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"Heart Spoken Moments"

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Fine poetry and stories from the Heart

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Comment from Fred Berg
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I can see there is very raw emotion in this writing, and it seems like the first iteration of something that could be very powerful and meaningful after a bit of refinement.

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2020

reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
    This is a basic grieving poem.
    The Father's lost for his son.
    Whom gave his organs and saved four lives.
    Refinement?
    this has to be a joke?
    Because everybody else gave it five and six star reviews.
    I would just appreciate if you don't review my work.
    Especially when it has to deal with my son.
    Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by Fred Berg on 20-Aug-2020
    No offense meant, friend. It's a 5 star experience, 5 star grief, 5 star heart wrenching tragedy; the words just weren't there yet. Did you write it in steam of conciousness?
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
    Basically friend after you lose your son in eight months later your wife commits suicide you lose your career job you lose your house and you lose yourself you start to journal.
    I've done it hundreds of thousands of times in over 700 bucks I'm starting to publish just beginning April but a company called Xilibris.
    They do picture books they're going to handle three of my fairy tale books.
    I've been world ranked by number Three Covington's Who's Who.
    in 2014.
    Number one writer in the world I wrote.
    (190 books in 3 months)
    I'm also now working with a company called Strathmore's who's here to ranked Number T
    two.
    In other words for the past 17 years besides competing with the "International Society of poetry.
    crossed two different states I become well represented in it respected
Comment from Mary Furlong
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I like several things about this poem. The repetition of the title line is very effective. The ay sounds are another pleasing repeat, and 2more you is a intriguing invention. I'm so sorry about your loss. Thank you for the info about organ donation.

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2020

reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
    Why thank you Mary for your kind thought as always.
    And, thank you for your five stars.
    Why?
    Because Fred Berg reviewed it before you and gave it two stars!
    And, says it needs refinement?
    Ricky