Tiny Birds Cuddle
A 5/7/5 at close of day.10 total reviews
Comment from tempeste
�Ciao mystery poet.. You poem stood out from the rest ..you have now 2 votes.
In my country the swallows migrate to Africa for winter..
These tiny critters I imagine have no alternative but to face the cold temperatures of winter ..they look so cute huddled next door to each other ..
The two on the ends must feel the cold more ..
Probable they rotate positions like the emperor penguins ..they too huddle together but in a huge circle ..... at intervals those on the outer rim swap with those much warmer inside.
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�Ciao mystery poet.. You poem stood out from the rest ..you have now 2 votes.
In my country the swallows migrate to Africa for winter..
These tiny critters I imagine have no alternative but to face the cold temperatures of winter ..they look so cute huddled next door to each other ..
The two on the ends must feel the cold more ..
Probable they rotate positions like the emperor penguins ..they too huddle together but in a huge circle ..... at intervals those on the outer rim swap with those much warmer inside.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2020
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is an easy to read, easy to understand short poem entry for the 5-7-5 Poetry contest. It should do well. I wish you the best of luck!
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This is an easy to read, easy to understand short poem entry for the 5-7-5 Poetry contest. It should do well. I wish you the best of luck!
Comment Written 25-Aug-2020
Comment from Markie Doczi
Great little poem! Sometimes the shortest ones are the best ones- I'm a big believer in 'less is more.'
-You had me at 'cheep!'
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2020
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Great little poem! Sometimes the shortest ones are the best ones- I'm a big believer in 'less is more.'
-You had me at 'cheep!'
Comment Written 24-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2020
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I'm pleased you appreciated my poem. Thank you for your comments!
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
What a beautiful picture, Mystery Author. Your contest entry pairs perfectly with it. I like the alliteration of h, d, & c. Your words flow smoothly to tell a great moment before darkness takes over the land. Your notes are informative.
Thanks for sharing. Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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What a beautiful picture, Mystery Author. Your contest entry pairs perfectly with it. I like the alliteration of h, d, & c. Your words flow smoothly to tell a great moment before darkness takes over the land. Your notes are informative.
Thanks for sharing. Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 22-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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Thanks for your super review, Jan.
Comment from equestrik
This is so very sweet. Your words and the photo go very well together and made me smile. I love birds from the tiny hummingbirds to the regal eagles. Sweet poem.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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This is so very sweet. Your words and the photo go very well together and made me smile. I love birds from the tiny hummingbirds to the regal eagles. Sweet poem.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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I am a bird lover so i keep noticing anything to do with birds. When I saw this photo in the local paper i knew there was a potential poem in the waiting.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 5-7-5 twilight poem about the little birds starting to cuddle while they watch the dusk coming closer until it us dark and they settle in for the night.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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A very well-written 5-7-5 twilight poem about the little birds starting to cuddle while they watch the dusk coming closer until it us dark and they settle in for the night.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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Thanks for your review!
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This one must have a 6! You have made superb use of your seventeen syllables, strong word choices, alliteration, and that GREAT pun, since little birds make that "cheeping" sound to communicate!
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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This one must have a 6! You have made superb use of your seventeen syllables, strong word choices, alliteration, and that GREAT pun, since little birds make that "cheeping" sound to communicate!
Comment Written 22-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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Super review - thank you so much!
Comment from Earl Corp
I wish I still had a six star rating left to give you. Anyone who can write a 5-7-5 poem that rhymes, makes sense, and is entertaining truly deserves one. Good luck in the contest. Stay safe and stay healthy.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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I wish I still had a six star rating left to give you. Anyone who can write a 5-7-5 poem that rhymes, makes sense, and is entertaining truly deserves one. Good luck in the contest. Stay safe and stay healthy.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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Thanks for your kind words!
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This is a good observation and the story appears very well stated; let the tiny birds cuddle, let them talk cheap; well said. ALCREATOR
Typo:
Cheep (Cheap)
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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This is a good observation and the story appears very well stated; let the tiny birds cuddle, let them talk cheap; well said. ALCREATOR
Typo:
Cheep (Cheap)
Comment Written 22-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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Thanks for your review. I have spelled it "cheep" on purpose because that is how tiny birds talk to each other.
Comment from Sheila Golding
Aww lovely picture, need my eyes checking, thought it was a chocolate eclair at first glimpse . What beautiful birds, great to see wildlife in other countries. Thank you , enjoyed this post .
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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Aww lovely picture, need my eyes checking, thought it was a chocolate eclair at first glimpse . What beautiful birds, great to see wildlife in other countries. Thank you , enjoyed this post .
Comment Written 22-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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You made my day with this terrific rating! They do look like a choc eclair... when I first saw the photo I thought it was a bad set of teeth!
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Ha, ha not just my eyesight then 😄
