2020
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Thanks for your review. Much appreciated.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a good job with your personal experience you wrote into verse for this contest, Mystery Writer. Your syllable count is correct per line, the image is startling but appropriate, and your concluding line sums it all up well. I like the way you rhymed your poem.
Thanks for sharing. Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2020
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You did a good job with your personal experience you wrote into verse for this contest, Mystery Writer. Your syllable count is correct per line, the image is startling but appropriate, and your concluding line sums it all up well. I like the way you rhymed your poem.
Thanks for sharing. Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 24-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2020
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Thanks for your review. Glad you enjoyed.
Comment from eliz100
You have met the syllable count for the constant. The title matches the content. As well as the picture is well related to the poem. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2020
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You have met the syllable count for the constant. The title matches the content. As well as the picture is well related to the poem. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2020
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Thanks very much for your review
Comment from Fred Berg
Interesting theme that's very visceral and gut wrenching. The bloody woman on the ground makes it more direct and much less interpretive. These 2-4-4-12 depictions are surprisingly spread apart in theme and can be powerful done right. Good job.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2020
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Interesting theme that's very visceral and gut wrenching. The bloody woman on the ground makes it more direct and much less interpretive. These 2-4-4-12 depictions are surprisingly spread apart in theme and can be powerful done right. Good job.
Comment Written 24-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2020
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Thanks for your review. Not an easy poem to do on many levels.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
We never know when changes come, changes are inevitable; life changes with the instant crashing of the car; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2020
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We never know when changes come, changes are inevitable; life changes with the instant crashing of the car; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
Comment Written 24-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2020
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Thanks for your review. This shows that life can change can change in a flash