Comment from Liz O'Neill

Excellent

I absolutely your use of personification. This is such vivid imagery. We've all been in storms like that, but not all as lucky to be with someone else where we can comfort each other. Well epressed.

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2020

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reply by the author on 26-Aug-2020

Thanks much for your read and encouraging comment.

Comment from RShipp

Excellent

'lightning scratching the sky' A great phrase!

I believe you have met the requirements of this contest: Write a poem that has the following syllable count. First line has two syllables, second and third line have four syllables, the final line has 12 syllables.

Good luck.

 Comment Written 25-Aug-2020

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reply by the author on 25-Aug-2020

Thanks for the read and review. Appreciated.

Comment from Pam (respa)

Excellent

-Very nice image and
presentation.
-The syllable count is good,
along with the topic and imagery.
-You describe the storm well,
and I like the ending as you
"hug in a gazebo."
-Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2020

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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2020

Thanks much for taking the time to read and review.

reply by Pam (respa) on 24-Aug-2020

You are quite welcome.

Comment from kiwisteveh

Excellent

Ha! I know I have a poem very similar to this (in terms of the 'story') in my portfolio, but I can't for the life of me remember what it's called so I can't compare the two...

Anyway, this is nice and meets the conditions well.

Good luck.

Steve

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2020

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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2020

I have that same problem with recall. Thanks for the read and the review.