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A Peppered Pickle5 total reviews
Comment from Christy Mahon
Seem to be finding that you're a Dolly adherent. And as I've mentioned before you adhere so well to the structure. However, I like this piece for the content more than anything. I can only assume, and hope, that you're not paying attention to the American presidential election season, but this piece would be perfect to inflict upon Trump's MAGA maniacs. Their main motivation seems to stem from their deep seated jealousy that someone else might be getting more than them. And according to them it's always undeserved and so unfair.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2020
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Seem to be finding that you're a Dolly adherent. And as I've mentioned before you adhere so well to the structure. However, I like this piece for the content more than anything. I can only assume, and hope, that you're not paying attention to the American presidential election season, but this piece would be perfect to inflict upon Trump's MAGA maniacs. Their main motivation seems to stem from their deep seated jealousy that someone else might be getting more than them. And according to them it's always undeserved and so unfair.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2020
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Hi Christy, Thanks for reviewing me again :)
I'm not an adherent to anyone! I just had a go with a particular format a few times in succession - I like a challenge.
Most of my stuff tends to be rhymed but very rarely to a specific format. I also try my hand at free verse from time to time and write the odd short prose. I'm a bit of a have-a-goer :) Feel free to dig around my portfolio if you find yourself at a loose end!
I don't pay much attention to politics (at all) to be honest. Trump is a crazy man and a big spoiled baby - it's scary that he is in such a powerful position. He's an accident waiting to happen.
Cheers, Debra :)
Comment from LisaMay
You have made a fine poem whose sentiments suit the peppered pickle form - the topic, your thoughts, and then a summary of Greed are very well expressed - oh, so true. The photo is very suitable - she does look avaricious; I hope she grew out of it, but probably not. Mean girl!
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2020
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You have made a fine poem whose sentiments suit the peppered pickle form - the topic, your thoughts, and then a summary of Greed are very well expressed - oh, so true. The photo is very suitable - she does look avaricious; I hope she grew out of it, but probably not. Mean girl!
Comment Written 21-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2020
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I know, she looks a right piece of work, doesn?t she?! Thanks for your great feedback, I appreciate it :)
Comment from lyenochka
A very well done peppered pickle poem! And I like your choice of picture as the sin of "greed, avarice, covetousness" shows up quite early in life. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2020
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A very well done peppered pickle poem! And I like your choice of picture as the sin of "greed, avarice, covetousness" shows up quite early in life. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 21-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much for your great feedback. I appreciate it :)
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Hope you do well in the contest!
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Aw, thank you, that?s really nice of you :)
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a good job with your succinct poem for the contest, Mystery Writer. I enjoyed reading it. Your poem is in good form according to the rules. The color scheme and image are fitting, too.
Thanks for sharing. Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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You did a good job with your succinct poem for the contest, Mystery Writer. I enjoyed reading it. Your poem is in good form according to the rules. The color scheme and image are fitting, too.
Thanks for sharing. Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 19-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much for your kind and encouraging feedback :)
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Okay, the pickle makes the reader grin, but that pic is the PERFECT accompaniment for it!! ;) A great offering for the contest, here -- thanx for sharing and best of luck! ;)
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2020
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Okay, the pickle makes the reader grin, but that pic is the PERFECT accompaniment for it!! ;) A great offering for the contest, here -- thanx for sharing and best of luck! ;)
Comment Written 19-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much for your feedback and good luck wishes, I appreciate both! Best wishes :)
