A Hopeless Case
A rhymed poem for the contest56 total reviews
Comment from Jg
Indeed an excellent use of rhyme scheme , the word choice complexity makes it exciting and different to read . This is an excellent poem , well written . Thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2020
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Indeed an excellent use of rhyme scheme , the word choice complexity makes it exciting and different to read . This is an excellent poem , well written . Thanks for sharing
Comment Written 31-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2020
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Thanks very much for dropping by to review my work, JG. Appreciated. Thank you, too, for your kind words. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from Cindy Warren
Congratulations on your win. I'm seeing this a bit late, but I think it was well deserved. I think this guy is spifflicated. It's an old-fashioned word I recently learned here on FS. It means just plain drunk, but it sounds better, don't you think?
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2020
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Congratulations on your win. I'm seeing this a bit late, but I think it was well deserved. I think this guy is spifflicated. It's an old-fashioned word I recently learned here on FS. It means just plain drunk, but it sounds better, don't you think?
Comment Written 29-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2020
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Thanks for dropping by to review, Cindy. Spifflicated is a great word. I haven't heard it for ages.
Comment from AlmostaJRK
Sounds like a poem about a drunk written by someone who doesn't drink. Someone who makes fun of a drunk without ever having walked in their shoes. But it rhymes an has fancy words.
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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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Sounds like a poem about a drunk written by someone who doesn't drink. Someone who makes fun of a drunk without ever having walked in their shoes. But it rhymes an has fancy words.
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Comment Written 28-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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Not quite what I had in mind, but I appreciate your point of view. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Contests
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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 A contest winning entry! A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for posting the winning contest entry. |
Comment Written 28-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2020
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Many thanks to the committee for honouring a hopeless case.
Comment from catch22
Hi Tony, this is an excellent sonnet with your characteristic inventive rhymes and excellent meter. You even incorporate a bit of dark humor in this write as you describe a bitter and aging academic. Excellent write.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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Hi Tony, this is an excellent sonnet with your characteristic inventive rhymes and excellent meter. You even incorporate a bit of dark humor in this write as you describe a bitter and aging academic. Excellent write.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2020
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As always, I appreciate your perceptive review, Pam. Glad you enjoyed my poem. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from lyenochka
Sorry to be reviewing this so late, Tony! A wonderful sonnet which makes me wonder how much to read into the choice of Strunk's name. For I only know of E. B. White and Strunk's writing reference. Without that distraction, I feel like this poor professor was just overdosed on something but perhaps it's in this state, he writes poetry best though tripping on his "twisted tongue," he might be rhyming perfecting. I'm sure you'll do well in the contest!
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2020
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Sorry to be reviewing this so late, Tony! A wonderful sonnet which makes me wonder how much to read into the choice of Strunk's name. For I only know of E. B. White and Strunk's writing reference. Without that distraction, I feel like this poor professor was just overdosed on something but perhaps it's in this state, he writes poetry best though tripping on his "twisted tongue," he might be rhyming perfecting. I'm sure you'll do well in the contest!
Comment Written 25-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2020
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Thank you, Helen. I appreciate your comments. Yes, I was referring to Strunk of Elements of Style fame. I think he'd have found the poet a little loquacious! LOL
Best wishes, Tony
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Lol! Yes, I wonder if any one of us would live up to Prof. Strunk's standards.
Comment from angel123
Wow! great writing here in your Rhyming poem entry. Your poem has a powerful message about darkness that lies within an individual. It rhymes well and I like your black background and red lettering, which went well with the darkness of your poem. Best wishes!
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2020
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Wow! great writing here in your Rhyming poem entry. Your poem has a powerful message about darkness that lies within an individual. It rhymes well and I like your black background and red lettering, which went well with the darkness of your poem. Best wishes!
Comment Written 25-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much for your kind words, Angel. Much appreciated. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Tina Crute
What an interesting poem. It is deeper than I thought at first glance. You describe well the horror both with your dramatic colors and striking words, of being out of your mind, unaware of reality. Whether drunk or inebriated, I don't think the professor would remember his answer in the morning!
Thank you for sharing something different than I usually read.
Tina
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2020
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What an interesting poem. It is deeper than I thought at first glance. You describe well the horror both with your dramatic colors and striking words, of being out of your mind, unaware of reality. Whether drunk or inebriated, I don't think the professor would remember his answer in the morning!
Thank you for sharing something different than I usually read.
Tina
Comment Written 24-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much for your kind words, Tina. Much appreciated. Best wishes, Tony
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You are very welcome!
Comment from Debra White
Hello Tony,
I really enjoyed your rhymed poem and wish you the best of luck in the contest.
You had me looking up the meanings of quite a few words today!
Perfect meter and rhyme and excellent use of enjambment. I also enjoyed your effective touches of alliteration throughout, especially 'slips with slobber'. The imagery is vivid and your presentation, striking.
Best wishes, Debra :)
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2020
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Hello Tony,
I really enjoyed your rhymed poem and wish you the best of luck in the contest.
You had me looking up the meanings of quite a few words today!
Perfect meter and rhyme and excellent use of enjambment. I also enjoyed your effective touches of alliteration throughout, especially 'slips with slobber'. The imagery is vivid and your presentation, striking.
Best wishes, Debra :)
Comment Written 24-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much for your kind words and for the award of a sixth star, Debra. Much appreciated. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Brenda Elizabeth Rose
Your poem was an unusual poem and seemed full of darkness. The rhyme and rhythm were perfect. I found the red font on a black background was hard to read. Thank you for sharing. ~Brenda
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2020
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Your poem was an unusual poem and seemed full of darkness. The rhyme and rhythm were perfect. I found the red font on a black background was hard to read. Thank you for sharing. ~Brenda
Comment Written 24-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much for your comments, Brenda. Much appreciated. Best wishes, Tony
