Regal Transition
Aaah, the pomp and pageantry...18 total reviews
Comment from royowen
This is beautifully written and an excellent entry in this twilight 5/7/5. There's a certain way one has to write these short forms, and you've done all the right things, well done, beautifully written, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2020
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This is beautifully written and an excellent entry in this twilight 5/7/5. There's a certain way one has to write these short forms, and you've done all the right things, well done, beautifully written, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 23-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2020
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Thanks so much for your wonderful comments - so glad you enjoyed!
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Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written twilight 5-7-5 poem about the twilight zone that seems to mesmerize every creature on earth when the time seems to stand still for an hour between light and darkness.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2020
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A very well-written twilight 5-7-5 poem about the twilight zone that seems to mesmerize every creature on earth when the time seems to stand still for an hour between light and darkness.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2020
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Thanks so much for your wonderful comments - so glad you enjoyed!
Comment from kiwisteveh
I like the strong ending to your 5-7-5 poem - the crown metaphor works particularly well and the enjambment across lines 2 & 3 seems to enhance it as well.
Good luck in the contest.
Steve
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2020
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I like the strong ending to your 5-7-5 poem - the crown metaphor works particularly well and the enjambment across lines 2 & 3 seems to enhance it as well.
Good luck in the contest.
Steve
Comment Written 23-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2020
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Comment from Eternal Muse
I love the imagery and visuals on this - and I have to compliment your stunning artistic presentation and picture. You present a great scene to the reader and it holds reader spellbound.
I just have a problem with "the" before "heavens", perhaps it could be substituted by another word. How about "his firm hold on heavens"?
Nice use of metaphors. This should do extremely well in the contest, good luck in the booths.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2020
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I love the imagery and visuals on this - and I have to compliment your stunning artistic presentation and picture. You present a great scene to the reader and it holds reader spellbound.
I just have a problem with "the" before "heavens", perhaps it could be substituted by another word. How about "his firm hold on heavens"?
Nice use of metaphors. This should do extremely well in the contest, good luck in the booths.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2020
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I tried it both ways when I wrote it, but I like 'the' to indicate
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I tried it both ways when I wrote it, but I like 'the' to indicate the difference in heaven and sky... ?? Thanks for your suggestion and review.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
The state of twilight is well depicted as what is the state and status of earth then is also well expressed; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2020
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The state of twilight is well depicted as what is the state and status of earth then is also well expressed; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
Comment Written 23-Aug-2020
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Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You described the sky at night here with its sparkling magic and majestic scene as we look up the heavens and expect to be moved, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
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reply by the author on 23-Aug-2020
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You described the sky at night here with its sparkling magic and majestic scene as we look up the heavens and expect to be moved, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
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Comment Written 23-Aug-2020
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Comment from Tina Crute
Winner! Your short poem calls the reader to imagine the every day occurence of nightfall, to be something regal and breathtaking. I love the imagination. Word choices, like proud, cedes, dons...give your entry a feel of the changing of the guard.
I love this. Very enjoyable!
Tina
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Winner! Your short poem calls the reader to imagine the every day occurence of nightfall, to be something regal and breathtaking. I love the imagination. Word choices, like proud, cedes, dons...give your entry a feel of the changing of the guard.
I love this. Very enjoyable!
Tina
Comment Written 22-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2020
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Well, I'm definitely smiling over here: what a wonderful review and such a star-filled display! Thank you so very much, Tina!
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I couldnt help myself! That's when I give the 6!
Tina
Comment from roof35
Your lovely illustration sets the stage for your lovely words. You followed the rules and penned an excellent poem. I like the reference to the starry crown. Nicely done.
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reply by the author on 23-Aug-2020
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Your lovely illustration sets the stage for your lovely words. You followed the rules and penned an excellent poem. I like the reference to the starry crown. Nicely done.
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Comment Written 22-Aug-2020
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